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Per WP:PARENDIS, the title of this article should be The Entire History of You. Copied and pasted back from The Entire History of You (Black Mirror) since move was made impossible. This was the only edit since the original spurious copy-paste. Lagrange 613 03:02, 4 May 2016 (UTC)
"a memory of he and Ffion having sex about 18 months ago": the "he" should be either "him" or "himself" (as in the simpler phrase "a memory of him having sex"), but does it refer to Jonas or to Liam? I can't remember how the episode went. Equinox ◑ 11:20, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
To support the information from Inside Black Mirror about the episode being set in 2050 and the houses being designed around a "mid-century feel" of stone, wood and metal, we could use something like [1], which also shows the usage of the grain technology (I can perhaps find a slightly better frame than that one). To depict the grain tech itself and a little bit of the "tree rings" design, we could have a simple frame of the grain being used e.g. [2] or even a composite of a person's milky eyes and their grain feed [3]. — Bilorv ( talk) 10:19, 17 May 2020 (UTC)
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Stolen to order, as far as [the authorities] could tell. I've changed to:
to steal it, likely to sell her memories.
that she was the one who wanted Jonas to come with thembut I've had to cut the point for the word count. Let me know if you think this was a crucial detail.
he repeatedly watches the "re-do" on his "grain", an implant which records footage from his eyes and ears and allows it to be replayed.After looking again, I now think this needs quite detailed exposition for readers who haven't seen it, as there's a lot of ways of misinterpreting the technology.
Hallam calls the police.because I think that's the most important detail, and describing anything else about Hallam in this scene takes too many words. It now doesn't explain why Hallam is at Jonas' place, so if you think that's confusing then let me know and I'll have another think.
their babysitter Gina (Mona Goodwin), who was looking after their daughter Jody, to sleep upstairs.
This is one of those Black Mirror episodes with an ending so painful for the main character that it can be difficult to watch. The conclusion is one that comments on what it means to be human, and though it is exceptionally dark there is a small ray of hope hinted at as well.I think the idea here is that Liam is at least free of the grain by the end of the episode. I know a lot of viewers interpret that Liam went blind or suffered brain damage (it's mentioned that gouging can cause this at the dinner table with Hallam) or perhaps died from blood loss, but I'm with Doyle here. I see the ending a bit like Nosedive's: the character has hit rock bottom and they've got a chance at redemption and trying to unhook from the system they live in. Anyway, I've changed the text to
it ends with "a small ray of hope"so the quote hopefully means a bit more to readers.
audiovisual feed, definitely an important distinction.
That's all I have, thanks for the privilege of making me watch it again and enjoying it again! On hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man ( Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:58, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
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Cavaliergirl96,
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Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT ( talk) 04:09, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
Per WP:PARENDIS, the title of this article should be The Entire History of You. Copied and pasted back from The Entire History of You (Black Mirror) since move was made impossible. This was the only edit since the original spurious copy-paste. Lagrange 613 03:02, 4 May 2016 (UTC)
"a memory of he and Ffion having sex about 18 months ago": the "he" should be either "him" or "himself" (as in the simpler phrase "a memory of him having sex"), but does it refer to Jonas or to Liam? I can't remember how the episode went. Equinox ◑ 11:20, 21 April 2018 (UTC)
To support the information from Inside Black Mirror about the episode being set in 2050 and the houses being designed around a "mid-century feel" of stone, wood and metal, we could use something like [1], which also shows the usage of the grain technology (I can perhaps find a slightly better frame than that one). To depict the grain tech itself and a little bit of the "tree rings" design, we could have a simple frame of the grain being used e.g. [2] or even a composite of a person's milky eyes and their grain feed [3]. — Bilorv ( talk) 10:19, 17 May 2020 (UTC)
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Stolen to order, as far as [the authorities] could tell. I've changed to:
to steal it, likely to sell her memories.
that she was the one who wanted Jonas to come with thembut I've had to cut the point for the word count. Let me know if you think this was a crucial detail.
he repeatedly watches the "re-do" on his "grain", an implant which records footage from his eyes and ears and allows it to be replayed.After looking again, I now think this needs quite detailed exposition for readers who haven't seen it, as there's a lot of ways of misinterpreting the technology.
Hallam calls the police.because I think that's the most important detail, and describing anything else about Hallam in this scene takes too many words. It now doesn't explain why Hallam is at Jonas' place, so if you think that's confusing then let me know and I'll have another think.
their babysitter Gina (Mona Goodwin), who was looking after their daughter Jody, to sleep upstairs.
This is one of those Black Mirror episodes with an ending so painful for the main character that it can be difficult to watch. The conclusion is one that comments on what it means to be human, and though it is exceptionally dark there is a small ray of hope hinted at as well.I think the idea here is that Liam is at least free of the grain by the end of the episode. I know a lot of viewers interpret that Liam went blind or suffered brain damage (it's mentioned that gouging can cause this at the dinner table with Hallam) or perhaps died from blood loss, but I'm with Doyle here. I see the ending a bit like Nosedive's: the character has hit rock bottom and they've got a chance at redemption and trying to unhook from the system they live in. Anyway, I've changed the text to
it ends with "a small ray of hope"so the quote hopefully means a bit more to readers.
audiovisual feed, definitely an important distinction.
That's all I have, thanks for the privilege of making me watch it again and enjoying it again! On hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man ( Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:58, 26 May 2020 (UTC)