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Reviewer: Khazar2 ( talk · contribs) 20:37, 8 November 2013 (UTC) reply

Sorry to kick this one back to you so fast, but for this one to pass GA, it's going to need some significant work for criteria 1b, specifically WP:LEAD and WP:LAYOUT. The lead of a Wikipedia article should be a summary of the full article and shouldn't present any new information of its own; here the lead appears to be almost all new information. Also, an article shouldn't be divided into one-paragraph subsections--is there a way you can rewrite this material so it has a more logical flow. Since it appears the nominator hasn't made any edits to this article yet, I'm going to go ahead and close this review for now.

Thanks for your work on this, and good luck! Please feel free to renominate once these concerns have been addressed. -- Khazar2 ( talk) 20:37, 8 November 2013 (UTC) reply