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phases. the Ottomans; with Ottomans; Herat. he led an army; artilirary; which was unknown for the other side; four campaigns to Georgia; a patron of arts; he became despise of poets; many of them making them (punctuation); he is remarked; . an example; . in times however,; diplomate; with Republic of Venice and Habsburg Monarchy; There was; disputes; triggered off; the death of; reigned nearly fifty-two years; Safavid dynasty. Though
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The following parts of the section need to be copy edited:
phases. the Ottomans; with Ottomans; Herat. he led an army; artilirary; which was unknown for the other side; four campaigns to Georgia; a patron of arts; he became despise of poets; many of them making them (punctuation); he is remarked; . an example; . in times however,; diplomate; with Republic of Venice and Habsburg Monarchy; There was; disputes; triggered off; the death of; reigned nearly fifty-two years; Safavid dynasty. Though
fourteen – 14
Replace having a hand in with something less idiomatic (see
MOS:IDIOM)
I'm going to stop here and quickfail the article. It is not well-written and needs a copy edit. You could ask at the
Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors and you've got my copyedit here up to where I stopped (I can see the sections that follow need to be copy edited too). With a rewrite I could see this being a good article.
Amitchell125 (
talk)
11:55, 10 January 2022 (UTC)reply