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Update reference to St John of God Health Care to read: St John of God Health Care is one of the largest Catholic providers of health care services in Australia.[1]
This
edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest has now been answered.
Update reference tname of home nursing services to St John of God Healthcare at Home.[2]
Hi
AnneGartner. Thank you for the suggestions, and thank you for using edit requests instead of editing the article directly. I am declining the first edit request for two reasons. First, the claim that your hospital network is the largest in Australia needs to supported by an
independent source. I can't just take your organization's word for it. Second, labeling a hospital network the "largest" is vague and ambiguous. St John could be the largest by hospital beds, by expenditures, or by number of doctors; but the point is, Wikipedia articles should avoid using
vaguely positive terms when more specific descriptions would do better.
For your second edit request, could you be more specific? Do you mean to say that "Health Choices" has been renamed "Healthcare at Home?" I have some qualms about featuring brand names in articles. Just calling it a home nursing service would be less promotional. I'll have to think about it, and other editors should feel free to step in on this one.
One more thing – could you clarify which organization is paying you for these edits? Is it St John of God Health Care or a third-party agency? I need this information so I can fill out the disclosure form for you. Best,
Altamel (
talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)reply
Talk page watchers, please see a relevant discussion at
WP:COIN.
Altamel (
talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)reply
As @
Altamel: has said, could you be more specific about what you want to change? I am marking this as answered. @
AnneGartner: Please remove the |answred=yes when you respond. Thanks
Darth Flappy«Talk» 23:47, 24 June 2020 (UTC)reply
Hi
Altamel.Thanks for letting me know. Re Healthcare at Home - it is the name of the home nursing service. It would be accurate to just describe it as home nursing and remove any naming. I am employed directly by St John of God Health Care so there is no third party agency. Thanks.
58.109.203.115 (
talk) 01:13, 25 June 2020 (UTC)reply
St John of God Berwick Hospital is within the scope of WikiProject Australia, which aims to improve Wikipedia's coverage of
Australia and
Australia-related topics. If you would like to participate, visit the
project page.AustraliaWikipedia:WikiProject AustraliaTemplate:WikiProject AustraliaAustralia articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Hospitals, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
Hospitals on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
the discussion and see a list of open tasks.HospitalsWikipedia:WikiProject HospitalsTemplate:WikiProject HospitalsHospital articles
The
Wikimedia Foundation's
Terms of Use require that editors disclose their "employer, client, and affiliation" with respect to any paid contribution; see
WP:PAID. For advice about reviewing paid contributions, see
WP:COIRESPONSE.
Update reference to St John of God Health Care to read: St John of God Health Care is one of the largest Catholic providers of health care services in Australia.[1]
This
edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest has now been answered.
Update reference tname of home nursing services to St John of God Healthcare at Home.[2]
Hi
AnneGartner. Thank you for the suggestions, and thank you for using edit requests instead of editing the article directly. I am declining the first edit request for two reasons. First, the claim that your hospital network is the largest in Australia needs to supported by an
independent source. I can't just take your organization's word for it. Second, labeling a hospital network the "largest" is vague and ambiguous. St John could be the largest by hospital beds, by expenditures, or by number of doctors; but the point is, Wikipedia articles should avoid using
vaguely positive terms when more specific descriptions would do better.
For your second edit request, could you be more specific? Do you mean to say that "Health Choices" has been renamed "Healthcare at Home?" I have some qualms about featuring brand names in articles. Just calling it a home nursing service would be less promotional. I'll have to think about it, and other editors should feel free to step in on this one.
One more thing – could you clarify which organization is paying you for these edits? Is it St John of God Health Care or a third-party agency? I need this information so I can fill out the disclosure form for you. Best,
Altamel (
talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)reply
Talk page watchers, please see a relevant discussion at
WP:COIN.
Altamel (
talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)reply
As @
Altamel: has said, could you be more specific about what you want to change? I am marking this as answered. @
AnneGartner: Please remove the |answred=yes when you respond. Thanks
Darth Flappy«Talk» 23:47, 24 June 2020 (UTC)reply
Hi
Altamel.Thanks for letting me know. Re Healthcare at Home - it is the name of the home nursing service. It would be accurate to just describe it as home nursing and remove any naming. I am employed directly by St John of God Health Care so there is no third party agency. Thanks.
58.109.203.115 (
talk) 01:13, 25 June 2020 (UTC)reply