Angered, Peter begins frequenting the toilet at Cleveland's old house until it is sold to Chevy Chase and Dan Aykroyd. → Should be rewritten to clarify the context behind Chase's and Aykroyd's move into Cleveland's house; it sounds like Peter's frequent bathroom trips have caused Chase and Aykroyd to move in.
Last sentence, first paragraph of the "Cultural references" section (should also be merged into another paragraph IMO): The underlying plot of brainwashed sleeper agents who are activated by a code phrase is identical to the Charles Bronson movie Telefon. → Needs a citation
Someone else added that, and the statement is OR in my opinion. I've removed it, and merged the first two paragraphs.
Gage (
talk)
02:01, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
[1] → Dead link. Looks like the entire site moved to
http://beta.dishonline.com for some reason, but I cannot find an archived copy of that URL anywhere.
[2] → Unreliable source; it's from Wikia, which anyone can edit it. Either change to a reliable source or remove what that source covers.
That was added by some random user accidentally. I've now removed it, as the statement had no reason being in the CR section to begin with.
Gage (
talk)
01:58, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Passed. Just keep in mind, for inline citations, that you only need to include one citation at the end of whatever you're referencing or at the end of the paragraph, whichever comes first. That being said, nice work! –
MuZemike16:39, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Angered, Peter begins frequenting the toilet at Cleveland's old house until it is sold to Chevy Chase and Dan Aykroyd. → Should be rewritten to clarify the context behind Chase's and Aykroyd's move into Cleveland's house; it sounds like Peter's frequent bathroom trips have caused Chase and Aykroyd to move in.
Last sentence, first paragraph of the "Cultural references" section (should also be merged into another paragraph IMO): The underlying plot of brainwashed sleeper agents who are activated by a code phrase is identical to the Charles Bronson movie Telefon. → Needs a citation
Someone else added that, and the statement is OR in my opinion. I've removed it, and merged the first two paragraphs.
Gage (
talk)
02:01, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
[1] → Dead link. Looks like the entire site moved to
http://beta.dishonline.com for some reason, but I cannot find an archived copy of that URL anywhere.
[2] → Unreliable source; it's from Wikia, which anyone can edit it. Either change to a reliable source or remove what that source covers.
That was added by some random user accidentally. I've now removed it, as the statement had no reason being in the CR section to begin with.
Gage (
talk)
01:58, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Passed. Just keep in mind, for inline citations, that you only need to include one citation at the end of whatever you're referencing or at the end of the paragraph, whichever comes first. That being said, nice work! –
MuZemike16:39, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply