'Oceans' seems too common a term to link, though it has importance in an article about an aquatic organism. Done
'... and five arms though some species ...' - '... and five arms, though some species ...' Done
'... shades of red or orange but others are blue, grey ...' - '... shades of red or orange while others are blue, grey ...' Done
' (>6000 metres)' convert metre to ft. Done
Suggestions:
It should probably be noted in the beginning of the article that a more appropriate term is "Sea star," as they are an Echinoderm, and many biologists are trying to phase-out the antiquated "Starfish." — Preceding
unsigned comment added by
71.180.249.182 (
talk)
00:13, 14 July 2013 (UTC)reply
After lead, you could perhaps make a section 'Taxonomy', where you describe who named the class and when. 'Diversity' can be transferred to this section, as it seems to break the flow, coming between 'Distribution' and 'Threats'.
'Research' is a very small section, could be merged in 'Appearance', with if possible more info, under the name 'Chemical properties' or such.
Link calcium carbonate, homology, Porcellanasteridae Done. The last is a red link but I will make a stub article.
'light-colored' - Should use British English, colour. All mayn't understand American English. Look for other instances. Done some examples but their may be one or two I have missed.
Internal anatomy Done
Link gonads, cornea, iris, ampulla Done
You may increase the literature in 'Body wall' with the help of this article:
Title:Structure and mechanics of starfish body wall
Author:P. O'Neill
Pubmed citation:2614339 Done
You have defined papulae in the subsection 'Body wall', and then repeat it in 'Respiration and excretion'. Done
Measurements in 'Locomotion' should use
convert templates. Done
You write 'esophagus' (AE) in 'Digestive system', and 'oesophagus' (BE) in 'Nervous system'. Done
'... Asterina gibbosa, being an example of these.' No need of comma. Done
Link spawning (spawn), fertilization, brooding Done
'Starfish may use environmental signals to coordinate the time of spawning (day length to indicate the correct time of the year, dawn or dusk to indicate the correct time of day), and chemical signals to indicate their readiness to each other' I understand, but is there any particular time of spawning in the year or it varies from species to species? Extra sentence added.
Use Convert template in 'Lifespan' Done
Distribution Done
'...larvae are planktonic which allows...' - comma before 'which' Done
I have done all the things mentioned above with the exception of your suggestions about rearranging sections which I will look at next. I had not given enough attention to the references. Cwmhiraeth (
talk)
11:29, 18 October 2012 (UTC)reply
Great, you have resolved all issues! I can promote this as GA, but the suggestions remain. Well, I just found a few articles which show a starfish species as a threat. May be good to mention in the article. Take a look:
Title: A threat to coral reefs multiplied? Four species of crown-of-thorns starfish
Authors: Catherine Vogler, John Benzie, Harilaos Lessios, Paul Barber and Gert Wörheide
Title: The threat of the ‘crown-of-thorns’ starfish (Acanthaster planci) to coral reefs in the Indo-Pacific area: Observations on a normal population in the Red Sea
Authors: Andrew C. Campbell and Rupert F.G. Ormond
I have added a little more about the crown-of-thorns starfish in the Diet section but it is not really relevant to the Threats section. I have expanded the latter a little with information on the consequences of an oil spill. Cwmhiraeth (
talk)
13:23, 21 October 2012 (UTC)reply
Just one more issue. About this "Gallery" section at the last, I think it is not required.
Bivalvia, another article of a class, also does not use it. And even if it is needed, it should be placed after "Threats" (the last section of the actual text).
(a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline;
(b)
reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose);✓Pass
'Oceans' seems too common a term to link, though it has importance in an article about an aquatic organism. Done
'... and five arms though some species ...' - '... and five arms, though some species ...' Done
'... shades of red or orange but others are blue, grey ...' - '... shades of red or orange while others are blue, grey ...' Done
' (>6000 metres)' convert metre to ft. Done
Suggestions:
It should probably be noted in the beginning of the article that a more appropriate term is "Sea star," as they are an Echinoderm, and many biologists are trying to phase-out the antiquated "Starfish." — Preceding
unsigned comment added by
71.180.249.182 (
talk)
00:13, 14 July 2013 (UTC)reply
After lead, you could perhaps make a section 'Taxonomy', where you describe who named the class and when. 'Diversity' can be transferred to this section, as it seems to break the flow, coming between 'Distribution' and 'Threats'.
'Research' is a very small section, could be merged in 'Appearance', with if possible more info, under the name 'Chemical properties' or such.
Link calcium carbonate, homology, Porcellanasteridae Done. The last is a red link but I will make a stub article.
'light-colored' - Should use British English, colour. All mayn't understand American English. Look for other instances. Done some examples but their may be one or two I have missed.
Internal anatomy Done
Link gonads, cornea, iris, ampulla Done
You may increase the literature in 'Body wall' with the help of this article:
Title:Structure and mechanics of starfish body wall
Author:P. O'Neill
Pubmed citation:2614339 Done
You have defined papulae in the subsection 'Body wall', and then repeat it in 'Respiration and excretion'. Done
Measurements in 'Locomotion' should use
convert templates. Done
You write 'esophagus' (AE) in 'Digestive system', and 'oesophagus' (BE) in 'Nervous system'. Done
'... Asterina gibbosa, being an example of these.' No need of comma. Done
Link spawning (spawn), fertilization, brooding Done
'Starfish may use environmental signals to coordinate the time of spawning (day length to indicate the correct time of the year, dawn or dusk to indicate the correct time of day), and chemical signals to indicate their readiness to each other' I understand, but is there any particular time of spawning in the year or it varies from species to species? Extra sentence added.
Use Convert template in 'Lifespan' Done
Distribution Done
'...larvae are planktonic which allows...' - comma before 'which' Done
I have done all the things mentioned above with the exception of your suggestions about rearranging sections which I will look at next. I had not given enough attention to the references. Cwmhiraeth (
talk)
11:29, 18 October 2012 (UTC)reply
Great, you have resolved all issues! I can promote this as GA, but the suggestions remain. Well, I just found a few articles which show a starfish species as a threat. May be good to mention in the article. Take a look:
Title: A threat to coral reefs multiplied? Four species of crown-of-thorns starfish
Authors: Catherine Vogler, John Benzie, Harilaos Lessios, Paul Barber and Gert Wörheide
Title: The threat of the ‘crown-of-thorns’ starfish (Acanthaster planci) to coral reefs in the Indo-Pacific area: Observations on a normal population in the Red Sea
Authors: Andrew C. Campbell and Rupert F.G. Ormond
I have added a little more about the crown-of-thorns starfish in the Diet section but it is not really relevant to the Threats section. I have expanded the latter a little with information on the consequences of an oil spill. Cwmhiraeth (
talk)
13:23, 21 October 2012 (UTC)reply
Just one more issue. About this "Gallery" section at the last, I think it is not required.
Bivalvia, another article of a class, also does not use it. And even if it is needed, it should be placed after "Threats" (the last section of the actual text).
(a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline;
(b)
reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose);✓Pass