While the turkey is cooling and the sprouts are on the boil, I'll quickly review this
Lead
"The race" - might be better to say "The 1858 race", "this race" or something that clearly states the sentence is talking about this one, as the previous sentence is a general description of the race over all years
"Commencing at 1pm ... " - I've never really been a fan of sentences that start with the present participle myself, wouldn't "The race started at 1pm" (with relevant grammar changes) be better?
I'm wondering if it would be worth adding a brief phrase explaining what "caught a crab" is. I realise there is a wikilink, but it's to part of an article, rather than an article itself, and on a mobile device a reader might just see the link, assume it goes to the creature, and think "huh"?
Now then, this is a tricky one, I could add a footnote I suppose, but otherwise I'd need to be explaining this term in multiple articles which is supposed to be being served by the glossary of terms. What would you suggest?
The Rambling Man (
talk)
21:12, 25 December 2014 (UTC)reply
Yes, I think that's the best we can do under the circumstances. I had a quick look around for sources, but there's not enough online to obviously make
catch a crab an article on its own, so a redirect is the strongest compromise between everything.
Ritchie333(talk)(cont)11:05, 26 December 2014 (UTC)reply
"and shot Hammersmith Bridge with a length-and-a-half lead" - not sure if "shot" is the right word, it makes it sound a bit too much like
Radio 4's
Test Match Special commentary rather than an encyclopaedia
Oddly, to "shoot a bridge" is common parlance with rowing. I could "blanderate" it to become "pass under" if you prefer, but shooting bridges is what we did/they do....
The Rambling Man (
talk)
21:12, 25 December 2014 (UTC)reply
While the turkey is cooling and the sprouts are on the boil, I'll quickly review this
Lead
"The race" - might be better to say "The 1858 race", "this race" or something that clearly states the sentence is talking about this one, as the previous sentence is a general description of the race over all years
"Commencing at 1pm ... " - I've never really been a fan of sentences that start with the present participle myself, wouldn't "The race started at 1pm" (with relevant grammar changes) be better?
I'm wondering if it would be worth adding a brief phrase explaining what "caught a crab" is. I realise there is a wikilink, but it's to part of an article, rather than an article itself, and on a mobile device a reader might just see the link, assume it goes to the creature, and think "huh"?
Now then, this is a tricky one, I could add a footnote I suppose, but otherwise I'd need to be explaining this term in multiple articles which is supposed to be being served by the glossary of terms. What would you suggest?
The Rambling Man (
talk)
21:12, 25 December 2014 (UTC)reply
Yes, I think that's the best we can do under the circumstances. I had a quick look around for sources, but there's not enough online to obviously make
catch a crab an article on its own, so a redirect is the strongest compromise between everything.
Ritchie333(talk)(cont)11:05, 26 December 2014 (UTC)reply
"and shot Hammersmith Bridge with a length-and-a-half lead" - not sure if "shot" is the right word, it makes it sound a bit too much like
Radio 4's
Test Match Special commentary rather than an encyclopaedia
Oddly, to "shoot a bridge" is common parlance with rowing. I could "blanderate" it to become "pass under" if you prefer, but shooting bridges is what we did/they do....
The Rambling Man (
talk)
21:12, 25 December 2014 (UTC)reply