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Reviewer: Reidgreg ( talk · contribs) 00:58, 8 August 2023 (UTC)
Nominator: DannyMusicEditor ( talk · contribs)
I've begun a source review and hope to have a full review posted by the end of the week (it will take me a few days). It appears GA-worthy on read through. Please hold back any edits to the article while I'm working on the review, thanks. – Reidgreg ( talk) 00:58, 8 August 2023 (UTC). Progress report: I'm almost halfway through the references. – Reidgreg ( talk) 00:32, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
I've made some minor, non-controversial changes to the article (MOS and reference cleanup). If you disagree with any of it we can discuss as part of the review. My full review follows. It's pretty long but most of the issues are minor and can hopefully be addressed in a simple, straight-forward manner. I've tried to suggest solutions in most cases. If you disagree with anything please say so and we can discuss it.
From this point, I'd like to put any overall discussion about the review at the bottom under 'General discussion'.
Before co-founding Spiritbox, singer Courtney LaPlante and guitarist Mike Stringer were both in Iwrestledabearonce.
Spiritbox formed in Victoria, located on Vancouver Island, British Columbia.not found in this source, but covered by "Morin20210823". Suggest removing this citation.
Jason Mageau, the former manager of Iwrestledabearonce, founded the Pale Chord label, which was distributed via The Orchard in order to release Spiritbox's music.
They subsequently recruited Philadelphia-based drummer Zev Rose [...] who is considerably younger than the other members.Source does not cover the underlined part. I suggest removing the underlined part which does not seem important. (See also under Prose)
and was deemed the best song of 2020 by the station's listeners.
The continued release of "super popular" music videos created anticipation for Spiritbox's forthcoming album.
which landed in the Top 40 of the Billboard Mainstream Rock chart.
Spiritbox has credited Alexisonfire and Protest the Hero as early musical influences.The source is an interview with LaPlante who says that they were "influences on us as teens". The context (previous paragraph) suggests to me that "us" is herself and Stringer. Suggest rephrasing.
Before co-founding Spiritbox, singer Courtney LaPlante and guitarist Mike Stringer were both in Iwrestledabearonce.
In late 2015, they decided to quit the band.
In May, LaPlante appeared on her first major magazine cover, the May issue of Kerrang!.This is the May issue and she is the cover story, but it does not indicate it is her first major magazine cover. Suggest rephrase: "In May, LaPlante appeared on the cover of Kerrang! magazine." or "LaPlante appeared on the cover of the May issue of Kerrang! magazine."
Reflecting on the anticipation for the album's release, it was described as the "most anticipated debut album of 2021" by Alternative Press, Kerrang!, and Metal Hammer.Good for Kerrang!.
LaPlante said she considered Eternal Blue as "finally, at age 32, the realization of my true voice".The source material is
Courtney sees Eternal Blue as, finally, at age 32, the realisation of “my true voice”.Only the last three words are LaPlante's, the underlined part is from the Kerrang! author. It would probably be awkward to attribute the nested quotes to each of them. Suggest: LaPlante said she considered Eternal Blue as the
Sam Coare of Kerrang! highlights her vocal performance saying that "Few frontpeople handle the transition from cleans to screams with the skill, depth and ferocity of Courtney LaPlante".
The couple, engaged for four years, nevertheless wanted to form their joint musical project since 2011.Verified; will raise this again under prose (for clarity).
The couple decided to take a break from touring and return to their hometown to find regular employment. Throughout 2015, multi-instrumentalist Stringer presented to LaPlante demos of songs that he created diligently, displaying different musical styles. LaPlante and Stringer got married in 2016, and two weeks after the wedding, they began investing their money into recording the songs.The source suggests it was close to LaPlante's hometown (specifically that she had a lot of family close by), not certain about Stringer. Do you have another source for this?
Soon afterward, the project was paused for some time, finding themselves deadlocked in their efforts to play the songs in live performances without other musicians.
expressing esteem for their music and offering support through friendship.This might need to be qualified as a statement from LaPlante rather than coming directly from Crook. It might be better to remove it.
however, she also said that "[her] main goal with this band is fluidity"
LaPlante has cited Tesseract,[as influences]. This last one is cited to the same source but doesn't use the named reference "Rogers20201211". The only difference is the access/archive date, but the named reference supports it so you should be able to change this to the named reference.
LaPlante and Stringer had each replaced a previous member of Iwrestledabearonce, and were never comfortable with that status in the band; the two also desired to pursue a new personal and creative direction.
Stringer wrote the drum parts for a planned extended play, which were rearranged by their session drummer at the time, former Iwrestledabearonce bandmate Mikey Montgomery. The EP was recorded by LaPlante and Stringer in their home studio, along with their friend Tim Creviston. It was mixed and mastered by former Volumes member Dan Braunstein in Los Angeles.
She has also expressed admiration for Gojira,
Former session members: Mikey Montgomery – drums (2017)
On October 9, 2017, the husband and wife duo announced the launch of their band named Spiritbox.Lambgoat and TandA Media reported it on that date, but it doesn't say that LaPlante/Stringer announced on that date.
Spiritbox formed in Victoria, located on Vancouver Island, British Columbia.
and was deemed the best song of 2020 by the station's listeners.
The deadline of April 2021 was set to have the album release capacity in the same year.
djent
LaPlante herself has defined the musical genre of Spiritbox as metalcore;
and FKA Twigs.
She said that it is necessary to push the boundaries of the metalcore genre by bringing modernity and diversity of vocal styles to stay relevant.Verified; will address this under Prose.
LaPlante explained that Iwrestledabearonce had made no statement regarding their situation
and thus, she officially confirmed her departure from the band on October 25, 2017.
Spiritbox ultimately received a budget from FACTOR (the Foundation to Assist Canadian Talent on Records), funded by the Government of Canada and private broadcasters, to support investments required for recording and touring.
As Spiritbox, the couple released a seven-song self-titled debut EP on October 27, 2017, which followed a single, "The Beauty of Suffering".Good for the single, but like a lot of similar sources this predates the release of the EP and covers the announcement of its release, not its actual release (which might have been delayed or advanced). Suggest finding another source which confirms it was officially released on that date.
In 2018, Bill Crook of the pop-punk band Living with Lions joined the band as the permanent bassist,Good for everything except the underlined part, which might not be necessary.
It debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs.
The song's original version spent seven weeks as No. 1 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen,
In September 2020, Spiritbox announced that they had signed with Rise Records, as part of the label's partnership with Pale Chord.The source says "fall of 2020". Deadpress covers the announcement in a
The "Holy Roller" remix version spent five weeks as No. 2 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen.
Shortly after, they found a permanent drummer in Ryan Loerke, who also played in the Kelowna-based Shreddy Krueger.Good except for the underlined part ... which is covered by the existing citation to Galor, below.
Loerke left the band in 2020.
Current members Courtney LaPlante – vocals (2016–present) Mike Stringer – guitar (2016–present) Josh Gilbert – bass, backing vocals (2023–present, touring 2022–2023)
Former members: Ryan Loerke – drums (2018–2020) Bill Crook – bass (2018–2022)
Shortly after, they found a permanent drummer in Ryan Loerke, who also played in the Kelowna-based Shreddy Krueger.
Mageau (part of Roc Nation) and the band decided to promote and establish online music rather than spending money on small club tours. As a result, they opted not to tour for two years.One little thing. This tells us Mageau was with the Roc Nation entertainment agency in 2021 when he gave the interview, but he may not have held that position in 2018, which is the period being described there. If it's not terribly important, it may be safest to remove that rather than potentially having it wrong. If you do want to keep it (with qualifiers), it might be better to move it up a sentence to where he is first introduced.
According to Pollstar, Spiritbox's official merchandise store grossed $1 million from its opening in May 2020 to October 2021, with between $30,000 to $60,000 coming in per month.
While Spiritbox gained a growing fan base, they released a five-song EP titled Singles Collection on April 26, 2019, through Pale Chord.Good. The one gives all the details with the announcement and the other covers it after-the-fact to confirm that it was released.
Throughout 2018 and 2019, the band composed most of the songs for their intended debut album.
