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Hi Shrike, I hope all is well. I would like to gain some insight as to why you’ve opted to revert to the article as it reflected prior to the edits I had submitted. In my edit summary, I indicated that I had restructured components in the article for flow and relevancy, added additional information with citations included, and fixed grammatical errors. I cited all of the additions to the article from credible sources, and all content was relevant to the topic of the Palestinian Museum. As a new user, I’d very much appreciate your feedback on what I could have done differently and if there are mistakes I’ve made, I feel I would very much benefit from your expertise in order to fix them. Are you please able to provide your thoughts and feedback?
For reference, below are just some of the edits I had made to support the existing article:
Added the following:
Representing the history and aspirations of the Palestinian people, the museum aims to discuss the past, present, and future of Palestine. [1] Through its digital platforms and international partners, the Museum aims to connect with about 10 million Palestinians[5] scattered around the world, and with all those interested in Palestine. [2]
Removed the "about" heading. It seemed redundant as this is already the purpose of the entire article and merged with the existing heading. Expanded instead on the notable concept of the museum, adding:
The museum's research programs develop knowledge that is relevant inside and outside Palestine. [3]
"Building" heading appeared vague and the section was expanded on with citations. It was replaced to align more with contents included within the body of the text for this section. Edited to reflect as past tense; the museum has already been built. Architects are notable, a citation was included in the edit to reflect their base from Dublin, Ireland. Included researched text relevant to the architecture, information added is notable, from credible sources and verifiable. Below, please find the text added for reference:
The building's interior contains galleries, educational and research facilities, and administrative offices. [4]
In April 2019 it was announced that the Palestinian Museum had been shortlisted for the Aga Khan Award for Architecture. [5] The museum was noted for marrying an aesthetically pleasing design with environmental responsibility. [6]
Located atop a terraced hill, the museum building overlooks the Mediterranean. [7] With a design inspired by the surrounding rural landscape, the building integrates seamlessly into its environment. [8] The building's facade is made of local limestone [9] and its cascading gardens represent the history of Palestinian vegetation and agriculture. [10]
Builders laid terraces by hand, incorporating artisanal knowledge and skill. [11] Outdoor garden spaces extend interior spaces to facilitate outdoor exhibitions and blend the building with its environment. [12]
The museum's sustainable construction earned it LEED Gold certification. [13] The building design and operations take sustainability into account. [14] To reach LEED standards, the builders needed to implement systems control technologies that were new to the area's building industry. [15]
Thanks kindly in advance, for your mentorship, Shrike.
Journey of Learning (
talk) 05:37, 29 August 2019 (UTC)
It was announced today that the Palestinain Museum is a winner of the 2019 Aga Khan Award for Architecture. I'm adding a cited sentence to this effect to the article lead, but I see that there has been some dispute over recent edits. Hopefully I'm not stepping into something here (!), but please do guide me if I'm missing something. Thanks. -- Aylahs (talk) 17:56, 29 August 2019 (UTC)
Giving notice to any interested editor that I intend to expand this article along the lines of what Journey of Learning proposed. The focus is mostly on architecture. I will keep it neutral and stick to facts as they are reported in verifiable sources. If you have concerns about the edits, please raise them on this Talk page so that they can be resolved constructively and amicably. Thank you! -- Aylahs (talk) 19:03, 29 August 2019 (UTC)
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Hi Shrike, I hope all is well. I would like to gain some insight as to why you’ve opted to revert to the article as it reflected prior to the edits I had submitted. In my edit summary, I indicated that I had restructured components in the article for flow and relevancy, added additional information with citations included, and fixed grammatical errors. I cited all of the additions to the article from credible sources, and all content was relevant to the topic of the Palestinian Museum. As a new user, I’d very much appreciate your feedback on what I could have done differently and if there are mistakes I’ve made, I feel I would very much benefit from your expertise in order to fix them. Are you please able to provide your thoughts and feedback?
For reference, below are just some of the edits I had made to support the existing article:
Added the following:
Representing the history and aspirations of the Palestinian people, the museum aims to discuss the past, present, and future of Palestine. [1] Through its digital platforms and international partners, the Museum aims to connect with about 10 million Palestinians[5] scattered around the world, and with all those interested in Palestine. [2]
Removed the "about" heading. It seemed redundant as this is already the purpose of the entire article and merged with the existing heading. Expanded instead on the notable concept of the museum, adding:
The museum's research programs develop knowledge that is relevant inside and outside Palestine. [3]
"Building" heading appeared vague and the section was expanded on with citations. It was replaced to align more with contents included within the body of the text for this section. Edited to reflect as past tense; the museum has already been built. Architects are notable, a citation was included in the edit to reflect their base from Dublin, Ireland. Included researched text relevant to the architecture, information added is notable, from credible sources and verifiable. Below, please find the text added for reference:
The building's interior contains galleries, educational and research facilities, and administrative offices. [4]
In April 2019 it was announced that the Palestinian Museum had been shortlisted for the Aga Khan Award for Architecture. [5] The museum was noted for marrying an aesthetically pleasing design with environmental responsibility. [6]
Located atop a terraced hill, the museum building overlooks the Mediterranean. [7] With a design inspired by the surrounding rural landscape, the building integrates seamlessly into its environment. [8] The building's facade is made of local limestone [9] and its cascading gardens represent the history of Palestinian vegetation and agriculture. [10]
Builders laid terraces by hand, incorporating artisanal knowledge and skill. [11] Outdoor garden spaces extend interior spaces to facilitate outdoor exhibitions and blend the building with its environment. [12]
The museum's sustainable construction earned it LEED Gold certification. [13] The building design and operations take sustainability into account. [14] To reach LEED standards, the builders needed to implement systems control technologies that were new to the area's building industry. [15]
Thanks kindly in advance, for your mentorship, Shrike.
Journey of Learning (
talk) 05:37, 29 August 2019 (UTC)
It was announced today that the Palestinain Museum is a winner of the 2019 Aga Khan Award for Architecture. I'm adding a cited sentence to this effect to the article lead, but I see that there has been some dispute over recent edits. Hopefully I'm not stepping into something here (!), but please do guide me if I'm missing something. Thanks. -- Aylahs (talk) 17:56, 29 August 2019 (UTC)
Giving notice to any interested editor that I intend to expand this article along the lines of what Journey of Learning proposed. The focus is mostly on architecture. I will keep it neutral and stick to facts as they are reported in verifiable sources. If you have concerns about the edits, please raise them on this Talk page so that they can be resolved constructively and amicably. Thank you! -- Aylahs (talk) 19:03, 29 August 2019 (UTC)