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Reviewer: ImaginesTigers ( talk · contribs) 22:27, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
Hi there! I'm going to snag this one. You should have my full review (posted all at once) by Friday.
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22:27, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
The article is structurally sound, and mostly well-written. It is well-supported with a judicious use of references, and contains few glaring omissions. Regardless, I have some suggestions before we promote.
Part II is one of the best-selling PlayStation 4 games and the fastest-selling PlayStation 4 exclusive, selling over four million units in its release weekend.I'd recommend changing this to include the word 'selling' less. I also think the mention of Lev's criticism is not quite specific enough. A little more detail would be useful there, explaining (briefly) what problems critics had with Lev. This problem reappears in the criticism section of the article.
Members of the transgender communitydoes not feel entirely right — are all of the critics thereafter trans writers? There's been a lot of discussion about this in particular. Next up we have Audience response. As a section, I like most of what is there. I don't especially like the title, though. As noted within the section, these viewpoints constituted a minority of the game's overall playerbase. Framing it purely as the audience seems strange to me. It also focuses on the Jason Schreier/Schindler's List thing. To be clear, neither he, nor Druckmann, nor Baker can really be conceived of as this game's "audience".
I'll get to the images tomorrow! After you've implemented those changes, I'll go through the article myself and make some small changes here and there to wording/sentences; given that the article might change a little, I always leave that to the end. A pretty good article overall, and looking forward to hearing from you!
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00:08, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: ImaginesTigers ( talk · contribs) 22:27, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
Hi there! I'm going to snag this one. You should have my full review (posted all at once) by Friday.
ImaginesTigers (
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22:27, 27 October 2020 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
The article is structurally sound, and mostly well-written. It is well-supported with a judicious use of references, and contains few glaring omissions. Regardless, I have some suggestions before we promote.
Part II is one of the best-selling PlayStation 4 games and the fastest-selling PlayStation 4 exclusive, selling over four million units in its release weekend.I'd recommend changing this to include the word 'selling' less. I also think the mention of Lev's criticism is not quite specific enough. A little more detail would be useful there, explaining (briefly) what problems critics had with Lev. This problem reappears in the criticism section of the article.
Members of the transgender communitydoes not feel entirely right — are all of the critics thereafter trans writers? There's been a lot of discussion about this in particular. Next up we have Audience response. As a section, I like most of what is there. I don't especially like the title, though. As noted within the section, these viewpoints constituted a minority of the game's overall playerbase. Framing it purely as the audience seems strange to me. It also focuses on the Jason Schreier/Schindler's List thing. To be clear, neither he, nor Druckmann, nor Baker can really be conceived of as this game's "audience".
I'll get to the images tomorrow! After you've implemented those changes, I'll go through the article myself and make some small changes here and there to wording/sentences; given that the article might change a little, I always leave that to the end. A pretty good article overall, and looking forward to hearing from you!
ImaginesTigers (
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00:08, 2 November 2020 (UTC)