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Reviewer: Adamstom.97 ( talk · contribs) 01:29, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
Grabbing this review purely as a fan of the show. From a quick glance the article looks in-depth and well sourced. I'll take some time to have a good read of it and then come back with some thoughts. -
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The article is in depth, well sourced, and well presented. However, I am concerned with the large plot summary in the "Appearances" section. Usually for TV series the guideline is to keep a plot summary for a season below 500 words (per MOS:TVPLOT) and this page has more than double that for what is a relatively short and not very plot-heavy season. I appreciate the work put into writing the summary and referencing it well, but this is a definite issue for me (especially with more seasons to come, this is only going to get much bigger). Can you see what can be done about that? Also, here are a few smaller issues I have found:
an infant of the same alien species as YodaI feel like we don't need to explain this in the first paragraph of the lead given the article is not about that character. I think the link in the lead and an explanation in the article body should suffice.
The costume presented challenges for the actors portraying the Mandalorian, and ...this sentence in the lead seems like it would more naturally fit with the previous paragraph, leaving the last paragraph to discuss theme and reception.
accept assistance with othersshould this be "from others"?
the series premiere episodethis should be just "the series premiere" or "the series' premiere episode".
Favreau is a long-time Star Wars fan, and the Mandalorians are one of his favorite groups of characters from the franchise.You could add here that Favreau previously voiced a Mandalorian in the Clone Wars TV show.
Let me know once you have worked through these points or if you have any questions or concerns. - adamstom97 ( talk) 23:29, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Adamstom.97 ( talk · contribs) 01:29, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
Grabbing this review purely as a fan of the show. From a quick glance the article looks in-depth and well sourced. I'll take some time to have a good read of it and then come back with some thoughts. -
adamstom97 (
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01:29, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
The article is in depth, well sourced, and well presented. However, I am concerned with the large plot summary in the "Appearances" section. Usually for TV series the guideline is to keep a plot summary for a season below 500 words (per MOS:TVPLOT) and this page has more than double that for what is a relatively short and not very plot-heavy season. I appreciate the work put into writing the summary and referencing it well, but this is a definite issue for me (especially with more seasons to come, this is only going to get much bigger). Can you see what can be done about that? Also, here are a few smaller issues I have found:
an infant of the same alien species as YodaI feel like we don't need to explain this in the first paragraph of the lead given the article is not about that character. I think the link in the lead and an explanation in the article body should suffice.
The costume presented challenges for the actors portraying the Mandalorian, and ...this sentence in the lead seems like it would more naturally fit with the previous paragraph, leaving the last paragraph to discuss theme and reception.
accept assistance with othersshould this be "from others"?
the series premiere episodethis should be just "the series premiere" or "the series' premiere episode".
Favreau is a long-time Star Wars fan, and the Mandalorians are one of his favorite groups of characters from the franchise.You could add here that Favreau previously voiced a Mandalorian in the Clone Wars TV show.
Let me know once you have worked through these points or if you have any questions or concerns. - adamstom97 ( talk) 23:29, 9 April 2020 (UTC)