"In 2014, Kapoor portrayed the Hamlet character in Bhardwaj's critically acclaimed drama Haider" - I would cut "In 2014" and put the year in brackets beside Haider, so it reads "Haider (2014)", for the sake of consistency
"and Kapoor lived in New Delhi with his mother and maternal grandparents" - the lead says Delhi, so is New Delhi more accurate?
"When Kapoor was 10, his mother, who was working as a dancer, shifted to Mumbai to work as an actress" - shifted? How about moved?
"Kapoor performed on the songs "Vogue" and "GoldenEye"" - in the songs
"The year 2006 saw Kapoor play opposite Kareena Kapoor in two films" - I'd rephrase this to In 2007, Kapoor played opposite Kareena Kapoor in two films
"Kapoor next appeared in his father's directorial Mausam (2011); co-starring Sonam Kapoor," - is Shahid related to Sonam? May be worth mentioning
This is a very well written article, overall very comprehensive and enjoyable to read. The majority of the references all appear reliable and should be fine. Once those minor prose issues are addressed then this should have no problem passing! JAGUAR21:54, 18 July 2015 (UTC)reply
Thanks, Krimuk! Upon a second look this now meets the GA criteria and should be good to go. Well done on all the work JAGUAR14:29, 20 July 2015 (UTC)reply
"In 2014, Kapoor portrayed the Hamlet character in Bhardwaj's critically acclaimed drama Haider" - I would cut "In 2014" and put the year in brackets beside Haider, so it reads "Haider (2014)", for the sake of consistency
"and Kapoor lived in New Delhi with his mother and maternal grandparents" - the lead says Delhi, so is New Delhi more accurate?
"When Kapoor was 10, his mother, who was working as a dancer, shifted to Mumbai to work as an actress" - shifted? How about moved?
"Kapoor performed on the songs "Vogue" and "GoldenEye"" - in the songs
"The year 2006 saw Kapoor play opposite Kareena Kapoor in two films" - I'd rephrase this to In 2007, Kapoor played opposite Kareena Kapoor in two films
"Kapoor next appeared in his father's directorial Mausam (2011); co-starring Sonam Kapoor," - is Shahid related to Sonam? May be worth mentioning
This is a very well written article, overall very comprehensive and enjoyable to read. The majority of the references all appear reliable and should be fine. Once those minor prose issues are addressed then this should have no problem passing! JAGUAR21:54, 18 July 2015 (UTC)reply
Thanks, Krimuk! Upon a second look this now meets the GA criteria and should be good to go. Well done on all the work JAGUAR14:29, 20 July 2015 (UTC)reply