The song was co-written by [[Mikkel S. Eriksen]], [[Tor Erik Hermansen]], [[James Fauntleroy II]] and Rihanna, and was produced by the former two, under their stage name [[Stargate (production team)|Stargate]].
>>> The song was co-written by [[Stargate (production team)|Mikkel S. Eriksen, Tor Erik Hermansen]], [[James Fauntleroy II]] and Rihanna, and was produced by the former two, under their stage name Stargate.
Lyrically, the song speaks of Rihanna's struggles to deal with being the object of a woman's desires, and discovers that she does not share the same feelings as the other female as the song progresses.
>>> Lyrically, the song conveys Rihanna's struggles to deal with being the object of another woman's desires. As the song progresses, she discovers that she does not share the same feelings as the other female.
whilst lyrically, the song is about the relationship between two women, with one realizing that she is falling in love with Rihanna, proclaiming "Te Amo" throughout the song, which is Latin for "I love you" >>> Re-write. Very often, non-native speakers of English like me get lost in such long sentences.
Calvin, before i (re-)start the review, i suggest you find some time and go through the article again. The errors to which i pointed out above have nothing to do with wrong formatting etc. You just need to read the article again. Tell me when you finish. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)12:40, 17 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Look Calvin, this is a short article, in fact a very short one, yet there are too many errors. Please read it again. I am sure you will find some errors yourself. Fix them and then inform me and i will in turn go through the article and point out the grammatical errors you did not see. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)12:47, 17 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Re-arrange. A GA's lead cannot be like that. It looks very bad.
It's in the same organisation as S&M, which is more than a GA. People on the FAC have no problem with it, so technically the lead is FA quality. I will do the rest of the points in about 12/18 hours.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk02:20, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Still, you need to organize the lead. I have told you countless times before. You have to lay emphasis on presentation. And please Calvin, this is nowhere near FA quality. This is a short article and it can be balanced. If it had a story like "Single Ladies", i could have understood but still, "Single Ladies"'s lead is not unbalanced because of composition but because of the cultural impact. Please balance it, the article is already in a bad shape. Arguing won't help here. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)04:18, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
I'm not arguing Jivesh, I'm just saying that I have written the lead of Te Amo in the same format as S&M, which no one at the FAC has a problem with, and the lead of Te Amo is a lot shorter than S&M. I'll do the below points in a minute.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk16:33, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
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edit conflict) No, it doesn't look big to me at all. You must have a smaller screen than me. I know when I use my Mac, even the shortest of Leads or sections looks massive. But on this laptop, which I use all the time, I don't notice if something might appear bigger than it does for you for example.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk16:50, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Comment Frankly, this article should have a one-paragraph lead only, at most two. The article doesn't even have 10 KB of prose, and you would need well above 15 KB to have three paragraphs of that size. Your
S&M (song) argument is ineffective here, because that article is much longer. —
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TALK ]16:51, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
It's a lead. It's supposed to read as a brief (and I mean brief) overview of what the article has to offer. Anymore is simply redundant. —
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TALK ]17:28, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
I'll change to "Reception" and "Critical response" then.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk
Upon the release of Rated R, several music critics commented on the song as part of their album review, as well as when "Te Amo" was released as a single. What makes this sentence a necessary addition?
