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Hi, I undid the plot summary as it's an inaccurately hagiographic summarization of what is a highly critical biography. In particular, it elides most of the description of how Dirubhai Ambani used market manipulation and irregular financial accounting - including declaring an 18-month fiscal year - to abuse his own shareholders and the trust of the capital markets. It also elides numerous instances of anticompetitive and corrupt behavior that Dirubhai exhibited while he sought to scale RIL.
Lostromantic ( talk) 14:32, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
Hi I am a student enrolled at the University of Sydney and as part of one of my courses I have been assigned to improve this stub. I have made several additions to the article (Background, Synopsis and a Sequel section). I will be continuing to edit this article for the next two weeks and would much appreciate any tips, advice, reviews, etc to help me improve the grading of this article. Thanks! -- WaTErMelON690 ( talk) 02:13, 17 May 2021 (UTC)
Please read MOS:OVERLINK and MOS:REPEATLINK and unlink as appropriate.
Please also link to your course page. Pam D 04:25, 17 May 2021 (UTC)
Hi, I'm the student currently working on this wiki page. I added new sections and more detail regarding the background, release and reworked the synopsis to make it a bit more clear. I still want to find media and other visual aids to help the article along with a navigation box, etc. However I was wondering if someone could read over what I have added so far and give me any advice. It would be much appreciated. -- WaTErMelON690 ( talk) 03:57, 24 May 2021 (UTC)
Please read Wikipedia:Student assignments. Show it to your tutor if they don't know all that information. See the section Wikipedia:Student_assignments#Course_pages,_user_pages,_and_user_names. Follow the link that article provides to Wikipedia:Training/For students and encourage your tutor to follow the link to Wikipedia:Training/For educators.
I see that another editor has kindly replaced all your slanted quotes with straight quotes, but they shouldn't have had to spend time doing so: I was leaving you to do that yourself. You shouldn't have to ask us how to add the reference list to your article. You are editing here for course credits: most of us are here to improve the encyclopedia and to make knowledge more widely available. Sorry, I'm just feeling a little grumpy about academic staff who expect the wider editorship of Wikipedia to do the teaching they ought to be doing themselves before they use an international encyclopedia as the setting for their coursework assignments. Happy Editing, and perhaps you'll become one of the tiny minority of students who come back to editing after their coursework and stay around here to improve the encyclopedia, rather than ticking the box "Wikipedia assignment done" and moving on. Pam D 06:07, 26 May 2021 (UTC)
Hello WaTErMelON690, as you requested I've taken a look to try to identify the next steps for this article to be improved further. I think the article has improved a lot and is pretty close to the border between C class and B class (though I don't do a lot of article assessment so others might disagree). I like the image you added, it helps contextualize how major a figure Ambani is. In order of importance, I think the following would have the biggest impact on improving the article further:
I also see a few small things to tidy up:
Overall, I think you've done an impressive job of maintaining a neutral point of view even when writing about a clearly controversial book. I'm also impressed to realise the article now has 33 sources! As you have improved the article is has become clear to me why you found it so interesting, when at first I was surprised it was getting so much attention. I might do some poking at the article myself to think about the structure / organization of sections, since it's capturing my interest. If you have any questions about my suggestions above, please feel free to ask, and happy editing! ~ oulfis 🌸( talk) 20:02, 5 June 2021 (UTC)
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![]() | This article was the subject of an educational assignment that ended on May 2021. |
Hi, I undid the plot summary as it's an inaccurately hagiographic summarization of what is a highly critical biography. In particular, it elides most of the description of how Dirubhai Ambani used market manipulation and irregular financial accounting - including declaring an 18-month fiscal year - to abuse his own shareholders and the trust of the capital markets. It also elides numerous instances of anticompetitive and corrupt behavior that Dirubhai exhibited while he sought to scale RIL.
Lostromantic ( talk) 14:32, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
Hi I am a student enrolled at the University of Sydney and as part of one of my courses I have been assigned to improve this stub. I have made several additions to the article (Background, Synopsis and a Sequel section). I will be continuing to edit this article for the next two weeks and would much appreciate any tips, advice, reviews, etc to help me improve the grading of this article. Thanks! -- WaTErMelON690 ( talk) 02:13, 17 May 2021 (UTC)
Please read MOS:OVERLINK and MOS:REPEATLINK and unlink as appropriate.
Please also link to your course page. Pam D 04:25, 17 May 2021 (UTC)
Hi, I'm the student currently working on this wiki page. I added new sections and more detail regarding the background, release and reworked the synopsis to make it a bit more clear. I still want to find media and other visual aids to help the article along with a navigation box, etc. However I was wondering if someone could read over what I have added so far and give me any advice. It would be much appreciated. -- WaTErMelON690 ( talk) 03:57, 24 May 2021 (UTC)
Please read Wikipedia:Student assignments. Show it to your tutor if they don't know all that information. See the section Wikipedia:Student_assignments#Course_pages,_user_pages,_and_user_names. Follow the link that article provides to Wikipedia:Training/For students and encourage your tutor to follow the link to Wikipedia:Training/For educators.
I see that another editor has kindly replaced all your slanted quotes with straight quotes, but they shouldn't have had to spend time doing so: I was leaving you to do that yourself. You shouldn't have to ask us how to add the reference list to your article. You are editing here for course credits: most of us are here to improve the encyclopedia and to make knowledge more widely available. Sorry, I'm just feeling a little grumpy about academic staff who expect the wider editorship of Wikipedia to do the teaching they ought to be doing themselves before they use an international encyclopedia as the setting for their coursework assignments. Happy Editing, and perhaps you'll become one of the tiny minority of students who come back to editing after their coursework and stay around here to improve the encyclopedia, rather than ticking the box "Wikipedia assignment done" and moving on. Pam D 06:07, 26 May 2021 (UTC)
Hello WaTErMelON690, as you requested I've taken a look to try to identify the next steps for this article to be improved further. I think the article has improved a lot and is pretty close to the border between C class and B class (though I don't do a lot of article assessment so others might disagree). I like the image you added, it helps contextualize how major a figure Ambani is. In order of importance, I think the following would have the biggest impact on improving the article further:
I also see a few small things to tidy up:
Overall, I think you've done an impressive job of maintaining a neutral point of view even when writing about a clearly controversial book. I'm also impressed to realise the article now has 33 sources! As you have improved the article is has become clear to me why you found it so interesting, when at first I was surprised it was getting so much attention. I might do some poking at the article myself to think about the structure / organization of sections, since it's capturing my interest. If you have any questions about my suggestions above, please feel free to ask, and happy editing! ~ oulfis 🌸( talk) 20:02, 5 June 2021 (UTC)