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Reviewer: 1111tomica ( talk • contribs) 21:43, 9 November 2011 (UTC) I will review the article ...
- Lead
- taken from her debut studio album, ...Baby One More Time (1999). Remove the comma after album.
- After recording and sending a demo tape with an unused song from Toni Braxton, Spears signed a multi-album deal with Jive. I really think that this sentence is not needed here.
- too a relationship where a girl is shy and does not express all of her feelings to her lover, despite wanting to. ---> to a relationship where a shy girl is reserved on expressing feelings to her lover.
- The song was certified Platinum by the Australian Recording Industry Association (ARIA), for selling over 70,000 physical units of the single. It was also certified Silver by the Syndicat National de l'Édition Phonographique (SNEP) in France, and Gold by the Recording Industry Association of New Zealand (RIANZ). I really don't like when the certifications are mentioned in the lead. Maybe you can write what positions attained the song in the United Kingdom, Europe and Australasia.
- An accompanying music video, directed by Nigel Dick, portrays Spears watching her love interest from afar. ---> An accompanying music video, directed by Nigel Dick was shot at Paradise Cove in Malibu, California. It portrays Spears watching her love interest from afar.
- The singer injured her knee during the rehearsals for the music video, and went on physical therapy for almost a month. Removed it. It's not notable for mentioning it in the lead.
- About the performance mention in the lead - maybe you can mention that the performance was staple in the past and just say on which tours she performed it. It really is not worth describing the concerts in the lead.
- Background
- I really think that the first paragraph or most of its material it is not needed. I think that you should delete some sentences and let stay just the main. Also it should have some c/e.
- Be consistent in using Spears' instead of Spears's ...
- Spears had originally envisioned "Sheryl Crow music, but younger more adult contemporary" but felt all right with her label's appointment of producers, since "It made more sense to go pop, because I can dance to it—it's more me." I really don't understand this sentence :/. Please c/e it.
- Mmmm all credits of the song are placed in the background, I think some of them should be removed.
Not done Same style of several GAs such as
Born to Make You Happy,
From the Bottom of My Broken Heart,
Anticipating,
...Baby One More Time... -
Saulo
Talk to Me
23:56, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
- Songwriting controversy
- I have no objections about it.
- Composition
- Is it that romantic needed in the first sentence?
- Not sure... - Saulo Talk to Me 23:56, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
- and lasts for four minutes and four seconds. --> with a length of four minutes and four seconds.
- The song is a heartbroken ballad --> Lyrically, the song is a "heartbroken ballad"...
- authors of Music scenes: local, translocal and virtual --> authors of the book Music scenes: local, translocal and virtual (2004) ...
- The authors also --> Both of them also ...
- Critical response
- A CD Universe review said the song --> A reviewer from CD Universe commented that the song ...
- Kyle Anderson of MTV said the song --> Kyle Anderson of MTV said that the song ...
- Unlink "(You Drive Me) Crazy" per Wikipedia:OVERLINK
- In the box ---> "pesonalities"." ... it should be 'personalities'."
- Chart performance
- "Sometimes" was successful in the United Kingdom, entering the UK Singles Chart on June 26, 1999 at third position. --> "Sometimes" was also successful in the United Kingdom. It entered and peaked at number three on the UK Singles Chart.
- "Sometimes" was certified Gold by the Recording Industry Association of New Zealand (RIANZ), for selling over 7,500 physical units of the single.[23] It was later certified Platinum by the Australian Recording Industry Association (ARIA), for selling over 70,000 units,[24] and Silver by the Syndicat National de l'Édition Phonographique (SNEP), after selling more than 125,000 units of the single in France.[25] ---> I really think that the certifications should be put respectively in the place when you talking about the peak in the country. Also I think you should mention France and its position and than put the certification. Also selling, selling, selling 3 times. Find more appropriate prose.
- Music video
- on February 1999 --> in February, 1999,
- During the rehearsals, however, the singer injured her knee, starting sessions of physical therapy --> However, during the rehearsals, the singer injured her knee and was forced to start sessions of physical therapy.
- A month later, Spears released a statement saying --> A month later, Spears released in a statement: ...
- The music video was later directed by Nigel Dick,[28] who had previously worked with the singer on the music video for "...Baby One More Time" (1998),[28] and shot at Paradise Cove in Malibu, California. --> The music video was later directed by Nigel Dick, who also directed her previous video for Spears' 1998 debut single "... Baby One More Time". It was shot at the Paradise Cove in Malibu, California.
- Live performances
- "Sometimes" was performed by Spears in three of her concert tours. --> Spears performed "Sometimes" in three concert tours.
- You can c/e the paragraph slightly.
- Track listings
- No objections about it.
- Credits and personnel
- The "I'm So Curious" notes are not necessary at all. Remove them.
- Not done It is, since the song wasn't released on ...Baby One More Time. It is in the same style as
My Heart Is Calling and
How Will I Know. -
Saulo
Talk to Me
23:56, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
- References
- Look fine. — Tomica1111 • Question Existing? 12:44, 17 November 2011 (UTC)
I'm passing the article... Good Job Sauliviegas ;) ! — Tomica1111 • Question Existing? 12:44, 17 November 2011 (UTC)
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Reviewer: 1111tomica ( talk • contribs) 21:43, 9 November 2011 (UTC) I will review the article ...