The band's debut full-length album Eternal Blue was originally scheduled for release in 2020, but production was interrupted due to the COVID-19 pandemic,The source seems to indicate that they held back the release but continued production "We recorded ... at an Air BNB completely isolated in February 2020".
as was the band's first tour, a supporting slot for After the Burial in Europe.Good. The first source reports on the planned first tour and the second reports that it was cancelled.
Spiritbox found critical and commercial success with the release of the single "Holy Roller" on July 3, 2020.
Spiritbox have teamed up with Revolver today (July 3rd) to premiere the insanely catchy and totally crushing new single "Holy Roller."so they clearly have a conflict of interest (which they're honest enough to state up-front). It's still good for the date of the release, but not the opinion that this is the date/release when they achieved critical and commercial success. Suggest rephrasing and moving the citation up: "On July 3, 2020, Spiritbox released the single "Holy Roller"[23] which achieved critical and commercial success." and the existing references for what follows that can cover the last part of the sentence.
It debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs.
The "Holy Roller" remix version spent five weeks as No. 2 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen.
In September 2020, Spiritbox announced that they had signed with Rise Records, as part of the label's partnership with Pale Chord.
The band subsequently released a remix of "Holy Roller" in October, which featured Ryo Kinoshita of Crystal Lake.
In December 2020, Spiritbox debuted "Constance", a song about dementia that was dedicated to LaPlante's grandmother.
In the same month, a Kerrang! magazine reader's poll voted Spiritbox as "Best New Band".The source states "New Band Of The Year". Suggest either changing to that, or removing the quotation marks and putting it in lowercase as a generic: best new band.
In January 2021, Revolver included Spiritbox's upcoming release in its list of "60 Most Anticipated Albums of 2021."
At this point, the band moved to Joshua Tree, California, to continue working on their debut album.
The third single from the album, "Circle with Me", was released in April.
later that month,[May]
the band released the single "Secret Garden",
In June 2021, as part of their Collection: Live series, the Grammy Museum asked Spiritbox to perform and record a live acoustic version of "Constance" in a church accompanied by a string ensemble.Checks except for the month. Stringer says they received the request while they were "tracking the album". Not sure what that means or where it would fit in the process. Also, it seems a bit incomplete to not follow-through and mention that this version was recorded and released.
The band attempted to tour again in July 2021, supporting Limp Bizkit in the US; this was also canceled after a few dates due to safety concerns involving the pandemic.Okay except for the underlined parts; the source doesn't mention the month the tour began or how many shows were played before it was cancelled. Needs another source ... ah, the following source has "The four-week tour only made it three shows in before getting scrapped", so that's part of it. I suppose counting back four weeks from the last cancelled show (24 Aug) would put the first show in late July. So that would do if you could use that here.
This aborted tour with Limp Bizkit led the band to many unexpected expenses; Shinedown singer Brent Smith offered Spiritbox $10,000 to help cover lost tour expenses, while We Came as Romans decided not to charge for the lighting package the band had rented from them.The underlined passage is directly from the source and while the proper name is okay the rest should be rephrased. Suggest: " We Came as Romans waived rental charges for a lighting package."
Smith said of his contribution, "I felt horrible what happened and I would hate for this band to not be able to continue due to this [lost investment] and I just want to contribute."The quote is Stringer relating what Smith said. So you'd have to preface it with something like "According to Stringer, Smith said something like". I suggest removing this passage, as the quote isn't terribly encyclopedic. Or you could paraphrase it down to something like: "According to Stringer, Smith was empathetic and didn't want the band to collapse due to financial hardship."
Smith decided to donate despite having never met the band beforewhich is covered by this source.
One final single, "Hurt You", was released in advance of the album in late August.
At the end of August 2021, the band's songs surpassed 80 million streams across all global streaming platforms, and all physical release and merchandising items were sold out.The source says "most merch items" sold out. Suggest rephrasing or removing that part.
Reflecting on the anticipation for the album's release, it was described as the "most anticipated debut album of 2021" by Alternative Press, Kerrang!, and Metal HammerKerrang is covered by Coare2021, above. AP says it is "one of the most anticipated rock albums of the year" and Metal Hammer "the most eagerly anticipated debut in years", so not the same thing as whats been summarized. (They're not all saying the quoted material verbatim.) To boil it down to a single statement between the three would be (for the underlined passage, unquoted) a highly anticipated album. To regain the impact, perhaps: Reflecting on the album's release, it was described as "the most anticipated debut" of the year by Alternative Press and Kerrang! while Metal Hammer placed it among the year's most anticipated albums of the rock genre.
Nearing the release of Eternal Blue in mid-September 2021, LaPlante revealed that drummer Rose was an official member of Spiritbox. Since joining in early 2020, Rose had not been photographed with the band, leading to speculation that he was not an official member, though LaPlante explained that this was because of travel restrictions during the COVID-19 pandemic that prevented Rose from physically joining the band in Victoria. The band finally met Rose in-person two days before embarking on tour.The way that's written might sound like they met him just before touring for Eternal Blue in or around September 2021. But I'm pretty sure the source (interview) is talking about the aborted tours of early 2020. Suggest removing the underlined part.
Eternal Blue was released on September 17, 2021, to positive reviews from critics.
post-metal
Eternal Blue was released on September 17, 2021, to positive reviews from critics.
metalcore
Eternal Blue was released on September 17, 2021, to positive reviews from critics.
The album[Eternal Blue]
peaked at No. 13 on the US Billboard 200, and landed at No. 3 on the Top Album Sales chart in the week ending October 2, 2021. It topped on both Billboard's Top Rock Albums and Hard Rock Albums charts. The album peaked at No. 8 on the ARIA Charts and No. 19 on the UK Albums Chart.Not sure how they know the sales for the week ending 2 Oct if the piece was published 28 Sep.
In October 2021, Spiritbox performed on the Coheed and Cambria-headlined S.S. Neverender cruise, produced by Norwegian Cruise Line partner Sixthman.
In August 2021, Spiritbox was announced as one of the supporting bands on Underoath's Voyeurist tour, along with Bad Omens and Stray From The Path, in February and March 2022.
Initially, Every Time I Die was to join Underoath and Spiritbox on this tour; however, the band broke up in January 2022.
In May 2022, Ghost announced that Spiritbox would be guests alongside Mastodon as opening acts for the second North American leg of their Imperatour through August and September 2022.Small prose issue to discuss later
However, Spiritbox announced the departure of bassist Bill Crook less than a week later, a mutual decision within the band. Spiritbox quickly recruited Josh Gilbert, who had recently left As I Lay Dying, as their temporary touring bassist.
He would eventually be welcomed as a full-time member in April 2023.
On June 22, 2022, the band released the three-song Rotoscope EP and a video for the title track "Rotoscope".
Guitar World noted that the title track was a dance-like number, while the other two tracks "Sew Me Up" and "Hysteria" were "synth-flavored arrangements".
In November 2022, Spiritbox announced their first ever headlining tour of the United States; they were joined by After the Burial and Intervals from April to May 2023.
On March 7, 2023, Falling In Reverse announced the Popular Monstour, a tour of the United States on which Spiritbox would perform as a guest at six shows.
However, in the following days, Falling In Reverse frontman Ronnie Radke attracted controversy after a fan who alleged him of assault drew an aggressive response from Radke on Twitter. On March 13, Spiritbox announced from their own Twitter account that they had dropped off the dates they were scheduled for the tour.
On April 19, 2023, the band released the single, "The Void".Small problem here as with some of the others. Both sources are dated 19 April and say the single was released, but they don't say that it was released on 19 April.
On May 2, 2023, the band was announced as support for the fall leg of Shinedown's Revolutions Live tour along with Papa Roach.This avoids the above problem somewhat but I think maybe it would be better as "was announced by Loudwire" or "was reported by Loudwire".
Spiritbox employs several heavy metal-based musical styles. Writing for Metal Injection, Max Morin wrote that attempting to pigeonhole the band to any particular music style is "pointless".
LaPlante's singing has received acclaim from music critics. Morin called her "one of the best vocalists in the modern metal scene".
metalcore,[44][63][64][65] progressive metal,[63][66][67] alternative metal,[68][69][70] post-metal,[63][43] djent,[66][8] and nu metal.[71]
They have also been labelled as "post-metalcore".
Bobby Olivier of Billboard wrote the band displayed aspects ranging from atmospheric to industrial.
