"album Song of Innocence, he composed" -> "album Song of Innocence, Axelrod composed" (because you've mentioned other people between here and the last mention of Axelrod).
Looks like Blake's work was "Songs of Innocence and of Experience" (i.e. note the second "of").
"Like on his 1968" would prefer "As he had on his 1968..."
"gatefold LP" just links to gatefold so no need to include LP in the link. Particularly as you later link LP individually.
Was it Axelrod who "dubbed the album..."? If so, attribute that quote accordingly.
"album Song of Innocence, he composed" -> "album Song of Innocence, Axelrod composed" (because you've mentioned other people between here and the last mention of Axelrod).
Looks like Blake's work was "Songs of Innocence and of Experience" (i.e. note the second "of").
"Like on his 1968" would prefer "As he had on his 1968..."
"gatefold LP" just links to gatefold so no need to include LP in the link. Particularly as you later link LP individually.
Was it Axelrod who "dubbed the album..."? If so, attribute that quote accordingly.