When I do an article review I like to provide a Heading-by-Heading breakdown of suggestions for how to make the article better. It is done in good faith as a means to improve the article. It does not necessarily mean that the article is not GA quality, or that the issues listed are keeping it from GA approval. I also undertake minor grammatical and prose edits. After I finish this part of the review I will look at the over arching quality of the article in light of the GA criteria and make my determination as to the overall quality of the article.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
This is a runon sentence, "In respective singles matches, Ric Flair defeated Triple H in a Steel cage match, which is fought in a cage with four sheets of mesh metal around, in, or against the edges of the wrestling ring, in which Flair won by escaping the cage and having both feet touch the arena floor." Consider moving the description of the match to its own sentence.
Otherwise the lead is fine; photo is good FU rationale is acceptable.
Regarding Background
This sentence doesn't make sense, "After the match started, Eric Bischoff came out and announced that McMahon who had left the arena and placed himself in charge."
H1nkles (
talk)
19:40, 14 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Don't want to mess your style up, but quickly, would this work ---> "A match was scheduled, but before it got underway, Eric Bischoff had announced that McMahon had left the arena, thus leaving himself in charge", work?
"Before Taboo Tuesday aired live on pay-per-view, Kerwin White (Salvador Guerrero III) and Matt Striker (Matthew Kaye) defeated Shelton Benjamin and Val Venis (Sean Morley) in a tag team match taped for WWE Heat, one of WWE's secondary television programs.[2]" Stub paragraph, was this a
Dark match? You could add something about that to expand the paragraph.
"Coachman, who stood on the outside, entered the ring, in which Batista performed a clothesline on him." Prose on this sentence is a bit awkward.
I think I got it.
Per
WP:ACCESS your photo of Shawn Michaels should be contained w/in the section, it is too large and spills over into the next section. Consider placing the photo higher up in the section so that it is contained completely w/in the section.
H1nkles (
talk)
01:54, 15 February 2009 (UTC)reply
The article is fine, I'll pass it as is, if you could do a few of the fixes including moving that photo to comply with
MOS then everything will be great. Well done.
H1nkles (
talk)
02:19, 15 February 2009 (UTC)reply
When I do an article review I like to provide a Heading-by-Heading breakdown of suggestions for how to make the article better. It is done in good faith as a means to improve the article. It does not necessarily mean that the article is not GA quality, or that the issues listed are keeping it from GA approval. I also undertake minor grammatical and prose edits. After I finish this part of the review I will look at the over arching quality of the article in light of the GA criteria and make my determination as to the overall quality of the article.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
This is a runon sentence, "In respective singles matches, Ric Flair defeated Triple H in a Steel cage match, which is fought in a cage with four sheets of mesh metal around, in, or against the edges of the wrestling ring, in which Flair won by escaping the cage and having both feet touch the arena floor." Consider moving the description of the match to its own sentence.
Otherwise the lead is fine; photo is good FU rationale is acceptable.
Regarding Background
This sentence doesn't make sense, "After the match started, Eric Bischoff came out and announced that McMahon who had left the arena and placed himself in charge."
H1nkles (
talk)
19:40, 14 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Don't want to mess your style up, but quickly, would this work ---> "A match was scheduled, but before it got underway, Eric Bischoff had announced that McMahon had left the arena, thus leaving himself in charge", work?
"Before Taboo Tuesday aired live on pay-per-view, Kerwin White (Salvador Guerrero III) and Matt Striker (Matthew Kaye) defeated Shelton Benjamin and Val Venis (Sean Morley) in a tag team match taped for WWE Heat, one of WWE's secondary television programs.[2]" Stub paragraph, was this a
Dark match? You could add something about that to expand the paragraph.
"Coachman, who stood on the outside, entered the ring, in which Batista performed a clothesline on him." Prose on this sentence is a bit awkward.
I think I got it.
Per
WP:ACCESS your photo of Shawn Michaels should be contained w/in the section, it is too large and spills over into the next section. Consider placing the photo higher up in the section so that it is contained completely w/in the section.
H1nkles (
talk)
01:54, 15 February 2009 (UTC)reply
The article is fine, I'll pass it as is, if you could do a few of the fixes including moving that photo to comply with
MOS then everything will be great. Well done.
H1nkles (
talk)
02:19, 15 February 2009 (UTC)reply