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Reviewer: Vortex3427 ( talk · contribs) 09:53, 23 February 2024 (UTC)
This one seems kind of... wow.
Grávida de Taubaté (lit. 'pregnant woman from Taubaté')Add the literal pronunciation to the body as well.
initially discoveredinitially thought
would be rarewould have been
A week after the supposed pregnancy was discoveredSomething like "By next week" would be more concise
several famous media outletsThe word famous is usually discouraged. You could say several national media outlets or ... national networks and newspapers. Same with
Her most famous appearance; maybe use well-known instead.
showed she was not pregnant,Not needed.which would be impossible.
with whom she was monitoredwho monitored her
In the format "X de Taubaté" ("X of/from Taubaté") to designate hoaxes, the city itself became known as the "city of lies".The connection between the two parts of the sentence is unclear. Maybe "Taubaté became known as the "city of lies", Taubaté earned the nickname "city of lies," and "de Taubaté" ("from/of Taubaté") was appended to words to suggest hoaxes." Also, is this still in common use?
a G1 publication in December 2012December 2012 G1 article
In September 2023, director Frank "Diaraki" announced a movie about the caseWhy is "Diaraki" in quotes. Maybe "announced he was making..."
but the script has already been finalized and signed by himcould be replaced with "he had already signed off on the script."
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Reviewer: Vortex3427 ( talk · contribs) 09:53, 23 February 2024 (UTC)
This one seems kind of... wow.
Grávida de Taubaté (lit. 'pregnant woman from Taubaté')Add the literal pronunciation to the body as well.
initially discoveredinitially thought
would be rarewould have been
A week after the supposed pregnancy was discoveredSomething like "By next week" would be more concise
several famous media outletsThe word famous is usually discouraged. You could say several national media outlets or ... national networks and newspapers. Same with
Her most famous appearance; maybe use well-known instead.
showed she was not pregnant,Not needed.which would be impossible.
with whom she was monitoredwho monitored her
In the format "X de Taubaté" ("X of/from Taubaté") to designate hoaxes, the city itself became known as the "city of lies".The connection between the two parts of the sentence is unclear. Maybe "Taubaté became known as the "city of lies", Taubaté earned the nickname "city of lies," and "de Taubaté" ("from/of Taubaté") was appended to words to suggest hoaxes." Also, is this still in common use?
a G1 publication in December 2012December 2012 G1 article
In September 2023, director Frank "Diaraki" announced a movie about the caseWhy is "Diaraki" in quotes. Maybe "announced he was making..."
but the script has already been finalized and signed by himcould be replaced with "he had already signed off on the script."