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Reviewer: Blue Pumpkin Pie ( talk · contribs) 22:59, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
So everything that the previous review still applies. everything is well written and well-sourced. there are two sections that I think need improvement.
The "other appearance" I believe needs to be better sourced for every appearance.
I'm not sure not all of it is complete.
There are things mentioned like her being mentioned in "Final Fantasy XIII-2" and that's confusing.
As for her Final Fantasy 6 appearance, I do think the dialogue is a bit superfluous, and it could be cleaned up a bit. It's an Appearance section, not a plot section. So we just need to understand what her role was and what key actions or backstories were revealed about her.
Lastly, please reformat the dates to being consistent. some of these sources are just digits, some is day-month-year. and some are month-day-year. Blue Pumpkin Pie Chat Contribs 13:25, 16 June 2020 (UTC)
Terra is the first introduced character, a mentally-enslaved Imperial super-soldier gifted with devastating magic.
She made to participate in an armored assault on the town of Narshe, slaughtering most of the town's militia in pursuit of a recently unearthed magical creature known as Espers.
Upon encountering the creature, her Imperial contingent is annihilated together with her armor. She wakes in a man named Arvis' home, now freed of her slave crown and suffering amnesia.
Pursued into the depths of Narshe's mines by local forces, the thief Locke and a horde of moogles eventually rescue her.
After events in Figaro kingdom and another Imperial assault on Narshe to claim the Esper, she learns she is the daughter of an Esper father and human mother, explaining her magical abilities.
It's definitely an improvement. I personally dont see any flaws, so i'll go ahead and Pass it. Blue Pumpkin Pie Chat Contribs 22:02, 16 June 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Blue Pumpkin Pie ( talk · contribs) 22:59, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
So everything that the previous review still applies. everything is well written and well-sourced. there are two sections that I think need improvement.
The "other appearance" I believe needs to be better sourced for every appearance.
I'm not sure not all of it is complete.
There are things mentioned like her being mentioned in "Final Fantasy XIII-2" and that's confusing.
As for her Final Fantasy 6 appearance, I do think the dialogue is a bit superfluous, and it could be cleaned up a bit. It's an Appearance section, not a plot section. So we just need to understand what her role was and what key actions or backstories were revealed about her.
Lastly, please reformat the dates to being consistent. some of these sources are just digits, some is day-month-year. and some are month-day-year. Blue Pumpkin Pie Chat Contribs 13:25, 16 June 2020 (UTC)
Terra is the first introduced character, a mentally-enslaved Imperial super-soldier gifted with devastating magic.
She made to participate in an armored assault on the town of Narshe, slaughtering most of the town's militia in pursuit of a recently unearthed magical creature known as Espers.
Upon encountering the creature, her Imperial contingent is annihilated together with her armor. She wakes in a man named Arvis' home, now freed of her slave crown and suffering amnesia.
Pursued into the depths of Narshe's mines by local forces, the thief Locke and a horde of moogles eventually rescue her.
After events in Figaro kingdom and another Imperial assault on Narshe to claim the Esper, she learns she is the daughter of an Esper father and human mother, explaining her magical abilities.
It's definitely an improvement. I personally dont see any flaws, so i'll go ahead and Pass it. Blue Pumpkin Pie Chat Contribs 22:02, 16 June 2020 (UTC)