And it is quite silly to mention this As part of his review for Rated R as all reviews are part of the album, aren't they? ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 17:38, 19 November 2011 (
Yeah I know I removed it, you told me to. I just didn't get how it was repetitive because I only said it once. And no, it's not silly. Not all reviews are from albums. You Da One, for example, has single and album reviews.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk
I'm was just using it as an example in answer to your point. And I'm not implying anything Jivesh, I just don't understand how one instance of something is repetitive. That's all.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk
BBC music reviewer Jude Rogers >>> Wrong format. It should always be BBC's critic Jude Rogers
They aren't close at all. "Robert Copsey of Digital Spy awarded the song a rating of four out of five stars and noted that Rihanna had progressed from singing about a male interest in one of her previous singles, "Rude Boy", to fantasizing about women, saying "After the rather explicit 'Rude Boy' campaign, Rihanna's taking a well-deserved break from titillating the blokes here – only to find herself the object of another lady's affections. One of her Rated R LP's less menacing moments, 'Te Amo' finds La Fenty grappling with her sexuality over some irresistible, Latin-infused Stargate beats."[10] Fraser McAlpine of Daily Reviews also awarded the song four out of five stars and also commented on the theme of lesbianism, saying "It's that old, old story: Girl meets girl. Girl speaks different language to girl. Girl loves girl. Girl doesn't love girl. Girl sad. We’ve all been there, right? And Rihanna’s captured that feeling beautifully (she actually has, even though I sound incredibly insincere about it)."[13]"
Do you know you mentioned "Rude Boy" before? The reader might think you are still referring to "Rude Boy". This is what i always tell people: Do not edit under the false impression that only the fans of the singer will read this article. Anyone can read it and our aim is to facilitate the reading.★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)17:55, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
stars, as well as observing that Rihanna had progressed from singing about a male interest in one of her previous singles >>> is that comma needed? And observing???
observing that Rihanna had progressed from singing about a male interest in one of her previous singles, "Rude Boy", to fantasizing about women" >>> A quote?
also awarded the song four out of five stars and also commented on the theme of lesbianism, saying >>> also also also ... repetitive and again using saying
Question: Did you really go through the article? I can fail it for the amount if mistakes it contains, especially taking into account it is a short article. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)
Should be swedishcharts.com. Hung Medien .... And it is Hung Medien. Use same format and correct everywhere (19 - 27, 50, 53, 57). Endings should be .com
Jivesh1205 (
Talk)
13:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)reply
Calvin, there has already been too much of spoon feeding. You have done 14 GAs, right? You should have learnt something from them, right? Listen, take the references one by one, analyse them one by one. If you still do not find anything wrong, put a Not done next to the reference. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)18:22, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Not really, it depends on the definition in the dictionary and specially the context. Calvin, you are tired. Go to bed and come back tomorrow because you have lost your sense of humor and cordiality. This is a friendly advice. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)18:30, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Upon the release of the album, "Te Amo" made its first chart appearance in Sweden, debuting at number 52 on the Swedish Singles Chart on December 4, 2009, and stayed on the chart for one week.
After being released as a promotional CD in Sweden on May 5, 2010, the song re-entered the chart at number fifty-three on July 7, 2010 and reached its peak of number 48 two weeks later on July 30, spending a total of six non-consecutive weeks on the chart.
As the song was officially released in the United Kingdom > Why this mention?
and peaked at number five weeks a month lateron May 29.
entered ... entered... entered... > Try something else for a change.
in its sixth week >>> in its sixth charting week
Please don't compare here >>> but was more successful in Switzerland, where it peaked inside the top ten at number nine for one week. as you could have chosen any other country. So it seems like a personal opinion.
"Te Amo" debuted and peaked at number 11 in Austria on June 25, 2010, falling to number 15 on July 2, and re-peaking at number 11 again on July 9
In the Flanders and Wallonia regions of Beligum, the song debuted on both charts on the same week and both spent a total of thirteen weeks on both charts; the song debuted in both regions on June 19, 2010, at numbers 29 and 28, respectively.
Elsewhere in Europe, the song debuted on the Italian Singles Chart on July 15, 2010 at number nine and peaked at number seven for two weeks, however the song was less successful in Denmark, Finland and Norway, peaking at numbers 22, 14 and 12, respectively.'
In Germany, "Te Amo" became Rihanna's first song since "Hate That I Love You" in 2007 not to reach the top ten,[28] and debuted on the German Singles Chart at number 13 on July 26, 2010, and fluctuated in the top twenty before reaching its peak of 11 on July 24, 2010.
and reached a peak at number eighteen on July 17, 2010.
on the Canadian Hot 100 for the week ending July 3, 2010 >>> on the Canadian Hot 100 chart issue dated July 3, 2010
8, despite not being officially released as a single, and reached a peak of number 66 on July 17, 2010
The song was co-written by [[Mikkel S. Eriksen]], [[Tor Erik Hermansen]], [[James Fauntleroy II]] and Rihanna, and was produced by the former two, under their stage name [[Stargate (production team)|Stargate]].
