"Announced in February 2013 with initial dates in Europe and North America, the tour comprised six legs and 132 shows commencing in Belgrade, Serbia on April 15, 2013 and concluding in Lisbon, Portugal on March 27, 2014"..... quite a mouthful, let's keep it simple with something like "The tour contained six legs and 132 shows. It began in Belgrade, Serbia on April 15, 2013, and concluded in Lisbon, Portugal on March 27, 2014."
"later in 2014 when her self-titled fifth studio album was released the show was revamped and many new songs from that album were performed"..... this phrasing suggests that the Beyoncé album was released in 2014", so let's try "after the release of her self-titled fifth studio album, the 2014 shows were changed to incorporate tracks from the album"
I tweaked with the dates a bit, and some bits really only needed one ref
"The tour and its name, The Mrs. Carter Show World Tour, which is a reference to Beyoncé's marriage with Shawn 'Jay-Z' Carter, were announced following her performance at the Super Bowl XLVII halftime show on February 3"..... I'd go with something like "Beyoncé's announced the tour and its name during the Super Bowl XLVII halftime show on February 3. The tour's title refers to her marriage with Shawn 'Jay-Z' Carter."
"The singer's aristocratic look in the video received comparisons with Marie Antoinette, Queen Elizabeth I, and Lady Gaga" → "Critics compared her aristocratic look in the video to Marie Antoinette, Queen Elizabeth I, and Lady Gaga"
The source stated 'showing her "jubilant exertions"..' during the halftime performance so I added that. I don't think going into extensive detail on the pictures is extremely necessary
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
17:41, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
"The tour is Beyoncé's highest grossing to date, and one of the highest grossing tours of all time" needs to be sourced
Done – Removed the "one of the highest grossing tours of all time" part as there is not an explicit source that states this (despite it being #20 in the linked wiki page). Added source which stated one of the highest grossing tours of the decade and Wiki linked as such
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
11:33, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
Set list
The "notes" aren't really needed, and the second note is tagged as needing a citation, may as well scrap it all
Not done – removed the citation needed bullet point, however this is notable information including the first performance of brand new songs and never performed songs before, as well as guest performers
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
10:56, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
For "a source confirmed to Us Weekly", try to find a ref that more explicitly states the name of who said tickets were sold at low prices - The ones I found
here and
here both state Us Weekly as a source. Should I remove it?
I've checked and a name simply isn't given, I can either remove it completely or just reword it to "US Weekly reported..." etc. depending on what is best for GA?
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
19:35, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
My main concern is how,
as Forbes describes it, they're known for engaging in "tabloid wars" with New York Post, though I will grant that New York Daily News is definitely much more reliable than New York Post
I can definitely find other sources and replace it, but I think that since we are discussing about a GA it can be kept. It is also used in various FAs.
My love is love (
talk)
00:38, 10 July 2014 (UTC)reply
Other sources would be better. I know that some editors wouldn't approve of it in FAC and get really nitpicky. It's certainly better than things like
Perez Hilton or Daily Mail, but isn't like The Washington Post or CBS News either. SNUGGUMS (
talk·contribs)00:48, 10 July 2014 (UTC)reply
Hmm..... probably "Styleblazer" or "Enstarz" out of those links. If you do find one better than any of those, by all means feel free to add it. SNUGGUMS (
talk·contribs) 18:55, 9 July 2014 (UTC) – Done – replaced OK! with EnstarzLolcakes25 (
talk)
19:06, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
The Sun is not reliable – Done – Source was used 4 times; two times had another reference to back up, the other two times solely relying on The Sun removed.
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
17:52, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
OK you two have done splendid work, just have one last thing- remove/replace Manchester Evening News with a better source. I'll pass the GAN as soon as that's taken care of. SNUGGUMS (
talk·contribs)01:20, 10 July 2014 (UTC)reply
"Announced in February 2013 with initial dates in Europe and North America, the tour comprised six legs and 132 shows commencing in Belgrade, Serbia on April 15, 2013 and concluding in Lisbon, Portugal on March 27, 2014"..... quite a mouthful, let's keep it simple with something like "The tour contained six legs and 132 shows. It began in Belgrade, Serbia on April 15, 2013, and concluded in Lisbon, Portugal on March 27, 2014."
"later in 2014 when her self-titled fifth studio album was released the show was revamped and many new songs from that album were performed"..... this phrasing suggests that the Beyoncé album was released in 2014", so let's try "after the release of her self-titled fifth studio album, the 2014 shows were changed to incorporate tracks from the album"
I tweaked with the dates a bit, and some bits really only needed one ref
"The tour and its name, The Mrs. Carter Show World Tour, which is a reference to Beyoncé's marriage with Shawn 'Jay-Z' Carter, were announced following her performance at the Super Bowl XLVII halftime show on February 3"..... I'd go with something like "Beyoncé's announced the tour and its name during the Super Bowl XLVII halftime show on February 3. The tour's title refers to her marriage with Shawn 'Jay-Z' Carter."
"The singer's aristocratic look in the video received comparisons with Marie Antoinette, Queen Elizabeth I, and Lady Gaga" → "Critics compared her aristocratic look in the video to Marie Antoinette, Queen Elizabeth I, and Lady Gaga"
The source stated 'showing her "jubilant exertions"..' during the halftime performance so I added that. I don't think going into extensive detail on the pictures is extremely necessary
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
17:41, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
"The tour is Beyoncé's highest grossing to date, and one of the highest grossing tours of all time" needs to be sourced
Done – Removed the "one of the highest grossing tours of all time" part as there is not an explicit source that states this (despite it being #20 in the linked wiki page). Added source which stated one of the highest grossing tours of the decade and Wiki linked as such
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
11:33, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
Set list
The "notes" aren't really needed, and the second note is tagged as needing a citation, may as well scrap it all
Not done – removed the citation needed bullet point, however this is notable information including the first performance of brand new songs and never performed songs before, as well as guest performers
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
10:56, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
For "a source confirmed to Us Weekly", try to find a ref that more explicitly states the name of who said tickets were sold at low prices - The ones I found
here and
here both state Us Weekly as a source. Should I remove it?
I've checked and a name simply isn't given, I can either remove it completely or just reword it to "US Weekly reported..." etc. depending on what is best for GA?
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
19:35, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
My main concern is how,
as Forbes describes it, they're known for engaging in "tabloid wars" with New York Post, though I will grant that New York Daily News is definitely much more reliable than New York Post
I can definitely find other sources and replace it, but I think that since we are discussing about a GA it can be kept. It is also used in various FAs.
My love is love (
talk)
00:38, 10 July 2014 (UTC)reply
Other sources would be better. I know that some editors wouldn't approve of it in FAC and get really nitpicky. It's certainly better than things like
Perez Hilton or Daily Mail, but isn't like The Washington Post or CBS News either. SNUGGUMS (
talk·contribs)00:48, 10 July 2014 (UTC)reply
Hmm..... probably "Styleblazer" or "Enstarz" out of those links. If you do find one better than any of those, by all means feel free to add it. SNUGGUMS (
talk·contribs) 18:55, 9 July 2014 (UTC) – Done – replaced OK! with EnstarzLolcakes25 (
talk)
19:06, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
The Sun is not reliable – Done – Source was used 4 times; two times had another reference to back up, the other two times solely relying on The Sun removed.
Lolcakes25 (
talk)
17:52, 9 July 2014 (UTC)reply
OK you two have done splendid work, just have one last thing- remove/replace Manchester Evening News with a better source. I'll pass the GAN as soon as that's taken care of. SNUGGUMS (
talk·contribs)01:20, 10 July 2014 (UTC)reply