Spiritbox combined electronic styles after deriving inspiration from the 1980s pop music scene, Nine Inch Nails, and early post-punk bands such as the Cure.
The band has acknowledged that the impact of 1980s dark rock and pop bands, embodied by uncluttered musical compositions through synthesizer minimalism in "airy" song structures, inspired Spiritbox's style and served as the backbone for their work.Not seeing the underlined part in the source.
and served as the base for their songwriting.which I feel is better but I'm still not seeing this in the source. On their musical style, the source has "The aesthetic ranges widely, from atmospheric to industrial, hooky to progressive", Stringer: "We just really appreciate and love pop music. We really appreciate the '80s", Laplante: "and Nine Inch Nails", Laplante: "The '80s dark rock and pop bands really influenced a lot of our writing." I didn't see anything further, and I feel that going from 'influence' to 'the base of their [creative process]' is a bit of a jump (ie: original research). One thing that comes up a bit is how eclectic and genre-defying they are, so when there is a generalization I'd like it to be well sourced.
The band referred to Depeche Mode and Tears for Fears as particularly significant influences.
Her vocal phrasing based on her musical expression, primarily rooted in contemporary R&B, would become a distinctive feature; she has cited Doja Cat, H.E.R., SZA, and the Weeknd as influences.Not seeing the underlined part in the source.
According to LaPlante, the band's music was constructed out of a progressive metal foundation before being condensed for the final version of the songs.
Tool,The interview says that she "loves bands like that", not that it was an influence.
Revolver's Eli Enis described the band's musical style as an arrangement of "alt-metal with elegant vocals and thunderous djent grooves".
The band integrates electronic elements such as samples and programmed drums within their sound as distinctive characteristics, as part of a musical genre evolving through the artistic use of new technologies. Guitar World wrote that Spiritbox "successfully mastered the art of digitally infused metal" while "maintaining a sonic stamp that's completely their own".My issue here is that "samples, programmed drums and synth lines" are given by the source as examples of electronic elements, but it doesn't specifically say that Spiritbox uses these elements. I'm pretty sure that one of the article's other sources could cover this, if you could check and add one.
Stringer's guitar playing style includes a " Gojira-esque pick scrape technique".
The digital synthesizer appeared as a particular sonic aspect of the band.Regarding synths, the second source is talking about it in their album and the first source talks about it on three songs from that album. Is there another source which talks about synths in their music/sound overall? Otherwise you might be limited to saying something like "The digital synthsizer appears as a particular sonic aspect of much of the band's music."
LaPlante's first experience with the death growl came from listening to Cannibal Corpse at the age of five, which developed into a marked interest in harsh vocals during her early adolescence while listening to nu metal. At the age of eighteen, LaPlante laid down her screamed vocals for the first time on a breakdown of a song written by her brother.
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as appropriate. The archives are working though, and was able to verify.
The Heavy Music Awards is an annual awards ceremony in partnership with Amazon Music and Ticketmaster.
The Saskatchewan Independent Film Awards is a ceremony presented annually by the Saskatchewan Filmpool Cooperative, honoring the province's independent film achievements.
The Saskatchewan Music Awards is an annual awards ceremony established in 2018, honoring the achievements of the province's music industry.
Going through the sources used for the article, coverage seems good for GA. Took a little look around and found a couple things of possible interest:
Lead:
Husband and wife duo guitarist Mike Stringer and vocalist Courtney LaPlante publicly established Spiritbox on October 9, 2017. The band's full lineup comprises LaPlante, Stringer, drummer Zev Rose, and bassist Josh Gilbert.I'm not sure about the tone set with 'husband and wife duo', especially placing it at the beginning of the second sentence. It gives a lot of prominence to the fact and establishes it as a defining characteristic of the group – moreso, say, than their array of styles and mix of electronic and metal. Also, I'm not sure that we need the full date there. What would you think of rephrasing it as "Spiritbox is a Canadian heavy metal band from Victoria, British Columbia, formed by guitarist Mike Stringer and vocalist Courtney LaPlante in 2017. The band's full lineup comprises LaPlante and Stringer, who are a married couple, drummer Zev Rose, and bassist Josh Gilbert."
The band's metal style is difficult to pigeonhole into a specific subgenre and displays an array of styles that draw from a variety of influences and incorporate electronic elements, though much of it is rooted in metalcore and progressive metal.The underlined part seems a bit awkward and the sentence changes direction a couple times. The lead should be easy to read with a simple sentence structure. It could use more cohesion. What would you think of: "The band's style incorporates electronic elements and draws from a variety of influences, crossing multiple metal subgenres with its roots in metalcore and progressive metal."
Dissatisfaction with their roles caused LaPlante and Stringer to leave their former band, Iwrestledabearonce, and they started Spiritbox, seeking artistic freedom.How about "Dissatisfaction with their roles caused LaPlante and Stringer to leave their former band, Iwrestledabearonce, and they founded Spiritbox to express themselves artistically." or better: "LaPlante and Stringer had been members of Iwrestledabearonce, but were dissatisfied with their roles and founded Spiritbox to express themselves artistically."
Rather than touring, Spiritbox initially developed an approach to fanbase building focused on the Internet and introduced their music through acclaimed music videos. The band began touring in 2020, and continued to gain popularity with several singles that reached the Billboard charts before releasing their debut album Eternal Blue (2021), which entered the US Billboard 200 at number 13.How about: "Spiritbox released a series of popular music videos on the Internet, developing a fanbase before they began touring in 2020. They continued to gain popularity with several charting singles and their debut album Eternal Blue (2021) entered the US Billboard 200 at number 13."
Rather than touring, Spiritbox initially built their fanbase by focusing on promotion through the Internet and introduced their music through a series of popular music videos, before debuting as a touring band in 2020.That's better, but it's still more complex than necessary. The 'rather than' is saying what the band didn't do. For the lead, it'd be better to stick to what they did do. The two clauses about touring are also repetitive; there should be one or the other, not both.
History:
The couple, engaged for four years, nevertheless wanted to form their joint musical project since 2011. In late 2015, they decided to quit the band.I've been wondering how to make the timeline a little clearer, with the engagement being (roughly) 2011–2015 rather than 2007–2011. Keeping in mind that the source isn't especially specific, how about: "The couple were engaged during this time and since 2011 had wanted to form their own joint musical project. In late 2015, they decided to quit the band."
Throughout 2015, multi-instrumentalist Stringer presented to LaPlante demos of songs that he created diligently, displaying different musical styles.The word diligently stands out to me for tone but I feel it could be improved a bit more. How about: "Throughout 2015, Stringer created demos of songs in different styles to help them decide on a direction for their band."
LaPlante and Stringer got married in 2016, and two weeks after the wedding, they began investing their money into recording the songs.LaPlante and Stringer married in 2016, and two weeks later began recording songs.
On October 9, 2017, the husband and wife duo announced the launch of their band named Spiritbox.[6] Spiritbox formed in Victoria, located on [[Vancouver Island, British Columbia]].[1]Suggest: On October 9, 2017, LaPlante and Stringer announced the launch of their band, Spiritbox,[6] formed in Victoria, British Columbia.[1]
she officially confirmed her departure from the band on October 25, 2017.There's a chance that someone might read this as her departing the band on this date rather than confirming on this date (that she had previously left the band). Suggest: on October 25, she confirmed her departure from that band.
Spiritbox ultimately received a budget from FACTOR...
to support investments required for recording and touring.Suggest: "Spiritbox received funding from FACTOR" and omit the second underlined passage. If you work in more information from the FACTOR source I suggested above, this might fit better further down in the history/timeline.
Spiritbox ultimately received over $38,000 in funding from FACTOR (the Foundation to Assist Canadian Talent on Records), funded by the Government of Canada and private broadcasters, to support the band's recording and touring.
finding themselves deadlocked in their efforts to play the songs in live performances without other musicians.Perhaps: "without additional musicians."
Shortly after, they found a permanent drummer in Ryan Loerke,This doesn't quite feel like the right tone to me. How about: "they secured permanent drummer Ryan Loerke,"
Jason Mageau, the former manager of Iwrestledabearonce, founded the Pale Chord label, which was distributed via The Orchard in order to release Spiritbox's music.I'd like to simplify the sentence structure. Suggest: "founded the Pale Chord label to release Spiritbox's music through a distribution deal with The Orchard."