>>> The song was co-written by [[Stargate (production team)|Mikkel S. Eriksen, Tor Erik Hermansen]], [[James Fauntleroy II]] and Rihanna, and was produced by the former two, under their stage name Stargate.
Lyrically, the song speaks of Rihanna's struggles to deal with being the object of a woman's desires, and discovers that she does not share the same feelings as the other female as the song progresses.
>>> Lyrically, the song conveys Rihanna's struggles to deal with being the object of another woman's desires. As the song progresses, she discovers that she does not share the same feelings as the other female.
whilst lyrically, the song is about the relationship between two women, with one realizing that she is falling in love with Rihanna, proclaiming "Te Amo" throughout the song, which is Latin for "I love you" >>> Re-write. Very often, non-native speakers of English like me get lost in such long sentences.
Calvin, before i (re-)start the review, i suggest you find some time and go through the article again. The errors to which i pointed out above have nothing to do with wrong formatting etc. You just need to read the article again. Tell me when you finish. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)12:40, 17 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Look Calvin, this is a short article, in fact a very short one, yet there are too many errors. Please read it again. I am sure you will find some errors yourself. Fix them and then inform me and i will in turn go through the article and point out the grammatical errors you did not see. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)12:47, 17 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Re-arrange. A GA's lead cannot be like that. It looks very bad.
It's in the same organisation as S&M, which is more than a GA. People on the FAC have no problem with it, so technically the lead is FA quality. I will do the rest of the points in about 12/18 hours.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk02:20, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Still, you need to organize the lead. I have told you countless times before. You have to lay emphasis on presentation. And please Calvin, this is nowhere near FA quality. This is a short article and it can be balanced. If it had a story like "Single Ladies", i could have understood but still, "Single Ladies"'s lead is not unbalanced because of composition but because of the cultural impact. Please balance it, the article is already in a bad shape. Arguing won't help here. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
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♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)04:18, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
I'm not arguing Jivesh, I'm just saying that I have written the lead of Te Amo in the same format as S&M, which no one at the FAC has a problem with, and the lead of Te Amo is a lot shorter than S&M. I'll do the below points in a minute.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk16:33, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
(
edit conflict) No, it doesn't look big to me at all. You must have a smaller screen than me. I know when I use my Mac, even the shortest of Leads or sections looks massive. But on this laptop, which I use all the time, I don't notice if something might appear bigger than it does for you for example.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk16:50, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Comment Frankly, this article should have a one-paragraph lead only, at most two. The article doesn't even have 10 KB of prose, and you would need well above 15 KB to have three paragraphs of that size. Your
S&M (song) argument is ineffective here, because that article is much longer. —
WP:PENGUIN·[
TALK ]16:51, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
It's a lead. It's supposed to read as a brief (and I mean brief) overview of what the article has to offer. Anymore is simply redundant. —
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TALK ]17:28, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
I'll change to "Reception" and "Critical response" then.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk
Upon the release of Rated R, several music critics commented on the song as part of their album review, as well as when "Te Amo" was released as a single. What makes this sentence a necessary addition?
And it is quite silly to mention this As part of his review for Rated R as all reviews are part of the album, aren't they? ★Jivesh 1205★ (
talk /
♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫) 17:38, 19 November 2011 (
Yeah I know I removed it, you told me to. I just didn't get how it was repetitive because I only said it once. And no, it's not silly. Not all reviews are from albums. You Da One, for example, has single and album reviews.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk
I'm was just using it as an example in answer to your point. And I'm not implying anything Jivesh, I just don't understand how one instance of something is repetitive. That's all.
