Tone of "Social reading" is unencyclopedic; needs referencing; direct link should be avoided.
In terms of
layout, "Educational applications" is a-paragraph-a-source which isn't helpful to the reader understanding the points being made. Ideally the passages should be woven so as to have each paragraph making a separate point. There's also an external link which should be avoided and actually it ought to be the general system we're interested in, not that particular one.
I think there's a surprising amount missing from the history. The image of the Talmud is a great example, but the history section is short. There is no mention of
glosses, for example and those subjects dealt with are very brief. This ought to be expanded.
The passage including: (1)"facilitat[ing] reading and later writing tasks," which includes annotations that support reading for both personal and professional purposes; (2)"eavesdrop[ping] on the insights of other readers," which involves sharing of annotations; (3)"provid[ing] feedback to writers or promote communication with collaborators," is very difficult to follow. Consider presenting it in another format.
There's a lot of work to be done here; I'lve put the article on hold for seven days. If at that stage these task aren't complete, I'll fail it: this is essentially an indefinite hold. Grandiose(
me,
talk,
contribs) 12:27, 18 June 2012 (UTC)reply
OK, I'm failing the article but if the nominator returns I'll open up a new review as soon as I'm notified of his or her return. Grandiose(
me,
talk,
contribs) 15:03, 28 June 2012 (UTC)reply
Tone of "Social reading" is unencyclopedic; needs referencing; direct link should be avoided.
In terms of
layout, "Educational applications" is a-paragraph-a-source which isn't helpful to the reader understanding the points being made. Ideally the passages should be woven so as to have each paragraph making a separate point. There's also an external link which should be avoided and actually it ought to be the general system we're interested in, not that particular one.
I think there's a surprising amount missing from the history. The image of the Talmud is a great example, but the history section is short. There is no mention of
glosses, for example and those subjects dealt with are very brief. This ought to be expanded.
The passage including: (1)"facilitat[ing] reading and later writing tasks," which includes annotations that support reading for both personal and professional purposes; (2)"eavesdrop[ping] on the insights of other readers," which involves sharing of annotations; (3)"provid[ing] feedback to writers or promote communication with collaborators," is very difficult to follow. Consider presenting it in another format.
There's a lot of work to be done here; I'lve put the article on hold for seven days. If at that stage these task aren't complete, I'll fail it: this is essentially an indefinite hold. Grandiose(
me,
talk,
contribs) 12:27, 18 June 2012 (UTC)reply
OK, I'm failing the article but if the nominator returns I'll open up a new review as soon as I'm notified of his or her return. Grandiose(
me,
talk,
contribs) 15:03, 28 June 2012 (UTC)reply