Mageau...
and the band decided to promote and establish online music rather than spending money on small club tours. As a result, they opted not to tour for two years.Suggest simplifying: "decided promote Spiritbox's music online for two years rather than undertaking expensive touring."
While Spiritbox gained a growing fan base, they released a five-song EP titled Singles Collection on April 26, 2019, through Pale Chord.A bit of redundancy and I feel the label (mentioned earlier in the paragraph) can be assumed. Suggest: "While Spiritbox grew its fan base, the band released the five-song EP Singles Collection on April 26, 2019."
2020–present
Loerke left the band in 2020.[14] They subsequently recruited Philadelphia-based drummer Zev Rose (full family name Rosenberg[20]), who is considerably younger than the other members.[1]Is the underlined part important? I feel like it should either explain why this is important (eg: did he bring youthful energy or a younger generation's perspective or a younger fanbase to the group?) or otherwise it should be removed. Suggest: "Loerke left the band in 2020[14] and was replaced by Philadelphia-based drummer Zev Rose (full family name Rosenberg[20]).[1]"
The band's debut full-length album Eternal Blue was originally scheduled for release in 2020, but production was interrupted due to the COVID-19 pandemic,[19] as was the band's first tour, a supporting slot for After the Burial in Europe.[21]Should check on the source(s) first, but there are a lot of clauses there. Suggest either simplifying or breaking it into two sentences. Something like: "The COVID-19 pandemic interrupted both the production of the band's first full-length album Eternal Blue[19] and the band's first tour, a supporting slot for After the Burial in Europe."
Spiritbox found critical and commercial success with the release of the single "Holy Roller" on July 3, 2020.[23] It debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs.Combine these into one sentence for flow. Also, I like the first instance of No. to be wrapped in {{ abbr|No.|number}} ( MOS:NUMERO). Suggest: "Spiritbox found critical and commercial success with the July 3 release of the single "Holy Roller",[23] which debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs."
The band subsequently released a remix of "Holy Roller" in October, which featured Ryo Kinoshita of Crystal Lake.[26] The "Holy Roller" remix version spent five weeks as No. 2 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen.Don't need both subsequently and October. Suggest: "In October, the band released a remix of "Holy Roller" which featured Ryo Kinoshita of Crystal Lake.[26] This remix held No. 2 on Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen for five weeks."
The continued release of "super popular" music videos created anticipation for Spiritbox's forthcoming album.If you really want "super popular", the quote should have in-text attribution. I would suggest omitting "super" and removing the quotation marks.
At this point, the band moved to Joshua Tree, California, to continue working on their debut album.I wouldn't mind a little more explanation there. What would you think of: "Due to quarantine rules, the band gathered in isolation at Joshua Tree, California, to continue working on the album." Morin20210823 could possibly be used as an additional source.
The deadline of April 2021 was set to have the album release capacity in the same year.For cohesion/flow, how about: They set a deadline of April 2021 to ensure that the album would release that year."
which landed in the Top 40 of the Billboard Mainstream Rock chart.Doesn't seem like the right tone to me. If "Top 40" isn't part of the chart name, it should probably be lowercase generic. How about: "which ranked within the top 40 of"
The album peaked at No. 13 on the US Billboard 200, and landed at No. 3 on the Top Album Sales chart in the week ending October 2, 2021. It topped on both Billboard's Top Rock Albums and Hard Rock Albums charts.I feel it can do without the second underlined part, at which point we could maybe put all the Billboard ranks in one sentence: "The album peaked at No. 13 on the US Billboard 200, No. 3 on the Top Album Sales chart, and topped Billboard's Top Rock Albums and Hard Rock Albums charts."
with between $30,000 to $60,000 coming in per month.With numeric ranges we use (1) an en dash, (2) from-to or (3) between-and, not between-to. So take your pick of: with $30,000–60,000; with between $30,000 and $60,000; or with from $30,000 to $60,000. Actually, I just noticed that's straight from the source so maybe paraphrase with from-to and change "coming in per month" to "of monthly sales".
S.S. Neverender cruiseMy first instinct was that this should be "SS Neverender" per Wikipedia:Naming conventions (ships). But it seems that is the name of the event which has taken place on ships with different names (e.g. the Norwegian Jewel in this source, the 2023 one is to be on the Norwegian Pearl). Noting this in case someone else disagrees about it.
He would eventually be welcomed as a full-time member in April 2023.→ He became a full-time member in April 2023.
In November 2022, Spiritbox announced their first ever headlining tour of the United StatesOmit ever as redundant.
Writing for Metal Injection, Max Morin wrote that attempting to pigeonhole the band to any particular music style is "pointless".How about: Max Morin wrote for Metal Injection that it was "pointless" to label the band.
Writing for Metal Injection, Max Morin wrote that attempting to assign the band a single genre label is "pointless".Better, but still has the writing/wrote repetition.
Bobby Olivier of Billboard wrote the band displayed aspects→ wrote that the band displayed aspects
According to LaPlante, the band's music was constructed out of a progressive metal foundation before being condensed for the final version of the songs.[74] Revolver's Eli Enis described the band's musical style as an arrangement of "alt-metal with elegant vocals and thunderous djent grooves".[70] LaPlante herself has defined the musical genre of Spiritbox as metalcore;[8] however, she also said that "[her] main goal with this band is fluidity".[3]How about moving LaPlante's parts together at the end of the paragraph, with a little added context: In a 2019 interview, LaPlante said the band's music was constructed out of a progressive metal foundation before being condensed for the final version of the songs.[74] In 2021, after recording Eternal Blue, she defined the musical genre of Spiritbox as metalcore;[8] however, she has also said that "[her] main goal with this band is fluidity".[3]
Guitar World wrote that Spiritbox "successfully mastered the art of digitally infused metal" while "maintaining a sonic stamp that's completely their own".I'd be okay with keeping while inside of the quotation. It's fine to remove the dash from the original per MOS:PMC. It's used for a parenthetic statement in the original and not needed here.
One band who've successfully mastered the art of digitally infused metal - while maintaining a sonic stamp that's completely their own - is Canadian trio Spiritbox.The while is already there. I'm not going to absolutely insist, though, I just feel it works better as a single quotation. (That'd be 17 words from a 300-word article, so about 5% which is okay for fair use.)
She said that it is necessary to push the boundaries of the metalcore genre by bringing modernity and diversity of vocal styles to stay relevant.The paraphrase may be too literal. When the source talks about including "more voices" I think it's talking about artistic voices/viewpoints/backgrounds rather than literal vocal performances. Also "modernity and diversity" are a bit of a close paraphrase to "modern" and "diverse". Suggest: She said that it is necessary to push the boundaries of the metalcore genre by being inclusive and progressive, to stay relevant.
Her vocal phrasing based on her musical expression, primarily rooted in contemporary R&B, would become a distinctive feature;→ is a distinctive feature.
Her vocal phrasing, based on her musical expression, is influenced by contemporary R&B artists such as Doja Cat, H.E.R., SZA, and the Weeknd.Thanks, that's more understandable for me.
Derdeyn2021, Morin20210823 say that the band was "formed in 2016". Chichester–Revolver says the band was "incepted" in 2017. When sources are reliable but in disagreement, I usually add a little footnote stating which sources say what, and explain the difference if I can or why the article text uses one view over another.
Some minor back-and-forth editing in April 2023 over minor issues, nothing I would call an edit war.
It looks like these photos were taken as part of a big project, it's a shame they don't have descriptions.
Courtney LaPlante left her previous band, Iwrestledabearonce, in 2015 to form Spiritbox.doesn't fit the picture. Suggest: Courtney LaPlante performing with Iwrestledabearonce in 2013.
