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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin ( talk · contribs) 11:37, 19 December 2011 (UTC)
I just wanted to let the reviewer and nominator know that I responded to the request made at the Guild of Copy Editors to copy edit this page. I clean up some of the grammar and punctuation, and I rearranged some sentences to form better paragraphs and to help the flow a little bit. As far as the prose is considered, I think it satisfied GA criteria. I did find one item that I believe requires a citation; I will leave the rest of the article considerations to the GA reviewer. -- Tea with toast (話) 22:47, 14 January 2012 (UTC)
I will probably bundle footnotes for that sentence in the lead paragraph. Thank you for the excellent copy edit. Evenrød ( talk) 14:34, 16 January 2012 (UTC)
In rereading the different sourced music reviews I'm seeing that the adjective, "melancholic" and what is meant by "personal lyrics/expression" (adding it back in) needs to be better defined within the article (the reviewer having already pointed out the latter) to show a more three-dimensional portrait, but mostly to just make it more understandable to readers. It's bad etiquette to figure this out after the copy edit, :( but I think that the clarifications will end up being positive. I'm not going to be able to do it for a few days. Evenrød ( talk) 17:54, 17 January 2012 (UTC)
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin ( talk · contribs) 11:37, 19 December 2011 (UTC)
I just wanted to let the reviewer and nominator know that I responded to the request made at the Guild of Copy Editors to copy edit this page. I clean up some of the grammar and punctuation, and I rearranged some sentences to form better paragraphs and to help the flow a little bit. As far as the prose is considered, I think it satisfied GA criteria. I did find one item that I believe requires a citation; I will leave the rest of the article considerations to the GA reviewer. -- Tea with toast (話) 22:47, 14 January 2012 (UTC)
I will probably bundle footnotes for that sentence in the lead paragraph. Thank you for the excellent copy edit. Evenrød ( talk) 14:34, 16 January 2012 (UTC)
In rereading the different sourced music reviews I'm seeing that the adjective, "melancholic" and what is meant by "personal lyrics/expression" (adding it back in) needs to be better defined within the article (the reviewer having already pointed out the latter) to show a more three-dimensional portrait, but mostly to just make it more understandable to readers. It's bad etiquette to figure this out after the copy edit, :( but I think that the clarifications will end up being positive. I'm not going to be able to do it for a few days. Evenrød ( talk) 17:54, 17 January 2012 (UTC)