Remove the comma after "King Thomas took back Srebrenica".
"300 ducats was" → "300 ducats were"
"iobliged" - typo?
Remove all line-breaks created using <br>.
"de nova dignitate cherzech acquisita" - explain what that means.
"Tvrtko in" → "Tvrtko in"
Be consistent with herceg, Herceg, and Herceg.
"Just before death" → "Before the death"
"After this he completely withdraw to his fortress in Novi." - reword
"of Kosača family" → "of the Kosača family"
"but Skanderbeg failed to carry out his promises" - source?
"most Bosnian nobleman" → "most Bosnian noblemen"
"a move which proved to be" → "a move that proved to be"
"traditionally, most Bosnians' attitudes, and Stjepan Vukčić was no exception" - reword
Be consistent with the use and absence of serial commas.
Overall, this article needs a large copyedit. Try paraphrasing quotes and removing the article's informal tone. Failing for now, but feel free to renominate when my comments above have been addressed and a copy-edit has been requested and completed. Some Dude From North Carolina (
talk)
23:32, 21 July 2021 (UTC)reply
Remove the comma after "King Thomas took back Srebrenica".
"300 ducats was" → "300 ducats were"
"iobliged" - typo?
Remove all line-breaks created using <br>.
"de nova dignitate cherzech acquisita" - explain what that means.
"Tvrtko in" → "Tvrtko in"
Be consistent with herceg, Herceg, and Herceg.
"Just before death" → "Before the death"
"After this he completely withdraw to his fortress in Novi." - reword
"of Kosača family" → "of the Kosača family"
"but Skanderbeg failed to carry out his promises" - source?
"most Bosnian nobleman" → "most Bosnian noblemen"
"a move which proved to be" → "a move that proved to be"
"traditionally, most Bosnians' attitudes, and Stjepan Vukčić was no exception" - reword
Be consistent with the use and absence of serial commas.
Overall, this article needs a large copyedit. Try paraphrasing quotes and removing the article's informal tone. Failing for now, but feel free to renominate when my comments above have been addressed and a copy-edit has been requested and completed. Some Dude From North Carolina (
talk)
23:32, 21 July 2021 (UTC)reply