GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
lead is confusing. She was decommissioned because she was deteriorating, and the navy didn't have funding to repair her, right? That sentence needs clarity.
paragraph on aerial threat. Admiral Makarov was armed with four AK-725 57 mm L/80 DP guns situated in two twin mountings Admiral Makarov was armed with four AK-725 57 mm L/80 DP guns situated in two twin mountings to protect against aerial threats.
. An engine room fire sparked by a lighted cigarette thrown into a ventilation shaft by a sailor was extinguished in three hours by emergency parties on 20 February 1988. how about On 20 February 1988, a sailor tossed a lighted cigarette into a ventilation shaft, causing an engine fire; emergency parties extinguished the fire in three hours, but the engine room....
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
lead is confusing. She was decommissioned because she was deteriorating, and the navy didn't have funding to repair her, right? That sentence needs clarity.
paragraph on aerial threat. Admiral Makarov was armed with four AK-725 57 mm L/80 DP guns situated in two twin mountings Admiral Makarov was armed with four AK-725 57 mm L/80 DP guns situated in two twin mountings to protect against aerial threats.
. An engine room fire sparked by a lighted cigarette thrown into a ventilation shaft by a sailor was extinguished in three hours by emergency parties on 20 February 1988. how about On 20 February 1988, a sailor tossed a lighted cigarette into a ventilation shaft, causing an engine fire; emergency parties extinguished the fire in three hours, but the engine room....