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Reviewer: Jaguar ( talk · contribs) 16:45, 18 December 2015 (UTC) reply

I'll start reading through this article tomorrow. JAG UAR  16:45, 18 December 2015 (UTC) reply

Initial comments

• "is a Japanese role-playing video game, co-developed for the PlayStation 2 (PS2)" - I think this is unnecessary as the release is mentioned later on in the lead at "It released on PS2 in November 2002". This could be shifted there
• Why are the exact release dates not mentioned in the lead?
• "and March of the same year in Korea" - South Korea
• "The story, set eighteen years after Destiny" - why is this not written out as Tales of Destiny?
• "Character designs were done by Mutsumi Inomata" - how about created
• "In addition, a downloadable ring tone based on "Key to My Heart"" - is this a real song? I know it can't be the one I'm thinking of as the game is Japanese. Is it in-game music?
• "Destiny 2 was later ported to the PlayStation Portable (PSP)" - PlayStation Portable (PSP) is already mentioned in the lead
• "It was released on February 15, 2007" - the Korean release should be mentioned too

On hold

This is pure GA material. I'll leave this on hold until all of the (minor) issues are addressed! JAG UAR  20:28, 18 December 2015 (UTC) reply

All the issues addressed, but some minor comments: as to the lead, other GAs where the game was released on multiple dates have gone against using spefific release dates. As to the South Korean release date for the PSP version, that is in the section dedicated to overseas Asian releases. Also fixed a repetition issue you missed. -- ProtoDrake ( talk) 21:01, 18 December 2015 (UTC) reply

Thanks for clearing that up! I wasn't aware of the multiple release dates convention, but it shouldn't really matter. Thanks for fixing the repetition issue too. Promoting JAG UAR  21:46, 19 December 2015 (UTC) reply