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Reviewer: Trainsandotherthings ( talk · contribs) 20:49, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
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it serves the nearby Singapore Chinese Girls' School and St. Joseph's Institution schoolsthe "schools" can be removed, since the first example already mentions it's a school and the sentence is a bit awkward with school repeated.
In August 2012, the station was announced to interchange with the TEL.This needs a rewrite. I suggest "In August 2012, it was announced that the station would include an interchange with the planned Thompson-East Coast Line".
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After a public poll in 2009, the station kept its working name as "Stevens".Change to "working name of "Stevens".
Contract 919 for the design and construction of Stevens station and associated tunnelsI recommend removing the contract number. It isn't relevant anywhere else, and kind of shows up without context. Just say "The contract for the design and construction of Stevens station and associated tunnels..."
The contract also includes the construction of the adjacent Botanic Gardens stationChange to included, as this is past tense.
Stevens station was first announced to interchange with the 22-station Thomson line (TSL) on 29 August 2012As I said earlier, this should be reworded to be clearer and easier to understand.
Stevens is one of the smallest MRT stations on the DTL due to its location near the Wayang Satu Flyover and the Bukit Timah CanalThis is repeating the information from the previous paragraph. This should be consolidated to just say "Due to the nearby flyover and canal, Stevens is one of the smallest MRT stations on the DTL".
A 24-metre (79 ft) mosaic24 meters in what dimension? Height? Width?
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Reviewer: Trainsandotherthings ( talk · contribs) 20:49, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
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it serves the nearby Singapore Chinese Girls' School and St. Joseph's Institution schoolsthe "schools" can be removed, since the first example already mentions it's a school and the sentence is a bit awkward with school repeated.
In August 2012, the station was announced to interchange with the TEL.This needs a rewrite. I suggest "In August 2012, it was announced that the station would include an interchange with the planned Thompson-East Coast Line".
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After a public poll in 2009, the station kept its working name as "Stevens".Change to "working name of "Stevens".
Contract 919 for the design and construction of Stevens station and associated tunnelsI recommend removing the contract number. It isn't relevant anywhere else, and kind of shows up without context. Just say "The contract for the design and construction of Stevens station and associated tunnels..."
The contract also includes the construction of the adjacent Botanic Gardens stationChange to included, as this is past tense.
Stevens station was first announced to interchange with the 22-station Thomson line (TSL) on 29 August 2012As I said earlier, this should be reworded to be clearer and easier to understand.
Stevens is one of the smallest MRT stations on the DTL due to its location near the Wayang Satu Flyover and the Bukit Timah CanalThis is repeating the information from the previous paragraph. This should be consolidated to just say "Due to the nearby flyover and canal, Stevens is one of the smallest MRT stations on the DTL".
A 24-metre (79 ft) mosaic24 meters in what dimension? Height? Width?
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