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Will take a look soon! – Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 04:26, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
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with the institution of slavery itself.— can remove 'itself'.
and Governor of Texas— My understanding of MOS:JOBTITLE is that this should be lower-cased. I may be wrong, let me know if you disagree.
a number of times→ "various times"
and he would not swear an oath— odd wording; will "and he did not swear an oath" work?
He believed that— at the beginning of every new paragraph, you'll need to specify this last name.
the country(multiple instances) — could be replaces by "America" or "the United States"
his wife Margaret Lea Houston relied— add commas before and after Margaret Lea Houston. great to see Margaret Lea Houston as a FA
blacksmithing and other— commas after blacksmithing
His father Samuel Davidson Houston— comma after "His father"
follow his yearning-adventuresome spirit(emphasis mine) — really, seems a bit extraneous, can we rephrase (just a suggestion)
See Sam Houston's life with the Cherokees— should be moved to the heading of this section. Shouldn't be in prose. Same with
See Andrew Jackson and slavery.
he fought in the— specify Houston
President of the Republic of Texas (1836–1838) and (1841–1844)→ "President of the Republic of Texas (1836–1838; 1841–1844)"
while he was— specify Houston
President of the Republic of Texas— MOS:JOBTITLE
One year later→ "A year later"
he voted against— specify Houston
"The glory of my life ... worst of times."— the quote isn't long enough to justify a block-quote.
February 22, 1855— comma after 1855
He stated that progress in the— specify Houston
en masse— can we write "altogether" instead?
Houston toured Texas in one last plea to stay with the Union:— this is immediately succeeded by a quote. Specify something like "he said:"
he spoke for two hours;
He was the only Southern— specify Houston
February 8, 1861 and— comma after 1861
the Confederate States Army 2nd Texas Infantry Regiment— avoid linking two adjacent words
"My heart seems almost broken ..."— try not to start a sentence with a quote.
He (Houston) really— that (parenthesis) should be [square brackets]
Before he married Margaret— specify Sam
"worked a complete reformation"— the article doesn't specify where this quotation comes from.
Marion, Alabama— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Alabama
May 9, 1840— comma after 1840
Independence, Texas— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Texas
Temple Lea— comma before and after this
January 28, 1834— comma after 1834
a Senator— lowercase
Sam Houston Jr.v.
Sam Houston, Jr.— consistency needed
At the Houston's household, slaves were assigned a plot of land to raise crops for themselves in November 1848— move "November 1948" to the beginning of the sentence.
They slept under the stars— trivia?
$175— suggesting to add Template:inflation
Houston’s— fix the quote mark (’ to ')
Prather states— 'states' to 'stated'
There is a legend that Houston— "According to a legend, Houston "
December 3, 1867— comma after 1867
Little would have changed for those who left the household. They were not legally free and they were subject to laws that limited their rights and freedom. Houston's slaves were officially freed on Juneteenth in 1865.— The last sentence has already been told. Rest could be merged with the previous para.
Marion, Alabama— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Alabama
In the summer of 1848— Per MOS:SEASONS, try to avoid mentioning seasons to refer to particular time of the year.
April 16, 1840— comma after 1840
Fort Bend, Texas— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Texas
He appeared tired— lowercase 'H'
cracklin’ bread,— fix the quote mark (’ to ')
Jeff Hamilton was born a slave onv.
Joshua Houston born into slavery in
worked as hard as grown men,
bright young man— seems extranous
eleven miles— suggesting to use Template:convert
The servants sat in a balcony above the white congregation.— why is this important? trivia?
July 4th— inconsistent date format
was a large man— ?
He states that— "he stated that"
five miles from— suggesting to use Template:convert
Retrieved March 26, 2016.v.
Retrieved 2021-07-11.— inconsistent date format
Seale 1992, pp. 83–86..— why '..' after 86?
Seale 1992, pp. 65.— should be 'p.'
Denton, Texasv.
Denton, TX— inconsistent location format
Putting the review on hold. You might want to take a look at George Washington and slavery, a featured article. – Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 09:42, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
Okay, giving this one a second read, I think we are good to go for GA here. Promoting. If you want to go ahead with FA, I think it needs a bit of work for that (given the comprehensiveness of George Washington and slavery). I recommend a nice copy-edit by WP:GOCE/REQ and a peer review first, but, for now, great work! Thanks! Will take a look at Mr. Houston and native Americans in a day or two. – Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 07:28, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
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The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Reviewer:
Kavyansh.Singh (
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contribs)
04:26, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
Nominator:
CaroleHenson (
talk ·
contribs) at
22:48, 10 August 2021 (UTC)
Will take a look soon! – Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 04:26, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not) |
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Overall: |
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with the institution of slavery itself.— can remove 'itself'.
and Governor of Texas— My understanding of MOS:JOBTITLE is that this should be lower-cased. I may be wrong, let me know if you disagree.
a number of times→ "various times"
and he would not swear an oath— odd wording; will "and he did not swear an oath" work?
