You should include both authors. They are both significant in this case.
Should link American Football.
Ref 5 actually says a wimpy character good at sports inspired the usage of football. You're going to have to fix that in the lead too.
Better, but still needs to be more accurate to the interview. "Inagaki (I): I wanted to create a protagonist that was wimpy at the beginning, yet could perform outstandingly in a sports game. With that premise in mind, I decided that American football would be a very suitable material." The order was, a wimpy character, then football and eventually eyeshield 21. It wasn't the conception of eyeshield, than the character.
"To conceal his identity Sena wears a green eyeshield; to keep him from being recruited by other teams, Hiruma picks the alias "Eyeshield 21"" The order of ideas here is wrong. He wears an eyeshield and uses the alias to avoid recruitment.
"Deimon Devil Bats" Who and why does this matter to Sena?
Still not introduced in the plot. It is introduced in the lead though
"Sena is the tournament's MVP and wins the chance to play in the Christmas Bowl." So only Sena is the chosen few allowed to go to the Christmas Bowl or is it with his team?
"a feat considered impossible" Unnecessary afterthought.
"Later, he stated a lead you can cheer for is essential to a sports manga, commenting that him "fills that role quite well."" Grammar. Incomplete.
You should include both authors. They are both significant in this case.
Should link American Football.
Ref 5 actually says a wimpy character good at sports inspired the usage of football. You're going to have to fix that in the lead too.
Better, but still needs to be more accurate to the interview. "Inagaki (I): I wanted to create a protagonist that was wimpy at the beginning, yet could perform outstandingly in a sports game. With that premise in mind, I decided that American football would be a very suitable material." The order was, a wimpy character, then football and eventually eyeshield 21. It wasn't the conception of eyeshield, than the character.
"To conceal his identity Sena wears a green eyeshield; to keep him from being recruited by other teams, Hiruma picks the alias "Eyeshield 21"" The order of ideas here is wrong. He wears an eyeshield and uses the alias to avoid recruitment.
"Deimon Devil Bats" Who and why does this matter to Sena?
Still not introduced in the plot. It is introduced in the lead though
"Sena is the tournament's MVP and wins the chance to play in the Christmas Bowl." So only Sena is the chosen few allowed to go to the Christmas Bowl or is it with his team?
"a feat considered impossible" Unnecessary afterthought.
"Later, he stated a lead you can cheer for is essential to a sports manga, commenting that him "fills that role quite well."" Grammar. Incomplete.