Although not part of the GA criteria, here are some other areas you might want to improve:
Spiritbox ultimately received over $38,000 in funding from FACTOR (the Foundation to Assist Canadian Talent on Records), funded by the Government of Canada and private broadcasters, to support the band's recording and touring.According to the report, they received this money in fiscal year 2019, which I believe is April 2019 – March 2020. So I'm wondering if chronologically this would fit better a little further down, maybe in the last paragraph after the release of Singles Collection in April 2019. The funding boost would then lead into their
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I've begun a source review and hope to have a full review posted by the end of the week (it will take me a few days). It appears GA-worthy on read through. Please hold back any edits to the article while I'm working on the review, thanks. – Reidgreg ( talk) 00:58, 8 August 2023 (UTC). Progress report: I'm almost halfway through the references. – Reidgreg ( talk) 00:32, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
I've made some minor, non-controversial changes to the article (MOS and reference cleanup). If you disagree with any of it we can discuss as part of the review. My full review follows. It's pretty long but most of the issues are minor and can hopefully be addressed in a simple, straight-forward manner. I've tried to suggest solutions in most cases. If you disagree with anything please say so and we can discuss it.
From this point, I'd like to put any overall discussion about the review at the bottom under 'General discussion'.
Before co-founding Spiritbox, singer Courtney LaPlante and guitarist Mike Stringer were both in Iwrestledabearonce.
Spiritbox formed in Victoria, located on Vancouver Island, British Columbia.not found in this source, but covered by "Morin20210823". Suggest removing this citation.
Jason Mageau, the former manager of Iwrestledabearonce, founded the Pale Chord label, which was distributed via The Orchard in order to release Spiritbox's music.
They subsequently recruited Philadelphia-based drummer Zev Rose [...] who is considerably younger than the other members.Source does not cover the underlined part. I suggest removing the underlined part which does not seem important. (See also under Prose)
and was deemed the best song of 2020 by the station's listeners.
The continued release of "super popular" music videos created anticipation for Spiritbox's forthcoming album.
which landed in the Top 40 of the Billboard Mainstream Rock chart.
Spiritbox has credited Alexisonfire and Protest the Hero as early musical influences.The source is an interview with LaPlante who says that they were "influences on us as teens". The context (previous paragraph) suggests to me that "us" is herself and Stringer. Suggest rephrasing.
Before co-founding Spiritbox, singer Courtney LaPlante and guitarist Mike Stringer were both in Iwrestledabearonce.
In late 2015, they decided to quit the band.
In May, LaPlante appeared on her first major magazine cover, the May issue of Kerrang!.This is the May issue and she is the cover story, but it does not indicate it is her first major magazine cover. Suggest rephrase: "In May, LaPlante appeared on the cover of Kerrang! magazine." or "LaPlante appeared on the cover of the May issue of Kerrang! magazine."
Reflecting on the anticipation for the album's release, it was described as the "most anticipated debut album of 2021" by Alternative Press, Kerrang!, and Metal Hammer.Good for Kerrang!.
LaPlante said she considered Eternal Blue as "finally, at age 32, the realization of my true voice".The source material is
Courtney sees Eternal Blue as, finally, at age 32, the realisation of “my true voice”.Only the last three words are LaPlante's, the underlined part is from the Kerrang! author. It would probably be awkward to attribute the nested quotes to each of them. Suggest: LaPlante said she considered Eternal Blue as the
Sam Coare of Kerrang! highlights her vocal performance saying that "Few frontpeople handle the transition from cleans to screams with the skill, depth and ferocity of Courtney LaPlante".
The couple, engaged for four years, nevertheless wanted to form their joint musical project since 2011.Verified; will raise this again under prose (for clarity).
The couple decided to take a break from touring and return to their hometown to find regular employment. Throughout 2015, multi-instrumentalist Stringer presented to LaPlante demos of songs that he created diligently, displaying different musical styles. LaPlante and Stringer got married in 2016, and two weeks after the wedding, they began investing their money into recording the songs.The source suggests it was close to LaPlante's hometown (specifically that she had a lot of family close by), not certain about Stringer. Do you have another source for this?
Soon afterward, the project was paused for some time, finding themselves deadlocked in their efforts to play the songs in live performances without other musicians.
expressing esteem for their music and offering support through friendship.This might need to be qualified as a statement from LaPlante rather than coming directly from Crook. It might be better to remove it.
however, she also said that "[her] main goal with this band is fluidity"
LaPlante has cited Tesseract,[as influences]. This last one is cited to the same source but doesn't use the named reference "Rogers20201211". The only difference is the access/archive date, but the named reference supports it so you should be able to change this to the named reference.
LaPlante and Stringer had each replaced a previous member of Iwrestledabearonce, and were never comfortable with that status in the band; the two also desired to pursue a new personal and creative direction.
Stringer wrote the drum parts for a planned extended play, which were rearranged by their session drummer at the time, former Iwrestledabearonce bandmate Mikey Montgomery. The EP was recorded by LaPlante and Stringer in their home studio, along with their friend Tim Creviston. It was mixed and mastered by former Volumes member Dan Braunstein in Los Angeles.
She has also expressed admiration for Gojira,
Former session members: Mikey Montgomery – drums (2017)
On October 9, 2017, the husband and wife duo announced the launch of their band named Spiritbox.Lambgoat and TandA Media reported it on that date, but it doesn't say that LaPlante/Stringer announced on that date.
Spiritbox formed in Victoria, located on Vancouver Island, British Columbia.
and was deemed the best song of 2020 by the station's listeners.
The deadline of April 2021 was set to have the album release capacity in the same year.
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LaPlante herself has defined the musical genre of Spiritbox as metalcore;
and FKA Twigs.
She said that it is necessary to push the boundaries of the metalcore genre by bringing modernity and diversity of vocal styles to stay relevant.Verified; will address this under Prose.
LaPlante explained that Iwrestledabearonce had made no statement regarding their situation
and thus, she officially confirmed her departure from the band on October 25, 2017.
Spiritbox ultimately received a budget from FACTOR (the Foundation to Assist Canadian Talent on Records), funded by the Government of Canada and private broadcasters, to support investments required for recording and touring.
As Spiritbox, the couple released a seven-song self-titled debut EP on October 27, 2017, which followed a single, "The Beauty of Suffering".Good for the single, but like a lot of similar sources this predates the release of the EP and covers the announcement of its release, not its actual release (which might have been delayed or advanced). Suggest finding another source which confirms it was officially released on that date.
In 2018, Bill Crook of the pop-punk band Living with Lions joined the band as the permanent bassist,Good for everything except the underlined part, which might not be necessary.
It debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs.
The song's original version spent seven weeks as No. 1 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen,
In September 2020, Spiritbox announced that they had signed with Rise Records, as part of the label's partnership with Pale Chord.The source says "fall of 2020". Deadpress covers the announcement in a
The "Holy Roller" remix version spent five weeks as No. 2 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen.
Shortly after, they found a permanent drummer in Ryan Loerke, who also played in the Kelowna-based Shreddy Krueger.Good except for the underlined part ... which is covered by the existing citation to Galor, below.
Loerke left the band in 2020.
Current members Courtney LaPlante – vocals (2016–present) Mike Stringer – guitar (2016–present) Josh Gilbert – bass, backing vocals (2023–present, touring 2022–2023)
Former members: Ryan Loerke – drums (2018–2020) Bill Crook – bass (2018–2022)
Shortly after, they found a permanent drummer in Ryan Loerke, who also played in the Kelowna-based Shreddy Krueger.
Mageau (part of Roc Nation) and the band decided to promote and establish online music rather than spending money on small club tours. As a result, they opted not to tour for two years.One little thing. This tells us Mageau was with the Roc Nation entertainment agency in 2021 when he gave the interview, but he may not have held that position in 2018, which is the period being described there. If it's not terribly important, it may be safest to remove that rather than potentially having it wrong. If you do want to keep it (with qualifiers), it might be better to move it up a sentence to where he is first introduced.
According to Pollstar, Spiritbox's official merchandise store grossed $1 million from its opening in May 2020 to October 2021, with between $30,000 to $60,000 coming in per month.
While Spiritbox gained a growing fan base, they released a five-song EP titled Singles Collection on April 26, 2019, through Pale Chord.Good. The one gives all the details with the announcement and the other covers it after-the-fact to confirm that it was released.
Throughout 2018 and 2019, the band composed most of the songs for their intended debut album.
The band's debut full-length album Eternal Blue was originally scheduled for release in 2020, but production was interrupted due to the COVID-19 pandemic,The source seems to indicate that they held back the release but continued production "We recorded ... at an Air BNB completely isolated in February 2020".
as was the band's first tour, a supporting slot for After the Burial in Europe.Good. The first source reports on the planned first tour and the second reports that it was cancelled.