He believed that— at the beginning of every new paragraph, you'll need to specify this last name.
the country(multiple instances) — could be replaces by "America" or "the United States"
his wife Margaret Lea Houston relied— add commas before and after Margaret Lea Houston. great to see Margaret Lea Houston as a FA
blacksmithing and other— commas after blacksmithing
His father Samuel Davidson Houston— comma after "His father"
follow his yearning-adventuresome spirit(emphasis mine) — really, seems a bit extraneous, can we rephrase (just a suggestion)
See Sam Houston's life with the Cherokees— should be moved to the heading of this section. Shouldn't be in prose. Same with
See Andrew Jackson and slavery.
he fought in the— specify Houston
President of the Republic of Texas (1836–1838) and (1841–1844)→ "President of the Republic of Texas (1836–1838; 1841–1844)"
while he was— specify Houston
President of the Republic of Texas— MOS:JOBTITLE
One year later→ "A year later"
he voted against— specify Houston
"The glory of my life ... worst of times."— the quote isn't long enough to justify a block-quote.
February 22, 1855— comma after 1855
He stated that progress in the— specify Houston
en masse— can we write "altogether" instead?
Houston toured Texas in one last plea to stay with the Union:— this is immediately succeeded by a quote. Specify something like "he said:"
he spoke for two hours;
He was the only Southern— specify Houston
February 8, 1861 and— comma after 1861
the Confederate States Army 2nd Texas Infantry Regiment— avoid linking two adjacent words
"My heart seems almost broken ..."— try not to start a sentence with a quote.
He (Houston) really— that (parenthesis) should be [square brackets]
Before he married Margaret— specify Sam
"worked a complete reformation"— the article doesn't specify where this quotation comes from.
Marion, Alabama— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Alabama
May 9, 1840— comma after 1840
Independence, Texas— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Texas
Temple Lea— comma before and after this
January 28, 1834— comma after 1834
a Senator— lowercase
Sam Houston Jr.v.
Sam Houston, Jr.— consistency needed
At the Houston's household, slaves were assigned a plot of land to raise crops for themselves in November 1848— move "November 1948" to the beginning of the sentence.
They slept under the stars— trivia?
$175— suggesting to add Template:inflation
Houston’s— fix the quote mark (’ to ')
Prather states— 'states' to 'stated'
There is a legend that Houston— "According to a legend, Houston "
December 3, 1867— comma after 1867
Little would have changed for those who left the household. They were not legally free and they were subject to laws that limited their rights and freedom. Houston's slaves were officially freed on Juneteenth in 1865.— The last sentence has already been told. Rest could be merged with the previous para.
Marion, Alabama— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Alabama
In the summer of 1848— Per MOS:SEASONS, try to avoid mentioning seasons to refer to particular time of the year.
April 16, 1840— comma after 1840
Fort Bend, Texas— MOS:GEOCOMMA after Texas
He appeared tired— lowercase 'H'
cracklin’ bread,— fix the quote mark (’ to ')
Jeff Hamilton was born a slave onv.
Joshua Houston born into slavery in
worked as hard as grown men,
bright young man— seems extranous
eleven miles— suggesting to use Template:convert
The servants sat in a balcony above the white congregation.— why is this important? trivia?
July 4th— inconsistent date format
was a large man— ?
He states that— "he stated that"
five miles from— suggesting to use Template:convert
Retrieved March 26, 2016.v.
Retrieved 2021-07-11.— inconsistent date format
Seale 1992, pp. 83–86..— why '..' after 86?
Seale 1992, pp. 65.— should be 'p.'
Denton, Texasv.
Denton, TX— inconsistent location format
Putting the review on hold. You might want to take a look at George Washington and slavery, a featured article. – Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 09:42, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
Okay, giving this one a second read, I think we are good to go for GA here. Promoting. If you want to go ahead with FA, I think it needs a bit of work for that (given the comprehensiveness of George Washington and slavery). I recommend a nice copy-edit by WP:GOCE/REQ and a peer review first, but, for now, great work! Thanks! Will take a look at Mr. Houston and native Americans in a day or two. – Kavyansh.Singh ( talk) 07:28, 2 January 2022 (UTC)