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"Antimicrobial defences increase with sociality in bees" - "We found that increases in group size and genetic relatedness were strongly correlated with increasing antimicrobial strength. The antimicrobials of even the most primitive semi-social species were an order of magnitude stronger that those of solitary species, suggesting a point of no return, beyond which disease control was
essential. Our results suggest that selection by microbial pathogens was critical to thre evolution of sociality and requi.red the production of strong, front-line antimicrobial defences."
"("Unifying external and internal immune defences." looks like a good source.)"
"using examples from eusocial insects and primates" the way this is worded makes it seem like there are eusocial primates (there are none to my knowledge). I recommend switching "eusocial insects" and "primates"
change "...who travel on larger workers leaves" to "...who travel on larger workers' leaves" or "...who travel on the leaves of larger workers". Also that needs a ref
change "...secondary consequences of eusociality are: perhaps the large number of individuals in eusocial colonies increases the efficiency of collective anti-parasite defences and thus their emergence begins to be selected for; perhaps the preponderance of non-reproductive individuals, individuals who when in a colony attacked by a parasite can only increase their indirect fitness via social immunity directed at the queen's brood, is a necessary driver for the evolution of these behaviours" ---> "...secondary consequences of eusociality are perhaps: the large number of individuals in eusocial colonies which increases the efficiency of collective anti-parasite defences and thus their emergence begins to be selected for (for what?); or the preponderance of non-reproductive individuals, who, when in a colony attacked by a parasite, can only increase their indirect fitness via social immunity directed at the queen's brood, is (what is?) a necessary driver for the evolution of these behaviours"
I don't know what you mean by 'for what', the trait is selected by natural selection for it increases the fitness of individuals but to say something is 'selected for' is a common saying. The 'is' is the preponderance of non-reproductive individuals. I've tried to rejig this bit to make it clearer - have a look and see what you think.
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change "...mount a collective defence guard the nest..." to "...mount a collective defence (which/who) guards the nest..." or
"...mount a collective defence (which/who) will guard the nest..."
change "...help combat this, in at least 7 species of Atta small workers (minims) hitchhike on the leaves..." to "...help combat this, in at least seven species of Atta, small workers (minims) hitchhike on the leaves..." or "...help combat this, small workers (minims) in at least seven species of Atta hitchhike on the leaves..."
change "...avoids entompathogenic fungi Metarhizium anisopliae and Beauveria bassian and..." to "...avoids entompathogenic fungi, such as Metarhizium anisopliae and Beauveria bassian, and..." or "...avoids entompathogenic fungi, Metarhizium anisopliae and Beauveria bassian, and..."
change "individuals can inhibit parasite uptake" to "individuals can inhibit parasitic uptake". The adjective form of the word "parasite" is "parasitic"
you seem to have some confusion between using dashes and hyphens. Hyphens (-) are used to join two different words, whereas dashes (—) are used to connect two different thoughts. For example, the passages "...are maintained due to social interactions - the increase in direct fitness..." and "...degraded ones to breed on - though this may have..." use hyphens incorrectly to join two different thoughts, and it should be replaced with a dash
change "Some non-eusocial insects also have sanitize their nests" to "Some non-eusocial insects also have to sanitize their nests" or "Some non-eusocial insects also sanitize their nests"
"...parasite prevalence and parasite species richness than homogenous colonies" this is a fragment, granted there is text behind it but it still doesn't make sense with it
change "...negated due to concomitant costs (e.g. the increased...)" to "...negated due to concomitant costs, e.g., the increased..." and remember to remove the parenthesis at the end of the sentence
change "Allogrooming is found in many animals - for example..." to "Allogrooming is found in many animals—for example..."
"Corsican blue tits (Parus caeruleus) prophylacticlly line their..."
"...numerous examples of social immune behaviours within the family can be given" what family?
change "...all other individuals - including those..." to "...all other individuals—including those..."
"Nicrophorus vespilloides" is wikilinked a second time in the Study species section
"burying beetle" is wikilinked a second time in the Nicrophorus vespilloides section
change "...its larvae to breed on - these carcasses..." to "...its larvae to breed on—these carcasses..."
change "Carcass are highly contested resources..." to "Carcasses are highly contested resources..." or "A carcass is a highly contested resource..."
change "...worse nutritional state - at adulthood these beetles..." to "...worse nutritional state—at adulthood these beetles..."
change "...social immune response - by providing females..." to "...social immune response—by providing females..."
change "...in social immunity i.e. upon injury..." to "...in social immunity, i.e., upon injury..."
change "...1409..." to "...1,409..." and "...5967th..." to "...5,967th..."
change "Social immunity effort peaks during middle-age, in contrast to effort in personal immunity..." to "Social immunity efforts peak during middle-age, in contrast to efforts in personal immunity..."
change "...as the larvae age - removing parents results..." to "...as the larvae age. Removing parents results..."
Remove the url in refs 15, 17, 19, 20, 21, 24, 27, 28, 29, 31, 32, 33, 34, 38, 39 (also it has a PMID of 14676952), 40, 41, 42, 45, 46, 47, 48, 52, 55, and 56 as they lead to only an abstract as opposed to the entire article DoneAcather96 (
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Social Immunity was nominated for
deletion.
The discussion was closed on 18 February 2018 with a consensus to merge. Its contents were
merged into
Social immunity. The original page is now a redirect to this page. For the contribution history and old versions of the redirected article, please see
its history; for its talk page, see
here.
