Hi, I'll be reviewing this. Grabbing it up right away as I'm always happy to see GANs related to my home state. I'm working on a few other GANs right now, but comments to come soon.
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 17:33, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
GA review – see
WP:WIAGA for criteriareply
Starting the review now. Pretty short so I've done this all at once.
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Covers design, construction, reception, and the statue's namesake. Mostly good, but I'd like to see more from 1900 to present if available. If not, that's not a huge issue.
Seems there isn't really any information available here. That's not enough to prevent GA in my opinion.
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 20:36, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply
As I mentioned above, the lead is rather short and should be expanded.
Expanded and rephrased lead to incorporate more information from the article.
"The statue would be the first of six Revolutionary War sculptures Ward would create during his lifetime, and it was also the first sculpture he would work on following a trip to Europe." I don't see the relevance of the second part of this sentence to the article. I would remove it.
Done.
"The monument was dedicated on June 17, 1874 in a large ceremony in the park." Suggest changing one of the two uses of "in" to "at".
Done.
The one sentence from 1993 feels out of place, is there any other information about the statue dating to 1900 or later that could be included here to make the paragraph longer than just one sentence?
Unfortunately, I could not find much recent information on the statue aside from the survey in 1993.
"He is holding a sword by his side with his left hand while his relaxed right hand holds onto a tricorne." Suggest a comma after "his left hand".
Done.
"The Bushnell Park Foundation, which oversees the park and administers the statue, observed that" "They proceed to note" These two sentences should be in the same tense, so "proceed" should be "proceeded", or "observed" should be "observe".
Done,
Consider rearranging this section to put contemporary analysis ahead of modern analysis, to follow chronological order.
Rearranged section and slight rephrasing to follow chronological order.
That's all my comments, placing this on hold pending responses.
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 19:12, 5 January 2022 (UTC)reply
Just now seeing this, will make some edits shortly! -
JJonahJackalope (
talk) 16:53, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply
{{u|Trainsandotherthings]], just wanted to reach out and say that I have made some edits to the article to address your comments above. Thank you for starting this review, and if there are any further questions, comments, or concerns, please let me know. -
JJonahJackalope (
talk) 18:16, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply
That ping didn't go through, but don't worry I still saw your edits. Everything looks good now and I will promote the article to GA. Congratulations!
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 20:33, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply
Hi, I'll be reviewing this. Grabbing it up right away as I'm always happy to see GANs related to my home state. I'm working on a few other GANs right now, but comments to come soon.
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 17:33, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
GA review – see
WP:WIAGA for criteriareply
Starting the review now. Pretty short so I've done this all at once.
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Covers design, construction, reception, and the statue's namesake. Mostly good, but I'd like to see more from 1900 to present if available. If not, that's not a huge issue.
Seems there isn't really any information available here. That's not enough to prevent GA in my opinion.
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 20:36, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply
As I mentioned above, the lead is rather short and should be expanded.
Expanded and rephrased lead to incorporate more information from the article.
"The statue would be the first of six Revolutionary War sculptures Ward would create during his lifetime, and it was also the first sculpture he would work on following a trip to Europe." I don't see the relevance of the second part of this sentence to the article. I would remove it.
Done.
"The monument was dedicated on June 17, 1874 in a large ceremony in the park." Suggest changing one of the two uses of "in" to "at".
Done.
The one sentence from 1993 feels out of place, is there any other information about the statue dating to 1900 or later that could be included here to make the paragraph longer than just one sentence?
Unfortunately, I could not find much recent information on the statue aside from the survey in 1993.
"He is holding a sword by his side with his left hand while his relaxed right hand holds onto a tricorne." Suggest a comma after "his left hand".
Done.
"The Bushnell Park Foundation, which oversees the park and administers the statue, observed that" "They proceed to note" These two sentences should be in the same tense, so "proceed" should be "proceeded", or "observed" should be "observe".
Done,
Consider rearranging this section to put contemporary analysis ahead of modern analysis, to follow chronological order.
Rearranged section and slight rephrasing to follow chronological order.
That's all my comments, placing this on hold pending responses.
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 19:12, 5 January 2022 (UTC)reply
Just now seeing this, will make some edits shortly! -
JJonahJackalope (
talk) 16:53, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply
{{u|Trainsandotherthings]], just wanted to reach out and say that I have made some edits to the article to address your comments above. Thank you for starting this review, and if there are any further questions, comments, or concerns, please let me know. -
JJonahJackalope (
talk) 18:16, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply
That ping didn't go through, but don't worry I still saw your edits. Everything looks good now and I will promote the article to GA. Congratulations!
Trainsandotherthings (
talk) 20:33, 8 January 2022 (UTC)reply