Hi, I'm failing this article for the following (major) reasons..
As per cleanup banner at the top - article has too many references to self-published sources (Tesla's website). For example, references 8 to 21, and 157 to 167 are all linking to Tesla.com. Therefore, the content in the article needs to be evaluated/rewritten to reduce dependency on their company website(s).
There are cleanup tags littered over the article such as [citation needed] and [better source needed].
Contents structure is inappropriate and too long - 19 sections is excessive (for comparison, although not good articles, even
Ford Motor Company and
Toyota are not that long).
Lead section does not follow Manual of Style (
MOS: Lead section). Needs to be 3 or 4 concise paragraphs.
Sales section - this is too high up in the article
Board of directors - this is too far down in the article
Too many one sentence paragraphs or overly-short sections
Some paragraphs sound like advertising or marketing material (eg. "Tesla's philosophy is not to make a profit on service. Tesla offers service at company-owned service centers. Mobile technicians can also perform most inspections and repairs")
Article needs copy-editing for grammar, style and tone to be more encyclopedic
Philanthropy section just consists of three bullet points with no background or context
Lawsuits and controversies section - this is not easy to understand for general readers. In fact, large pieces of text have been copy-and-pasted from
[1], a report by the Securities and Exchange Commission. This is a copyright violation.
Hi, I'm failing this article for the following (major) reasons..
As per cleanup banner at the top - article has too many references to self-published sources (Tesla's website). For example, references 8 to 21, and 157 to 167 are all linking to Tesla.com. Therefore, the content in the article needs to be evaluated/rewritten to reduce dependency on their company website(s).
There are cleanup tags littered over the article such as [citation needed] and [better source needed].
Contents structure is inappropriate and too long - 19 sections is excessive (for comparison, although not good articles, even
Ford Motor Company and
Toyota are not that long).
Lead section does not follow Manual of Style (
MOS: Lead section). Needs to be 3 or 4 concise paragraphs.
Sales section - this is too high up in the article
Board of directors - this is too far down in the article
Too many one sentence paragraphs or overly-short sections
Some paragraphs sound like advertising or marketing material (eg. "Tesla's philosophy is not to make a profit on service. Tesla offers service at company-owned service centers. Mobile technicians can also perform most inspections and repairs")
Article needs copy-editing for grammar, style and tone to be more encyclopedic
Philanthropy section just consists of three bullet points with no background or context
Lawsuits and controversies section - this is not easy to understand for general readers. In fact, large pieces of text have been copy-and-pasted from
[1], a report by the Securities and Exchange Commission. This is a copyright violation.