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Reviewer: Colin M ( talk · contribs) 00:01, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
Stay tuned for initial thoughts/feedback. :)
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Hey Jorahm. Nice work on the article! Initial comments below, roughly in order from beginning to end of the article. Most of these are just issues of wording/grammar/formatting which should be pretty easy to correct, though there are also a few areas where I think some more detail is required.
Feel free to reply inline if that's easier, and let me know if you disagree with the substance of any of these comments, or if you think they're outside the scope of WP:GACR.
to other game developersDoes "other" make sense? My impression was that Tetris Holdings was not itself a game developer.
The District CourtThis should probably not be capitalized. Similar to "the president" vs. "President Biden".
the their art style
to manage the Tetris rights and licenses to other game developers in order to standardize certain game elements.Wording issue here. One doesn't usually talk about "managing a right to someone". Also second part of the sentence is confusing. It seems to be saying the reason for licensing the rights was "to standardize certain game elements". Isn't the reason for licensing an IP usually to make money?
Golden carefully worded the marketing of the game to avoid all references to Tetris, outside of a disclaimer which read: "Mino and Xio Interactive are not affiliated with Tetris™ or the Tetris Company™".I see the quote in the cited source (on the first page), but is there a page number that verifies the part about the text not containing any other references to Tetris?
Although Mino was not the first Tetris clone, it became one of the most successful with more than six million downloads.Just as a matter of course, statistics like this should be cited.
The Xio case emerged as the first major case in a long time to proceed to trial on this issue.Would be good to be a bit more specific than just "a long time". Are we talking years? Decades?
Judge Wolfson reviewed two of the five claims brought by TetrisWhat of the other 3?
and that prior to publishing the game, had sought a licenseI think you need a pronoun here
While the New Jersey district court was within the Third Circuit and which had...wording
were found to have been ruled in the same manner as the AFC test, according to Wolfson, and thus was applicable to the Mino caseverb agreement issue here
...much more closely than a game like Dr. Mario, a game utilized the rules of Tetris in...missing word?
Wolfson also agreed with Tetris Holdings that Mino's trade dress violated their trade dress, since the look and feel was too similar to Tetris but was not essential to the operation of the game.Is it possible to clarify how this differs from the other finding about copyright?
Wolfson subsequently granted summary judgment in Tetris's favor on both counts in May 2012, which required Xio to withdraw the game from the App Store.Having a hard time verifying the second part of this sentence in either of the cited sources. Do you have page numbers or quotes? Also, just to be clear, is this saying that withdrawal from the App Store was the only consequence? i.e. no monetary damages?
Legal scholars have included this decision in a wave of cases that have pushed the boundaries of video game copyright protection, along with Electronic Arts Inc. v. Zynga IncSince there's no wikilink for this case, I would include the year
For example, shortly after the decision in Xio,...Not clear how this "For example" relates to what came before.
that a specific selection or arrangement of those devices would quality as unique expression, and thus copyrightable.Minor parallelism issue here. I think "and thus be copyrightable" would be more grammatical and read more smoothly.
Colin M ( talk) 19:30, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
Thanks for the adjustments. The article is looking great. A few further tiny issues I noticed while doing a final pass:
Mino also admitted that they had sought a license to Tetris from Tetris Holdings, who turned them down.Do you really mean "Mino" here rather than Golden?
stressing that video games were only covered by through their expressionwording
Also, the following are just some suggestions on how I think the article could be improved even further, but these are not requirements for GA:
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Hey Jorahm. Nice work on the article! Initial comments below, roughly in order from beginning to end of the article. Most of these are just issues of wording/grammar/formatting which should be pretty easy to correct, though there are also a few areas where I think some more detail is required.
Feel free to reply inline if that's easier, and let me know if you disagree with the substance of any of these comments, or if you think they're outside the scope of WP:GACR.
to other game developersDoes "other" make sense? My impression was that Tetris Holdings was not itself a game developer.
The District CourtThis should probably not be capitalized. Similar to "the president" vs. "President Biden".
the their art style
to manage the Tetris rights and licenses to other game developers in order to standardize certain game elements.Wording issue here. One doesn't usually talk about "managing a right to someone". Also second part of the sentence is confusing. It seems to be saying the reason for licensing the rights was "to standardize certain game elements". Isn't the reason for licensing an IP usually to make money?
Golden carefully worded the marketing of the game to avoid all references to Tetris, outside of a disclaimer which read: "Mino and Xio Interactive are not affiliated with Tetris™ or the Tetris Company™".I see the quote in the cited source (on the first page), but is there a page number that verifies the part about the text not containing any other references to Tetris?
Although Mino was not the first Tetris clone, it became one of the most successful with more than six million downloads.Just as a matter of course, statistics like this should be cited.
The Xio case emerged as the first major case in a long time to proceed to trial on this issue.Would be good to be a bit more specific than just "a long time". Are we talking years? Decades?
Judge Wolfson reviewed two of the five claims brought by TetrisWhat of the other 3?
and that prior to publishing the game, had sought a licenseI think you need a pronoun here
While the New Jersey district court was within the Third Circuit and which had...wording
were found to have been ruled in the same manner as the AFC test, according to Wolfson, and thus was applicable to the Mino caseverb agreement issue here
...much more closely than a game like Dr. Mario, a game utilized the rules of Tetris in...missing word?
Wolfson also agreed with Tetris Holdings that Mino's trade dress violated their trade dress, since the look and feel was too similar to Tetris but was not essential to the operation of the game.Is it possible to clarify how this differs from the other finding about copyright?
Wolfson subsequently granted summary judgment in Tetris's favor on both counts in May 2012, which required Xio to withdraw the game from the App Store.Having a hard time verifying the second part of this sentence in either of the cited sources. Do you have page numbers or quotes? Also, just to be clear, is this saying that withdrawal from the App Store was the only consequence? i.e. no monetary damages?
Legal scholars have included this decision in a wave of cases that have pushed the boundaries of video game copyright protection, along with Electronic Arts Inc. v. Zynga IncSince there's no wikilink for this case, I would include the year
For example, shortly after the decision in Xio,...Not clear how this "For example" relates to what came before.
that a specific selection or arrangement of those devices would quality as unique expression, and thus copyrightable.Minor parallelism issue here. I think "and thus be copyrightable" would be more grammatical and read more smoothly.
Colin M ( talk) 19:30, 1 July 2021 (UTC)
Thanks for the adjustments. The article is looking great. A few further tiny issues I noticed while doing a final pass:
Mino also admitted that they had sought a license to Tetris from Tetris Holdings, who turned them down.Do you really mean "Mino" here rather than Golden?
stressing that video games were only covered by through their expressionwording
Also, the following are just some suggestions on how I think the article could be improved even further, but these are not requirements for GA:
Colin M ( talk) 16:39, 5 July 2021 (UTC)