A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
For the most part the prose is fine, spelling & grammar are ok too but I think the lead section should be made clearer re: the investigations into possible corruption into county law enforcement while Sheriff Stone was in charge from 1978-1994 and the subsequent investigation that found corruption while Sheriff Maynor was Robeson County Sheriff from 1994-2006. Maybe the last sentence in the lead section could be changed to something along the lines of "The governor's task force ultimately found no evidence of wrongdoing at that time in the Robeson County sheriff's office while it was supervised by Sheriff Hubert Stone." The different County Sheriffs and the complete timeline could be confusing to someone not familiar with the events.
Shearonink (
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18:14, 23 January 2023 (UTC)reply
Clarified that no evidence of corruption was turned up "at the time." -
Indy beetle (
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In the "State proceedings" section, this sentence "Jacobs fled to the Onondaga Reservation in New York and, after being identified by local police during a traffic stop, was ordered to be extradited by the governor." exactly which governor of which state(New York or North Carolina) is a little unclear.
Shearonink (
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07:52, 24 January 2023 (UTC)reply
Hubert Stone was definitely a shady fellow. As I recounted on his own Wikipedia article, he was accused by another deputy under oath of participating in a protection racket with a drug dealer and was never investigated for it. There's also speculation of him being involved in coverups surrounding the murders of
Julian Pierce and
James R. Jordan Sr.. That said, he was never convicted or otherwise definitely proven to have done anything wrong, and he always denied ever doing anything improper, so I don't think its fair for us to say in Wikivoice that he did. If you'd like, I can summarize his quote in more neutral Wikivoice along the lines of "Having retired in 1994, Stone maintained that under his supervision deputies did not engage in corrupt activities."
That makes sense, re: neutral Wikivoice. I just thought it was interesting that he wasn't investigated somanytimes y'know? Your proposed adjustment looks good.
Shearonink (
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03:07, 25 January 2023 (UTC)reply
This sentence "Corruption in the Robeson County Sheriff's Department was later uncovered by a state investigation in the 2000s." is unnecessarily vague. The term "2000s" could mean anywhere from the year 2000 until ...? Specific years or a specific timeframe should be provided.
Shearonink (
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00:21, 24 January 2023 (UTC)reply
Noted that the investigation began in 2002.
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing
edit war or content dispute:
Criteria 1A and Criteria 4 should be adjusted or need to be replied to before I can proceed any further. All other Criteria are basically a Yes. Criteria 2B is just a nicety, I want
Indy beetle to know that the Greg Barnes/Tarnished Badges content is available for free (might want to webarchive it).
Shearonink (
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21:10, 24 January 2023 (UTC)reply
With regards to the Barnes article, yes I'm aware of it being available there. That was actually where I first located it, I then went back through my university database to confirm it and cited it directly to the newspaper's website. November.org looks like a blog so I figured that it wasn't the best thing to cite. -
Indy beetle (
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A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
For the most part the prose is fine, spelling & grammar are ok too but I think the lead section should be made clearer re: the investigations into possible corruption into county law enforcement while Sheriff Stone was in charge from 1978-1994 and the subsequent investigation that found corruption while Sheriff Maynor was Robeson County Sheriff from 1994-2006. Maybe the last sentence in the lead section could be changed to something along the lines of "The governor's task force ultimately found no evidence of wrongdoing at that time in the Robeson County sheriff's office while it was supervised by Sheriff Hubert Stone." The different County Sheriffs and the complete timeline could be confusing to someone not familiar with the events.
Shearonink (
talk)
18:14, 23 January 2023 (UTC)reply
Clarified that no evidence of corruption was turned up "at the time." -
Indy beetle (
talk)
In the "State proceedings" section, this sentence "Jacobs fled to the Onondaga Reservation in New York and, after being identified by local police during a traffic stop, was ordered to be extradited by the governor." exactly which governor of which state(New York or North Carolina) is a little unclear.
Shearonink (
talk)
07:52, 24 January 2023 (UTC)reply
Hubert Stone was definitely a shady fellow. As I recounted on his own Wikipedia article, he was accused by another deputy under oath of participating in a protection racket with a drug dealer and was never investigated for it. There's also speculation of him being involved in coverups surrounding the murders of
Julian Pierce and
James R. Jordan Sr.. That said, he was never convicted or otherwise definitely proven to have done anything wrong, and he always denied ever doing anything improper, so I don't think its fair for us to say in Wikivoice that he did. If you'd like, I can summarize his quote in more neutral Wikivoice along the lines of "Having retired in 1994, Stone maintained that under his supervision deputies did not engage in corrupt activities."
That makes sense, re: neutral Wikivoice. I just thought it was interesting that he wasn't investigated somanytimes y'know? Your proposed adjustment looks good.
Shearonink (
talk)
03:07, 25 January 2023 (UTC)reply
This sentence "Corruption in the Robeson County Sheriff's Department was later uncovered by a state investigation in the 2000s." is unnecessarily vague. The term "2000s" could mean anywhere from the year 2000 until ...? Specific years or a specific timeframe should be provided.
Shearonink (
talk)
00:21, 24 January 2023 (UTC)reply
Noted that the investigation began in 2002.
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing
edit war or content dispute:
Criteria 1A and Criteria 4 should be adjusted or need to be replied to before I can proceed any further. All other Criteria are basically a Yes. Criteria 2B is just a nicety, I want
Indy beetle to know that the Greg Barnes/Tarnished Badges content is available for free (might want to webarchive it).
Shearonink (
talk)
21:10, 24 January 2023 (UTC)reply
With regards to the Barnes article, yes I'm aware of it being available there. That was actually where I first located it, I then went back through my university database to confirm it and cited it directly to the newspaper's website. November.org looks like a blog so I figured that it wasn't the best thing to cite. -
Indy beetle (
talk)