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I have finished my first rough and ready run through. I will be coming back to make another couple of passes. This is an excellent article. I have assessed it as B class for MilHist while I was here. I have tended to edit boldly, so if there is anything which you don't understand why I have done it, disagree with or think distorts what the source says, give me a ping. Gog the Mild ( talk) 14:24, 29 April 2018 (UTC)
This sentence reads oddly to my eyes. Firstly the source only states that the PE "duplicated" the Assyrian system, not that it was "based upon" it. And while the US postal system adopted Herodotus' description I am not aware of this being used by the PE - or of the PE even being aware of it. I am happy to be proven wrong by a source. The mention also begs the question of why you don't mention other systems more similar to the Assyrian one; eg the Mongol Empire's (unsurprisingly remarkably similar), the Byzantine's or the Inca Empire's. (Which IMO you could profitably do.) Gog the Mild ( talk) 14:46, 29 April 2018 (UTC)
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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague ( talk · contribs) 20:58, 14 May 2018 (UTC)
I'll review.
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I think the opening sentence should refer less to the patrons of the network and be more descriptive. Take
Interstate Highway System for example. The first sentence reads "...is a network of controlled-access highways that forms...". The current first sentence for this article should maybe become the second.
Though it doesn't necessarily need to go, the definition of mules probably is a bit redundant once you've already linked to the article on mules.
Is the term kalliu Assyrian as well?
Was the highway system innovation adopted from the Romans', or did it come about separately?
Great article, not sure much else is needed. Just some slight changes.
QatarStarsLeague (
talk) 02:25, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
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I have finished my first rough and ready run through. I will be coming back to make another couple of passes. This is an excellent article. I have assessed it as B class for MilHist while I was here. I have tended to edit boldly, so if there is anything which you don't understand why I have done it, disagree with or think distorts what the source says, give me a ping. Gog the Mild ( talk) 14:24, 29 April 2018 (UTC)
This sentence reads oddly to my eyes. Firstly the source only states that the PE "duplicated" the Assyrian system, not that it was "based upon" it. And while the US postal system adopted Herodotus' description I am not aware of this being used by the PE - or of the PE even being aware of it. I am happy to be proven wrong by a source. The mention also begs the question of why you don't mention other systems more similar to the Assyrian one; eg the Mongol Empire's (unsurprisingly remarkably similar), the Byzantine's or the Inca Empire's. (Which IMO you could profitably do.) Gog the Mild ( talk) 14:46, 29 April 2018 (UTC)
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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague ( talk · contribs) 20:58, 14 May 2018 (UTC)
I'll review.
QatarStarsLeague (
talk) 20:58, 14 May 2018 (UTC)
I think the opening sentence should refer less to the patrons of the network and be more descriptive. Take
Interstate Highway System for example. The first sentence reads "...is a network of controlled-access highways that forms...". The current first sentence for this article should maybe become the second.
Though it doesn't necessarily need to go, the definition of mules probably is a bit redundant once you've already linked to the article on mules.
Is the term kalliu Assyrian as well?
Was the highway system innovation adopted from the Romans', or did it come about separately?
Great article, not sure much else is needed. Just some slight changes.
QatarStarsLeague (
talk) 02:25, 16 May 2018 (UTC)