Spiritbox found critical and commercial success with the release of the single "Holy Roller" on July 3, 2020.
Spiritbox have teamed up with Revolver today (July 3rd) to premiere the insanely catchy and totally crushing new single "Holy Roller."so they clearly have a conflict of interest (which they're honest enough to state up-front). It's still good for the date of the release, but not the opinion that this is the date/release when they achieved critical and commercial success. Suggest rephrasing and moving the citation up: "On July 3, 2020, Spiritbox released the single "Holy Roller"[23] which achieved critical and commercial success." and the existing references for what follows that can cover the last part of the sentence.
It debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs.
The "Holy Roller" remix version spent five weeks as No. 2 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen.
In September 2020, Spiritbox announced that they had signed with Rise Records, as part of the label's partnership with Pale Chord.
The band subsequently released a remix of "Holy Roller" in October, which featured Ryo Kinoshita of Crystal Lake.
In December 2020, Spiritbox debuted "Constance", a song about dementia that was dedicated to LaPlante's grandmother.
In the same month, a Kerrang! magazine reader's poll voted Spiritbox as "Best New Band".The source states "New Band Of The Year". Suggest either changing to that, or removing the quotation marks and putting it in lowercase as a generic: best new band.
In January 2021, Revolver included Spiritbox's upcoming release in its list of "60 Most Anticipated Albums of 2021."
At this point, the band moved to Joshua Tree, California, to continue working on their debut album.
The third single from the album, "Circle with Me", was released in April.
later that month,[May]
the band released the single "Secret Garden",
In June 2021, as part of their Collection: Live series, the Grammy Museum asked Spiritbox to perform and record a live acoustic version of "Constance" in a church accompanied by a string ensemble.Checks except for the month. Stringer says they received the request while they were "tracking the album". Not sure what that means or where it would fit in the process. Also, it seems a bit incomplete to not follow-through and mention that this version was recorded and released.
The band attempted to tour again in July 2021, supporting Limp Bizkit in the US; this was also canceled after a few dates due to safety concerns involving the pandemic.Okay except for the underlined parts; the source doesn't mention the month the tour began or how many shows were played before it was cancelled. Needs another source ... ah, the following source has "The four-week tour only made it three shows in before getting scrapped", so that's part of it. I suppose counting back four weeks from the last cancelled show (24 Aug) would put the first show in late July. So that would do if you could use that here.
This aborted tour with Limp Bizkit led the band to many unexpected expenses; Shinedown singer Brent Smith offered Spiritbox $10,000 to help cover lost tour expenses, while We Came as Romans decided not to charge for the lighting package the band had rented from them.The underlined passage is directly from the source and while the proper name is okay the rest should be rephrased. Suggest: " We Came as Romans waived rental charges for a lighting package."
Smith said of his contribution, "I felt horrible what happened and I would hate for this band to not be able to continue due to this [lost investment] and I just want to contribute."The quote is Stringer relating what Smith said. So you'd have to preface it with something like "According to Stringer, Smith said something like". I suggest removing this passage, as the quote isn't terribly encyclopedic. Or you could paraphrase it down to something like: "According to Stringer, Smith was empathetic and didn't want the band to collapse due to financial hardship."
Smith decided to donate despite having never met the band beforewhich is covered by this source.
One final single, "Hurt You", was released in advance of the album in late August.
At the end of August 2021, the band's songs surpassed 80 million streams across all global streaming platforms, and all physical release and merchandising items were sold out.The source says "most merch items" sold out. Suggest rephrasing or removing that part.
Reflecting on the anticipation for the album's release, it was described as the "most anticipated debut album of 2021" by Alternative Press, Kerrang!, and Metal HammerKerrang is covered by Coare2021, above. AP says it is "one of the most anticipated rock albums of the year" and Metal Hammer "the most eagerly anticipated debut in years", so not the same thing as whats been summarized. (They're not all saying the quoted material verbatim.) To boil it down to a single statement between the three would be (for the underlined passage, unquoted) a highly anticipated album. To regain the impact, perhaps: Reflecting on the album's release, it was described as "the most anticipated debut" of the year by Alternative Press and Kerrang! while Metal Hammer placed it among the year's most anticipated albums of the rock genre.
Nearing the release of Eternal Blue in mid-September 2021, LaPlante revealed that drummer Rose was an official member of Spiritbox. Since joining in early 2020, Rose had not been photographed with the band, leading to speculation that he was not an official member, though LaPlante explained that this was because of travel restrictions during the COVID-19 pandemic that prevented Rose from physically joining the band in Victoria. The band finally met Rose in-person two days before embarking on tour.The way that's written might sound like they met him just before touring for Eternal Blue in or around September 2021. But I'm pretty sure the source (interview) is talking about the aborted tours of early 2020. Suggest removing the underlined part.
Eternal Blue was released on September 17, 2021, to positive reviews from critics.
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Eternal Blue was released on September 17, 2021, to positive reviews from critics.
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Eternal Blue was released on September 17, 2021, to positive reviews from critics.
The album[Eternal Blue]
peaked at No. 13 on the US Billboard 200, and landed at No. 3 on the Top Album Sales chart in the week ending October 2, 2021. It topped on both Billboard's Top Rock Albums and Hard Rock Albums charts. The album peaked at No. 8 on the ARIA Charts and No. 19 on the UK Albums Chart.Not sure how they know the sales for the week ending 2 Oct if the piece was published 28 Sep.
In October 2021, Spiritbox performed on the Coheed and Cambria-headlined S.S. Neverender cruise, produced by Norwegian Cruise Line partner Sixthman.
In August 2021, Spiritbox was announced as one of the supporting bands on Underoath's Voyeurist tour, along with Bad Omens and Stray From The Path, in February and March 2022.
Initially, Every Time I Die was to join Underoath and Spiritbox on this tour; however, the band broke up in January 2022.
In May 2022, Ghost announced that Spiritbox would be guests alongside Mastodon as opening acts for the second North American leg of their Imperatour through August and September 2022.Small prose issue to discuss later
However, Spiritbox announced the departure of bassist Bill Crook less than a week later, a mutual decision within the band. Spiritbox quickly recruited Josh Gilbert, who had recently left As I Lay Dying, as their temporary touring bassist.
He would eventually be welcomed as a full-time member in April 2023.
On June 22, 2022, the band released the three-song Rotoscope EP and a video for the title track "Rotoscope".
Guitar World noted that the title track was a dance-like number, while the other two tracks "Sew Me Up" and "Hysteria" were "synth-flavored arrangements".
In November 2022, Spiritbox announced their first ever headlining tour of the United States; they were joined by After the Burial and Intervals from April to May 2023.
On March 7, 2023, Falling In Reverse announced the Popular Monstour, a tour of the United States on which Spiritbox would perform as a guest at six shows.
However, in the following days, Falling In Reverse frontman Ronnie Radke attracted controversy after a fan who alleged him of assault drew an aggressive response from Radke on Twitter. On March 13, Spiritbox announced from their own Twitter account that they had dropped off the dates they were scheduled for the tour.
On April 19, 2023, the band released the single, "The Void".Small problem here as with some of the others. Both sources are dated 19 April and say the single was released, but they don't say that it was released on 19 April.
On May 2, 2023, the band was announced as support for the fall leg of Shinedown's Revolutions Live tour along with Papa Roach.This avoids the above problem somewhat but I think maybe it would be better as "was announced by Loudwire" or "was reported by Loudwire".
Spiritbox employs several heavy metal-based musical styles. Writing for Metal Injection, Max Morin wrote that attempting to pigeonhole the band to any particular music style is "pointless".
LaPlante's singing has received acclaim from music critics. Morin called her "one of the best vocalists in the modern metal scene".
metalcore,[44][63][64][65] progressive metal,[63][66][67] alternative metal,[68][69][70] post-metal,[63][43] djent,[66][8] and nu metal.[71]
They have also been labelled as "post-metalcore".
Bobby Olivier of Billboard wrote the band displayed aspects ranging from atmospheric to industrial.
Spiritbox combined electronic styles after deriving inspiration from the 1980s pop music scene, Nine Inch Nails, and early post-punk bands such as the Cure.
