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Reviewer: The Rambling Man ( talk · contribs) 09:53, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
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- Thanks for knocking this one up, much appreciated in light of my comments elsewhere! I think there's a little bit of assumed jargon here, which we could probably resolve at GA by linking, so apologies if I'm asking for a few more phrases to be linked...
- Link critical mass?
- thermonuclear weapon can also be linked.
- "for special purposes" could you allude to one such "special" purpose?
Sure. Added a bit.
Hawkeye7
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11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Link neutron.
- And chain reaction.
- "about 25 kg, while that of plutonium would be about 5 kg" converts?
- An odd thing about the old measurements: weights of base metals are in avoirdupois ounces, precious metals in troy ounces, fissile metals in grams. Hence,no conversion required. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- "17.5 cm and a thickness of 11.3 cm, for a mass of 317 kg" same.
- Converted.
Hawkeye7
(discuss)
11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- "Tungsten carbide has ..." you previously told us this was WC, why not use that?
- Dislike using chemical symbols when names are available. The symbol tells you its composition, without having to check out the other article, which is why I included it. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Link depleted uranium.
- "are obvious advantages" delete obvious.
- Deleted.
Hawkeye7
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11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Is Uranium-238 linked?
- "megaelectronvolts" consider linking this too, not exactly a common unit.
- "is 14.1 kg, compared with 52.5 kg in " convert.
- "the W-88 warhead" neither the image or linked article hyphenates W88.
- Image does. De-hyphenated.
Hawkeye7
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11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- "an atomic weight nearly" overlinked.
- Unlinked.
Hawkeye7
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11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Link boron(-10).
- And plutonium(-239).
- "and ionizes at" first mention of "ionize" since the lead and you didn't link it in the lead.
- Can we link British nuclear tests at Maralinga?
That's it, it's a very nice piece of work. The Rambling Man ( Keep wearing the mask...) 10:34, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- I would have liked to link to an article on diffusion theory, but it redirections to Radiative transfer equation and diffusion theory for photon transport in biological tissue - the very problem (redirects going to inappropriate places) that caused me to write this article in the first place. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man ( talk · contribs) 09:53, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Thanks for knocking this one up, much appreciated in light of my comments elsewhere! I think there's a little bit of assumed jargon here, which we could probably resolve at GA by linking, so apologies if I'm asking for a few more phrases to be linked...
- Link critical mass?
- thermonuclear weapon can also be linked.
- "for special purposes" could you allude to one such "special" purpose?
- Sure. Added a bit.
Hawkeye7
(discuss)
11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Link neutron.
- And chain reaction.
- "about 25 kg, while that of plutonium would be about 5 kg" converts?
- An odd thing about the old measurements: weights of base metals are in avoirdupois ounces, precious metals in troy ounces, fissile metals in grams. Hence,no conversion required. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- "17.5 cm and a thickness of 11.3 cm, for a mass of 317 kg" same.
- Converted.
Hawkeye7
(discuss)
11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- "Tungsten carbide has ..." you previously told us this was WC, why not use that?
- Dislike using chemical symbols when names are available. The symbol tells you its composition, without having to check out the other article, which is why I included it. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Link depleted uranium.
- "are obvious advantages" delete obvious.
- Deleted.
Hawkeye7
(discuss)
11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Is Uranium-238 linked?
- "megaelectronvolts" consider linking this too, not exactly a common unit.
- "is 14.1 kg, compared with 52.5 kg in " convert.
- "the W-88 warhead" neither the image or linked article hyphenates W88.
- Image does. De-hyphenated.
Hawkeye7
(discuss)
11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- "an atomic weight nearly" overlinked.
- Unlinked.
Hawkeye7
(discuss)
11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Link boron(-10).
- And plutonium(-239).
- "and ionizes at" first mention of "ionize" since the lead and you didn't link it in the lead.
- Can we link British nuclear tests at Maralinga?
That's it, it's a very nice piece of work. The Rambling Man ( Keep wearing the mask...) 10:34, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- I would have liked to link to an article on diffusion theory, but it redirections to Radiative transfer equation and diffusion theory for photon transport in biological tissue - the very problem (redirects going to inappropriate places) that caused me to write this article in the first place. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:54, 31 August 2021 (UTC)