Calvin •
TalkThatTalk
BBC music reviewer Jude Rogers >>> Wrong format. It should always be BBC's critic Jude Rogers
They aren't close at all. "Robert Copsey of Digital Spy awarded the song a rating of four out of five stars and noted that Rihanna had progressed from singing about a male interest in one of her previous singles, "Rude Boy", to fantasizing about women, saying "After the rather explicit 'Rude Boy' campaign, Rihanna's taking a well-deserved break from titillating the blokes here – only to find herself the object of another lady's affections. One of her Rated R LP's less menacing moments, 'Te Amo' finds La Fenty grappling with her sexuality over some irresistible, Latin-infused Stargate beats."[10] Fraser McAlpine of Daily Reviews also awarded the song four out of five stars and also commented on the theme of lesbianism, saying "It's that old, old story: Girl meets girl. Girl speaks different language to girl. Girl loves girl. Girl doesn't love girl. Girl sad. We’ve all been there, right? And Rihanna’s captured that feeling beautifully (she actually has, even though I sound incredibly insincere about it)."[13]"
Do you know you mentioned "Rude Boy" before? The reader might think you are still referring to "Rude Boy". This is what i always tell people: Do not edit under the false impression that only the fans of the singer will read this article. Anyone can read it and our aim is to facilitate the reading.★Jivesh 1205★ (
talk /
♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)17:55, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
stars, as well as observing that Rihanna had progressed from singing about a male interest in one of her previous singles >>> is that comma needed? And observing???
observing that Rihanna had progressed from singing about a male interest in one of her previous singles, "Rude Boy", to fantasizing about women" >>> A quote?
also awarded the song four out of five stars and also commented on the theme of lesbianism, saying >>> also also also ... repetitive and again using saying
Question: Did you really go through the article? I can fail it for the amount if mistakes it contains, especially taking into account it is a short article. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
talk /
♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)
Should be swedishcharts.com. Hung Medien .... And it is Hung Medien. Use same format and correct everywhere (19 - 27, 50, 53, 57). Endings should be .com
Jivesh1205 (
Talk)
13:01, 2 December 2011 (UTC)reply
Calvin, there has already been too much of spoon feeding. You have done 14 GAs, right? You should have learnt something from them, right? Listen, take the references one by one, analyse them one by one. If you still do not find anything wrong, put a Not done next to the reference. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
talk /
♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)18:22, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Not really, it depends on the definition in the dictionary and specially the context. Calvin, you are tired. Go to bed and come back tomorrow because you have lost your sense of humor and cordiality. This is a friendly advice. ★Jivesh 1205★ (
talk /
♫♫Give 4 a try!!!♫♫)18:30, 19 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Upon the release of the album, "Te Amo" made its first chart appearance in Sweden, debuting at number 52 on the Swedish Singles Chart on December 4, 2009, and stayed on the chart for one week.
After being released as a promotional CD in Sweden on May 5, 2010, the song re-entered the chart at number fifty-three on July 7, 2010 and reached its peak of number 48 two weeks later on July 30, spending a total of six non-consecutive weeks on the chart.
As the song was officially released in the United Kingdom > Why this mention?
and peaked at number five weeks a month lateron May 29.
entered ... entered... entered... > Try something else for a change.
in its sixth week >>> in its sixth charting week
Please don't compare here >>> but was more successful in Switzerland, where it peaked inside the top ten at number nine for one week. as you could have chosen any other country. So it seems like a personal opinion.
"Te Amo" debuted and peaked at number 11 in Austria on June 25, 2010, falling to number 15 on July 2, and re-peaking at number 11 again on July 9
In the Flanders and Wallonia regions of Beligum, the song debuted on both charts on the same week and both spent a total of thirteen weeks on both charts; the song debuted in both regions on June 19, 2010, at numbers 29 and 28, respectively.
Elsewhere in Europe, the song debuted on the Italian Singles Chart on July 15, 2010 at number nine and peaked at number seven for two weeks, however the song was less successful in Denmark, Finland and Norway, peaking at numbers 22, 14 and 12, respectively.'
In Germany, "Te Amo" became Rihanna's first song since "Hate That I Love You" in 2007 not to reach the top ten,[28] and debuted on the German Singles Chart at number 13 on July 26, 2010, and fluctuated in the top twenty before reaching its peak of 11 on July 24, 2010.
and reached a peak at number eighteen on July 17, 2010.
on the Canadian Hot 100 for the week ending July 3, 2010 >>> on the Canadian Hot 100 chart issue dated July 3, 2010
8, despite not being officially released as a single, and reached a peak of number 66 on July 17, 2010