The band has acknowledged that the impact of 1980s dark rock and pop bands, embodied by uncluttered musical compositions through synthesizer minimalism in "airy" song structures, inspired Spiritbox's style and served as the backbone for their work.Not seeing the underlined part in the source.
and served as the base for their songwriting.which I feel is better but I'm still not seeing this in the source. On their musical style, the source has "The aesthetic ranges widely, from atmospheric to industrial, hooky to progressive", Stringer: "We just really appreciate and love pop music. We really appreciate the '80s", Laplante: "and Nine Inch Nails", Laplante: "The '80s dark rock and pop bands really influenced a lot of our writing." I didn't see anything further, and I feel that going from 'influence' to 'the base of their [creative process]' is a bit of a jump (ie: original research). One thing that comes up a bit is how eclectic and genre-defying they are, so when there is a generalization I'd like it to be well sourced.
The band referred to Depeche Mode and Tears for Fears as particularly significant influences.
Her vocal phrasing based on her musical expression, primarily rooted in contemporary R&B, would become a distinctive feature; she has cited Doja Cat, H.E.R., SZA, and the Weeknd as influences.Not seeing the underlined part in the source.
According to LaPlante, the band's music was constructed out of a progressive metal foundation before being condensed for the final version of the songs.
Tool,The interview says that she "loves bands like that", not that it was an influence.
Revolver's Eli Enis described the band's musical style as an arrangement of "alt-metal with elegant vocals and thunderous djent grooves".
The band integrates electronic elements such as samples and programmed drums within their sound as distinctive characteristics, as part of a musical genre evolving through the artistic use of new technologies. Guitar World wrote that Spiritbox "successfully mastered the art of digitally infused metal" while "maintaining a sonic stamp that's completely their own".My issue here is that "samples, programmed drums and synth lines" are given by the source as examples of electronic elements, but it doesn't specifically say that Spiritbox uses these elements. I'm pretty sure that one of the article's other sources could cover this, if you could check and add one.
Stringer's guitar playing style includes a " Gojira-esque pick scrape technique".
The digital synthesizer appeared as a particular sonic aspect of the band.Regarding synths, the second source is talking about it in their album and the first source talks about it on three songs from that album. Is there another source which talks about synths in their music/sound overall? Otherwise you might be limited to saying something like "The digital synthsizer appears as a particular sonic aspect of much of the band's music."
LaPlante's first experience with the death growl came from listening to Cannibal Corpse at the age of five, which developed into a marked interest in harsh vocals during her early adolescence while listening to nu metal. At the age of eighteen, LaPlante laid down her screamed vocals for the first time on a breakdown of a song written by her brother.
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as appropriate. The archives are working though, and was able to verify.
The Heavy Music Awards is an annual awards ceremony in partnership with Amazon Music and Ticketmaster.
The Saskatchewan Independent Film Awards is a ceremony presented annually by the Saskatchewan Filmpool Cooperative, honoring the province's independent film achievements.
The Saskatchewan Music Awards is an annual awards ceremony established in 2018, honoring the achievements of the province's music industry.
Going through the sources used for the article, coverage seems good for GA. Took a little look around and found a couple things of possible interest:
Lead:
Husband and wife duo guitarist Mike Stringer and vocalist Courtney LaPlante publicly established Spiritbox on October 9, 2017. The band's full lineup comprises LaPlante, Stringer, drummer Zev Rose, and bassist Josh Gilbert.I'm not sure about the tone set with 'husband and wife duo', especially placing it at the beginning of the second sentence. It gives a lot of prominence to the fact and establishes it as a defining characteristic of the group – moreso, say, than their array of styles and mix of electronic and metal. Also, I'm not sure that we need the full date there. What would you think of rephrasing it as "Spiritbox is a Canadian heavy metal band from Victoria, British Columbia, formed by guitarist Mike Stringer and vocalist Courtney LaPlante in 2017. The band's full lineup comprises LaPlante and Stringer, who are a married couple, drummer Zev Rose, and bassist Josh Gilbert."
The band's metal style is difficult to pigeonhole into a specific subgenre and displays an array of styles that draw from a variety of influences and incorporate electronic elements, though much of it is rooted in metalcore and progressive metal.The underlined part seems a bit awkward and the sentence changes direction a couple times. The lead should be easy to read with a simple sentence structure. It could use more cohesion. What would you think of: "The band's style incorporates electronic elements and draws from a variety of influences, crossing multiple metal subgenres with its roots in metalcore and progressive metal."
Dissatisfaction with their roles caused LaPlante and Stringer to leave their former band, Iwrestledabearonce, and they started Spiritbox, seeking artistic freedom.How about "Dissatisfaction with their roles caused LaPlante and Stringer to leave their former band, Iwrestledabearonce, and they founded Spiritbox to express themselves artistically." or better: "LaPlante and Stringer had been members of Iwrestledabearonce, but were dissatisfied with their roles and founded Spiritbox to express themselves artistically."
Rather than touring, Spiritbox initially developed an approach to fanbase building focused on the Internet and introduced their music through acclaimed music videos. The band began touring in 2020, and continued to gain popularity with several singles that reached the Billboard charts before releasing their debut album Eternal Blue (2021), which entered the US Billboard 200 at number 13.How about: "Spiritbox released a series of popular music videos on the Internet, developing a fanbase before they began touring in 2020. They continued to gain popularity with several charting singles and their debut album Eternal Blue (2021) entered the US Billboard 200 at number 13."
Rather than touring, Spiritbox initially built their fanbase by focusing on promotion through the Internet and introduced their music through a series of popular music videos, before debuting as a touring band in 2020.That's better, but it's still more complex than necessary. The 'rather than' is saying what the band didn't do. For the lead, it'd be better to stick to what they did do. The two clauses about touring are also repetitive; there should be one or the other, not both.
History:
The couple, engaged for four years, nevertheless wanted to form their joint musical project since 2011. In late 2015, they decided to quit the band.I've been wondering how to make the timeline a little clearer, with the engagement being (roughly) 2011–2015 rather than 2007–2011. Keeping in mind that the source isn't especially specific, how about: "The couple were engaged during this time and since 2011 had wanted to form their own joint musical project. In late 2015, they decided to quit the band."
Throughout 2015, multi-instrumentalist Stringer presented to LaPlante demos of songs that he created diligently, displaying different musical styles.The word diligently stands out to me for tone but I feel it could be improved a bit more. How about: "Throughout 2015, Stringer created demos of songs in different styles to help them decide on a direction for their band."
LaPlante and Stringer got married in 2016, and two weeks after the wedding, they began investing their money into recording the songs.LaPlante and Stringer married in 2016, and two weeks later began recording songs.
On October 9, 2017, the husband and wife duo announced the launch of their band named Spiritbox.[6] Spiritbox formed in Victoria, located on [[Vancouver Island, British Columbia]].[1]Suggest: On October 9, 2017, LaPlante and Stringer announced the launch of their band, Spiritbox,[6] formed in Victoria, British Columbia.[1]
she officially confirmed her departure from the band on October 25, 2017.There's a chance that someone might read this as her departing the band on this date rather than confirming on this date (that she had previously left the band). Suggest: on October 25, she confirmed her departure from that band.
Spiritbox ultimately received a budget from FACTOR...
to support investments required for recording and touring.Suggest: "Spiritbox received funding from FACTOR" and omit the second underlined passage. If you work in more information from the FACTOR source I suggested above, this might fit better further down in the history/timeline.
Spiritbox ultimately received over $38,000 in funding from FACTOR (the Foundation to Assist Canadian Talent on Records), funded by the Government of Canada and private broadcasters, to support the band's recording and touring.
finding themselves deadlocked in their efforts to play the songs in live performances without other musicians.Perhaps: "without additional musicians."
Shortly after, they found a permanent drummer in Ryan Loerke,This doesn't quite feel like the right tone to me. How about: "they secured permanent drummer Ryan Loerke,"
Jason Mageau, the former manager of Iwrestledabearonce, founded the Pale Chord label, which was distributed via The Orchard in order to release Spiritbox's music.I'd like to simplify the sentence structure. Suggest: "founded the Pale Chord label to release Spiritbox's music through a distribution deal with The Orchard."
