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Reviewer: Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:35, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
I have finished my review. This is a short article, but the subject clearly meets notability and there really isn't much to say about him. There are a couple minor issues that need to be fixed before I can pass this. I will hold this article for up to a week. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:57, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
Within "college career", in the last 3 sentences of the first paragraph and all of the second paragraph, the prose is very choppy. I'm personally not a fan of enormous sentences with 4 or 5 commas, but these are too short, can you string some of those tiny sentences together so the prose flows a bit more? I think I did a little bit elsewhere in the article, but eventually stopped to leave the rest to you. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:57, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
Also, the reader might naturally wonder why one of the greatest college lacrosse goalkeepers in NCAA history didn't play a single game professionally. Is there any reason why not? If nothing is out there to answer that question, then you at least need to state that he never played professionally in the NLL. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:57, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
Are there any free or fair use images available? If not, that is fine, images are not required in the GA standard for an article that does not obviously need or have images available. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:59, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:35, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
I have finished my review. This is a short article, but the subject clearly meets notability and there really isn't much to say about him. There are a couple minor issues that need to be fixed before I can pass this. I will hold this article for up to a week. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:57, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
Within "college career", in the last 3 sentences of the first paragraph and all of the second paragraph, the prose is very choppy. I'm personally not a fan of enormous sentences with 4 or 5 commas, but these are too short, can you string some of those tiny sentences together so the prose flows a bit more? I think I did a little bit elsewhere in the article, but eventually stopped to leave the rest to you. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:57, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
Also, the reader might naturally wonder why one of the greatest college lacrosse goalkeepers in NCAA history didn't play a single game professionally. Is there any reason why not? If nothing is out there to answer that question, then you at least need to state that he never played professionally in the NLL. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:57, 25 October 2010 (UTC)
Are there any free or fair use images available? If not, that is fine, images are not required in the GA standard for an article that does not obviously need or have images available. Aaron north ( T/ C) 00:59, 25 October 2010 (UTC)