"their music has been called versatile, with a wide range" - this is quite broad, can you say anything more specific?
This passage was a summary for lead from the passages
here and
here. I thought it was alright to summarize into the lead like this? Based on that, and expanding and clarifying it like
this, how does that look?
rootology (
T)
"An award-winning band, their first three studio albums have received Juno Award nominations" - the "an award-winning band" isn't really necessary considering what you say next...
"The Paperboys released their first studio album, Late as Usual, in 1995, which with their next albums Molinos in 1998 and Postcards in 2001 have all received Juno Award nominations, with Molinos winning in the Roots and Traditional Album of the Year category." - reword please, this is choppy and all over the place
Is there very little information about the band out there? The history information seems a bit lacking...
Theres apparently a ton more, but it's buried behind news pay walls (their being more of an underground thing after their Juno success didn't help). I already mailed the band, asking for more news sources.
rootology (
T)
14:35, 28 May 2008 (UTC)reply
Newspapers/magazines/etc. in references need italics (
MOS:ITALICS)
"their music has been called versatile, with a wide range" - this is quite broad, can you say anything more specific?
This passage was a summary for lead from the passages
here and
here. I thought it was alright to summarize into the lead like this? Based on that, and expanding and clarifying it like
this, how does that look?
rootology (
T)
"An award-winning band, their first three studio albums have received Juno Award nominations" - the "an award-winning band" isn't really necessary considering what you say next...
"The Paperboys released their first studio album, Late as Usual, in 1995, which with their next albums Molinos in 1998 and Postcards in 2001 have all received Juno Award nominations, with Molinos winning in the Roots and Traditional Album of the Year category." - reword please, this is choppy and all over the place
Is there very little information about the band out there? The history information seems a bit lacking...
Theres apparently a ton more, but it's buried behind news pay walls (their being more of an underground thing after their Juno success didn't help). I already mailed the band, asking for more news sources.
rootology (
T)
14:35, 28 May 2008 (UTC)reply
Newspapers/magazines/etc. in references need italics (
MOS:ITALICS)