Mageau...
and the band decided to promote and establish online music rather than spending money on small club tours. As a result, they opted not to tour for two years.Suggest simplifying: "decided promote Spiritbox's music online for two years rather than undertaking expensive touring."
While Spiritbox gained a growing fan base, they released a five-song EP titled Singles Collection on April 26, 2019, through Pale Chord.A bit of redundancy and I feel the label (mentioned earlier in the paragraph) can be assumed. Suggest: "While Spiritbox grew its fan base, the band released the five-song EP Singles Collection on April 26, 2019."
2020–present
Loerke left the band in 2020.[14] They subsequently recruited Philadelphia-based drummer Zev Rose (full family name Rosenberg[20]), who is considerably younger than the other members.[1]Is the underlined part important? I feel like it should either explain why this is important (eg: did he bring youthful energy or a younger generation's perspective or a younger fanbase to the group?) or otherwise it should be removed. Suggest: "Loerke left the band in 2020[14] and was replaced by Philadelphia-based drummer Zev Rose (full family name Rosenberg[20]).[1]"
The band's debut full-length album Eternal Blue was originally scheduled for release in 2020, but production was interrupted due to the COVID-19 pandemic,[19] as was the band's first tour, a supporting slot for After the Burial in Europe.[21]Should check on the source(s) first, but there are a lot of clauses there. Suggest either simplifying or breaking it into two sentences. Something like: "The COVID-19 pandemic interrupted both the production of the band's first full-length album Eternal Blue[19] and the band's first tour, a supporting slot for After the Burial in Europe."
Spiritbox found critical and commercial success with the release of the single "Holy Roller" on July 3, 2020.[23] It debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs.Combine these into one sentence for flow. Also, I like the first instance of No. to be wrapped in {{ abbr|No.|number}} ( MOS:NUMERO). Suggest: "Spiritbox found critical and commercial success with the July 3 release of the single "Holy Roller",[23] which debuted at No. 25 on Billboard Hot Hard Rock Songs."
The band subsequently released a remix of "Holy Roller" in October, which featured Ryo Kinoshita of Crystal Lake.[26] The "Holy Roller" remix version spent five weeks as No. 2 on Sirius XM Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen.Don't need both subsequently and October. Suggest: "In October, the band released a remix of "Holy Roller" which featured Ryo Kinoshita of Crystal Lake.[26] This remix held No. 2 on Liquid Metal's Devil's Dozen for five weeks."
The continued release of "super popular" music videos created anticipation for Spiritbox's forthcoming album.If you really want "super popular", the quote should have in-text attribution. I would suggest omitting "super" and removing the quotation marks.
At this point, the band moved to Joshua Tree, California, to continue working on their debut album.I wouldn't mind a little more explanation there. What would you think of: "Due to quarantine rules, the band gathered in isolation at Joshua Tree, California, to continue working on the album." Morin20210823 could possibly be used as an additional source.
The deadline of April 2021 was set to have the album release capacity in the same year.For cohesion/flow, how about: They set a deadline of April 2021 to ensure that the album would release that year."
which landed in the Top 40 of the Billboard Mainstream Rock chart.Doesn't seem like the right tone to me. If "Top 40" isn't part of the chart name, it should probably be lowercase generic. How about: "which ranked within the top 40 of"
The album peaked at No. 13 on the US Billboard 200, and landed at No. 3 on the Top Album Sales chart in the week ending October 2, 2021. It topped on both Billboard's Top Rock Albums and Hard Rock Albums charts.I feel it can do without the second underlined part, at which point we could maybe put all the Billboard ranks in one sentence: "The album peaked at No. 13 on the US Billboard 200, No. 3 on the Top Album Sales chart, and topped Billboard's Top Rock Albums and Hard Rock Albums charts."
with between $30,000 to $60,000 coming in per month.With numeric ranges we use (1) an en dash, (2) from-to or (3) between-and, not between-to. So take your pick of: with $30,000–60,000; with between $30,000 and $60,000; or with from $30,000 to $60,000. Actually, I just noticed that's straight from the source so maybe paraphrase with from-to and change "coming in per month" to "of monthly sales".
S.S. Neverender cruiseMy first instinct was that this should be "SS Neverender" per Wikipedia:Naming conventions (ships). But it seems that is the name of the event which has taken place on ships with different names (e.g. the Norwegian Jewel in this source, the 2023 one is to be on the Norwegian Pearl). Noting this in case someone else disagrees about it.
He would eventually be welcomed as a full-time member in April 2023.→ He became a full-time member in April 2023.
In November 2022, Spiritbox announced their first ever headlining tour of the United StatesOmit ever as redundant.
Writing for Metal Injection, Max Morin wrote that attempting to pigeonhole the band to any particular music style is "pointless".How about: Max Morin wrote for Metal Injection that it was "pointless" to label the band.
Writing for Metal Injection, Max Morin wrote that attempting to assign the band a single genre label is "pointless".Better, but still has the writing/wrote repetition.
Bobby Olivier of Billboard wrote the band displayed aspects→ wrote that the band displayed aspects
According to LaPlante, the band's music was constructed out of a progressive metal foundation before being condensed for the final version of the songs.[74] Revolver's Eli Enis described the band's musical style as an arrangement of "alt-metal with elegant vocals and thunderous djent grooves".[70] LaPlante herself has defined the musical genre of Spiritbox as metalcore;[8] however, she also said that "[her] main goal with this band is fluidity".[3]How about moving LaPlante's parts together at the end of the paragraph, with a little added context: In a 2019 interview, LaPlante said the band's music was constructed out of a progressive metal foundation before being condensed for the final version of the songs.[74] In 2021, after recording Eternal Blue, she defined the musical genre of Spiritbox as metalcore;[8] however, she has also said that "[her] main goal with this band is fluidity".[3]
Guitar World wrote that Spiritbox "successfully mastered the art of digitally infused metal" while "maintaining a sonic stamp that's completely their own".I'd be okay with keeping while inside of the quotation. It's fine to remove the dash from the original per MOS:PMC. It's used for a parenthetic statement in the original and not needed here.
One band who've successfully mastered the art of digitally infused metal - while maintaining a sonic stamp that's completely their own - is Canadian trio Spiritbox.The while is already there. I'm not going to absolutely insist, though, I just feel it works better as a single quotation. (That'd be 17 words from a 300-word article, so about 5% which is okay for fair use.)
She said that it is necessary to push the boundaries of the metalcore genre by bringing modernity and diversity of vocal styles to stay relevant.The paraphrase may be too literal. When the source talks about including "more voices" I think it's talking about artistic voices/viewpoints/backgrounds rather than literal vocal performances. Also "modernity and diversity" are a bit of a close paraphrase to "modern" and "diverse". Suggest: She said that it is necessary to push the boundaries of the metalcore genre by being inclusive and progressive, to stay relevant.
Her vocal phrasing based on her musical expression, primarily rooted in contemporary R&B, would become a distinctive feature;→ is a distinctive feature.
Her vocal phrasing, based on her musical expression, is influenced by contemporary R&B artists such as Doja Cat, H.E.R., SZA, and the Weeknd.Thanks, that's more understandable for me.
Derdeyn2021, Morin20210823 say that the band was "formed in 2016". Chichester–Revolver says the band was "incepted" in 2017. When sources are reliable but in disagreement, I usually add a little footnote stating which sources say what, and explain the difference if I can or why the article text uses one view over another.
Some minor back-and-forth editing in April 2023 over minor issues, nothing I would call an edit war.
It looks like these photos were taken as part of a big project, it's a shame they don't have descriptions.
Courtney LaPlante left her previous band, Iwrestledabearonce, in 2015 to form Spiritbox.doesn't fit the picture. Suggest: Courtney LaPlante performing with Iwrestledabearonce in 2013.
Although not part of the GA criteria, here are some other areas you might want to improve:
Spiritbox ultimately received over $38,000 in funding from FACTOR (the Foundation to Assist Canadian Talent on Records), funded by the Government of Canada and private broadcasters, to support the band's recording and touring.According to the report, they received this money in fiscal year 2019, which I believe is April 2019 – March 2020. So I'm wondering if chronologically this would fit better a little further down, maybe in the last paragraph after the release of Singles Collection in April 2019. The funding boost would then lead into their
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