- Lead
- taken from her debut studio album, ...Baby One More Time (1999). Remove the comma after album.
- After recording and sending a demo tape with an unused song from Toni Braxton, Spears signed a multi-album deal with Jive. I really think that this sentence is not needed here.
- too a relationship where a girl is shy and does not express all of her feelings to her lover, despite wanting to. ---> to a relationship where a shy girl is reserved on expressing feelings to her lover.
- The song was certified Platinum by the Australian Recording Industry Association (ARIA), for selling over 70,000 physical units of the single. It was also certified Silver by the Syndicat National de l'Édition Phonographique (SNEP) in France, and Gold by the Recording Industry Association of New Zealand (RIANZ). I really don't like when the certifications are mentioned in the lead. Maybe you can write what positions attained the song in the United Kingdom, Europe and Australasia.
- An accompanying music video, directed by Nigel Dick, portrays Spears watching her love interest from afar. ---> An accompanying music video, directed by Nigel Dick was shot at Paradise Cove in Malibu, California. It portrays Spears watching her love interest from afar.
- The singer injured her knee during the rehearsals for the music video, and went on physical therapy for almost a month. Removed it. It's not notable for mentioning it in the lead.
- About the performance mention in the lead - maybe you can mention that the performance was staple in the past and just say on which tours she performed it. It really is not worth describing the concerts in the lead.
- Background
- I really think that the first paragraph or most of its material it is not needed. I think that you should delete some sentences and let stay just the main. Also it should have some c/e.
- Be consistent in using Spears' instead of Spears's ...
- Spears had originally envisioned "Sheryl Crow music, but younger more adult contemporary" but felt all right with her label's appointment of producers, since "It made more sense to go pop, because I can dance to it—it's more me." I really don't understand this sentence :/. Please c/e it.
- Mmmm all credits of the song are placed in the background, I think some of them should be removed.
- Not done Same style of several GAs such as
Born to Make You Happy,
From the Bottom of My Broken Heart,
Anticipating,
...Baby One More Time... -
Saulo
Talk to Me
23:56, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
- Songwriting controversy
- I have no objections about it.
- Composition
- Is it that romantic needed in the first sentence?
- Not sure... - Saulo Talk to Me 23:56, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
- and lasts for four minutes and four seconds. --> with a length of four minutes and four seconds.
- The song is a heartbroken ballad --> Lyrically, the song is a "heartbroken ballad"...
- authors of Music scenes: local, translocal and virtual --> authors of the book Music scenes: local, translocal and virtual (2004) ...
- The authors also --> Both of them also ...
- Critical response
- A CD Universe review said the song --> A reviewer from CD Universe commented that the song ...
- Kyle Anderson of MTV said the song --> Kyle Anderson of MTV said that the song ...
- Unlink "(You Drive Me) Crazy" per Wikipedia:OVERLINK
- In the box ---> "pesonalities"." ... it should be 'personalities'."
- Chart performance
- "Sometimes" was successful in the United Kingdom, entering the UK Singles Chart on June 26, 1999 at third position. --> "Sometimes" was also successful in the United Kingdom. It entered and peaked at number three on the UK Singles Chart.
- "Sometimes" was certified Gold by the Recording Industry Association of New Zealand (RIANZ), for selling over 7,500 physical units of the single.[23] It was later certified Platinum by the Australian Recording Industry Association (ARIA), for selling over 70,000 units,[24] and Silver by the Syndicat National de l'Édition Phonographique (SNEP), after selling more than 125,000 units of the single in France.[25] ---> I really think that the certifications should be put respectively in the place when you talking about the peak in the country. Also I think you should mention France and its position and than put the certification. Also selling, selling, selling 3 times. Find more appropriate prose.
- Music video
- on February 1999 --> in February, 1999,
- During the rehearsals, however, the singer injured her knee, starting sessions of physical therapy --> However, during the rehearsals, the singer injured her knee and was forced to start sessions of physical therapy.
- A month later, Spears released a statement saying --> A month later, Spears released in a statement: ...
- The music video was later directed by Nigel Dick,[28] who had previously worked with the singer on the music video for "...Baby One More Time" (1998),[28] and shot at Paradise Cove in Malibu, California. --> The music video was later directed by Nigel Dick, who also directed her previous video for Spears' 1998 debut single "... Baby One More Time". It was shot at the Paradise Cove in Malibu, California.
- Live performances
- "Sometimes" was performed by Spears in three of her concert tours. --> Spears performed "Sometimes" in three concert tours.
- You can c/e the paragraph slightly.
- Track listings
- No objections about it.
- Credits and personnel
- The "I'm So Curious" notes are not necessary at all. Remove them.
- Not done It is, since the song wasn't released on ...Baby One More Time. It is in the same style as
My Heart Is Calling and
How Will I Know. -
Saulo
Talk to Me
23:56, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
- References
- Look fine. — Tomica1111 • Question Existing? 12:44, 17 November 2011 (UTC)
I'm passing the article... Good Job Sauliviegas ;) ! — Tomica1111 • Question Existing? 12:44, 17 November 2011 (UTC)