Social immunity is part of the WikiProject Biology, an effort to build a comprehensive and detailed guide to
biology on Wikipedia. Leave messages on the WikiProject
talk page.BiologyWikipedia:WikiProject BiologyTemplate:WikiProject BiologyBiology articles
This article is within the scope of the WikiProject Ecology, an effort to create, expand, organize, and improve
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This article has been rated as High-importance on the
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Todo
"Antimicrobial defences increase with sociality in bees" - "We found that increases in group size and genetic relatedness were strongly correlated with increasing antimicrobial strength. The antimicrobials of even the most primitive semi-social species were an order of magnitude stronger that those of solitary species, suggesting a point of no return, beyond which disease control was
essential. Our results suggest that selection by microbial pathogens was critical to thre evolution of sociality and requi.red the production of strong, front-line antimicrobial defences."
"("Unifying external and internal immune defences." looks like a good source.)"
"using examples from eusocial insects and primates" the way this is worded makes it seem like there are eusocial primates (there are none to my knowledge). I recommend switching "eusocial insects" and "primates"
change "...who travel on larger workers leaves" to "...who travel on larger workers' leaves" or "...who travel on the leaves of larger workers". Also that needs a ref
change "...secondary consequences of eusociality are: perhaps the large number of individuals in eusocial colonies increases the efficiency of collective anti-parasite defences and thus their emergence begins to be selected for; perhaps the preponderance of non-reproductive individuals, individuals who when in a colony attacked by a parasite can only increase their indirect fitness via social immunity directed at the queen's brood, is a necessary driver for the evolution of these behaviours" ---> "...secondary consequences of eusociality are perhaps: the large number of individuals in eusocial colonies which increases the efficiency of collective anti-parasite defences and thus their emergence begins to be selected for (for what?); or the preponderance of non-reproductive individuals, who, when in a colony attacked by a parasite, can only increase their indirect fitness via social immunity directed at the queen's brood, is (what is?) a necessary driver for the evolution of these behaviours"
I don't know what you mean by 'for what', the trait is selected by natural selection for it increases the fitness of individuals but to say something is 'selected for' is a common saying. The 'is' is the preponderance of non-reproductive individuals. I've tried to rejig this bit to make it clearer - have a look and see what you think.
Acather96 (
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07:51, 6 September 2016 (UTC)reply
change "...mount a collective defence guard the nest..." to "...mount a collective defence (which/who) guards the nest..." or
"...mount a collective defence (which/who) will guard the nest..."
change "...help combat this, in at least 7 species of Atta small workers (minims) hitchhike on the leaves..." to "...help combat this, in at least seven species of Atta, small workers (minims) hitchhike on the leaves..." or "...help combat this, small workers (minims) in at least seven species of Atta hitchhike on the leaves..."
change "...avoids entompathogenic fungi Metarhizium anisopliae and Beauveria bassian and..." to "...avoids entompathogenic fungi, such as Metarhizium anisopliae and Beauveria bassian, and..." or "...avoids entompathogenic fungi, Metarhizium anisopliae and Beauveria bassian, and..."
change "individuals can inhibit parasite uptake" to "individuals can inhibit parasitic uptake". The adjective form of the word "parasite" is "parasitic"
you seem to have some confusion between using dashes and hyphens. Hyphens (-) are used to join two different words, whereas dashes (—) are used to connect two different thoughts. For example, the passages "...are maintained due to social interactions - the increase in direct fitness..." and "...degraded ones to breed on - though this may have..." use hyphens incorrectly to join two different thoughts, and it should be replaced with a dash
change "Some non-eusocial insects also have sanitize their nests" to "Some non-eusocial insects also have to sanitize their nests" or "Some non-eusocial insects also sanitize their nests"
"...parasite prevalence and parasite species richness than homogenous colonies" this is a fragment, granted there is text behind it but it still doesn't make sense with it
change "...negated due to concomitant costs (e.g. the increased...)" to "...negated due to concomitant costs, e.g., the increased..." and remember to remove the parenthesis at the end of the sentence
change "Allogrooming is found in many animals - for example..." to "Allogrooming is found in many animals—for example..."
"Corsican blue tits (Parus caeruleus) prophylacticlly line their..."
"...numerous examples of social immune behaviours within the family can be given" what family?
change "...all other individuals - including those..." to "...all other individuals—including those..."
"Nicrophorus vespilloides" is wikilinked a second time in the Study species section
"burying beetle" is wikilinked a second time in the Nicrophorus vespilloides section
change "...its larvae to breed on - these carcasses..." to "...its larvae to breed on—these carcasses..."
change "Carcass are highly contested resources..." to "Carcasses are highly contested resources..." or "A carcass is a highly contested resource..."
change "...worse nutritional state - at adulthood these beetles..." to "...worse nutritional state—at adulthood these beetles..."
change "...social immune response - by providing females..." to "...social immune response—by providing females..."
change "...in social immunity i.e. upon injury..." to "...in social immunity, i.e., upon injury..."
change "...1409..." to "...1,409..." and "...5967th..." to "...5,967th..."
change "Social immunity effort peaks during middle-age, in contrast to effort in personal immunity..." to "Social immunity efforts peak during middle-age, in contrast to efforts in personal immunity..."
change "...as the larvae age - removing parents results..." to "...as the larvae age. Removing parents results..."
Remove the url in refs 15, 17, 19, 20, 21, 24, 27, 28, 29, 31, 32, 33, 34, 38, 39 (also it has a PMID of 14676952), 40, 41, 42, 45, 46, 47, 48, 52, 55, and 56 as they lead to only an abstract as opposed to the entire article DoneAcather96 (
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15:58, 13 September 2016 (UTC)reply