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I am proposing that
Sartaj Singh (character) be merged into this page. The character is not independently notable outside of the universe of this work of fiction, and a significant portion of the material in the source page is more relevant to the destination page (i.e. the TV show).
Gamesmaster G-9 (
talk) 03:35, 7 August 2018 (UTC)reply
Hey, I'm Some Dude From North Carolina, and I will be reviewing this article. Expect comments later in the day. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 14:38, 1 January 2021 (UTC)reply
I don't see any issue with the current one.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:03, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
The duplicate links in the infobox can stay per
MOS:DUPLINK.
Done
In the infobox, the "written by" column should be removed per the rules on the infobox, which state that "Do not use if the show has many (5+) writers."
Only problem here is with the first sentence of the last paragraph, which reads: "The first four episodes of Sacred Games premiered on 30 June 2018". This is then followed by "and the full eight-episode season was released on Netflix on 5 July 2018". Were the first four episodes of the series released on Netflix or somewhere else? If they were from Netflix, shouldn't this be mentioned in the infobox? If they weren't, it should be mentioned in the lead.
There is no mention in
this reference that it was 2014 when "Vikramaditya Motwane met the Netflix team during a visit to Los Angeles". The reference (from 2018) states that it happened "three and a half years ago", which could be 2014 or 2015.
Removed that bit.
The
reference right after the sentence finishing with "and thought it was 'great'" should be marked as dead.
Replaced the dead link.
The sentence "calling the process" seems vague. It should be mentioned that Motwane was referring to
writing for the show.
Fixed.
The phrase "parallel tracks" is not mentioned in its
reference.
Tweaked
The claim "since he read it in 2006 when it was published" needs a reference.
Removed. I couldn't find a ref.
The sentence "In 2014, he was approached by AMC and Scott Free Productions to direct an English-language adaptation of the novel" is mentioned nowhere in
the reference right after it. However, a small mention can be found in the following
citation, so I would replace it.
Added the above mentioned source. The first source does mentions that he was offered the series in 2014.
The
reference after "it had to be a gripping slow-burner" is dead, so it should be marked as dead with "url-status=dead".
Fixed dead URL.
The sentence ending with "the Kurukshetra War" should be referenced.
It is covered in the following reference.
The fact that the poison was "created from the churning of the sea" is not mentioned in the
reference.
Samudra manthan literally means "sea churning".
"Aatapi and Vatapi were two demons who tricked travellers with hospitality and killed them" is pure copy-pasting. Rephrase it, or add quotation marks.
Tweaked.
TYPO! Change the uses of "Kuckoo" to "Kukoo" or "Kukkoo" per
the reference used.
As the only previous mentions are in #Cast and the lead, it should be mentioned who Saif Ali Khan portrays on the show (Inspector Sartaj Singh).
Done
This
reference does not say that Radhika Apte "did not read the novel".
Removed
The sentence needs to be fixed: "...casting popular actors like Khan and Siddiqui "drives a larger audience to watch. He said that it was easier to convince Apte and Neeraj Kabi for the roles after Khan and Siddiqui were cast."
The reference has part of it, but I think there are missing quotation marks that would divide the main text from the article.
Fixed
This section also an incorrect spelling of "Kuckoo". Change it to "Kukoo" or "Kukkoo" per
the reference used and to be consistent with other sections (like #Cast).
Done
The sentence "the lack of references for the role made it "the most challenging experience" of her career" is also copy-pasted.
Tweaked
This
reference does not state that Elnaaz Norouzi "developed a large Instagram following for her Hindi accent".
Removed. I don't know who had added it.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 14:04, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
I notice that you can't link the YouTube video from the first sentence because it's from a random user, so I suggest replacing it with a different source.
It's not a random user, but
E24 and the reason you can't access it because I have used the AV media template.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:58, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
The phrase "without being confined to a three-act structure" should be in quotation marks.
It has been rephrased. He was making this point but not in the above mentioned words.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:58, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
It seems that the second paragraph focuses on the filming aspects of the season, so the fact that "Chandra served as a script consultant in the series" seems out of place.
The
second reference stating that the series was "subtitled in over 20 languages" is not free to use. Add "|url-access=registration" or "|url-access=limited" to the citation.
The Rotten Tomatoes "critics consensus" of the
first season should probably be added to the first paragraph.
Since we are talking about the critical reception of the overall series, writing the RT consensus of just one season feels odd.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:34, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Whatever ": " is, is not good. Please remove the two uses of ": " (not just the colons, but the actually ": ") and merge the sentences in which they appeared.
This cannot happen since I'm taking parts of their direct quotes and using them in the sentence. I can't just remove the "" as its quoting verbatim. It's done in order to avoid long direct quotes.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:34, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Inverted comma's are not the same as "[...]". Please read similar GA's and their reception sections.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:08, 9 January 2021 (UTC)reply
The reference right after the phrase "2019 Best Drama International Emmy Award" should be marked as dead as it no longer "
works"
Replaced
The sentence containing "and Fonseca the Best..." seems wordy. I suggest changing it to "while Fonseca received the Best..."
Done
The names in that sentence should also be in full, so change Dasgupta to
Alokananda Dasgupta and Fonseca to Sylvester Fonseca.
Done
Per consistency, every mention of the word "Award" after an actual award (ex. Best Drama International Emmy Award) should be capitalized.
Done
I
found a bit of other awards missing from this section, such as the
Gold Awards, and another Indian Television Academy Award win.
Added Gold Awards. The ITAA wins are already mentioned. I have intentionally skipped the nominations unless it was notable like the Emmy.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:48, 9 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Per
MOS:TVRECEPTION, "Awards and recognition" should be a subsection under release, and the rest of the info should be under a subsection titled "Critical response".
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I am proposing that
Sartaj Singh (character) be merged into this page. The character is not independently notable outside of the universe of this work of fiction, and a significant portion of the material in the source page is more relevant to the destination page (i.e. the TV show).
Gamesmaster G-9 (
talk) 03:35, 7 August 2018 (UTC)reply
Hey, I'm Some Dude From North Carolina, and I will be reviewing this article. Expect comments later in the day. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 14:38, 1 January 2021 (UTC)reply
I don't see any issue with the current one.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:03, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
The duplicate links in the infobox can stay per
MOS:DUPLINK.
Done
In the infobox, the "written by" column should be removed per the rules on the infobox, which state that "Do not use if the show has many (5+) writers."
Only problem here is with the first sentence of the last paragraph, which reads: "The first four episodes of Sacred Games premiered on 30 June 2018". This is then followed by "and the full eight-episode season was released on Netflix on 5 July 2018". Were the first four episodes of the series released on Netflix or somewhere else? If they were from Netflix, shouldn't this be mentioned in the infobox? If they weren't, it should be mentioned in the lead.
There is no mention in
this reference that it was 2014 when "Vikramaditya Motwane met the Netflix team during a visit to Los Angeles". The reference (from 2018) states that it happened "three and a half years ago", which could be 2014 or 2015.
Removed that bit.
The
reference right after the sentence finishing with "and thought it was 'great'" should be marked as dead.
Replaced the dead link.
The sentence "calling the process" seems vague. It should be mentioned that Motwane was referring to
writing for the show.
Fixed.
The phrase "parallel tracks" is not mentioned in its
reference.
Tweaked
The claim "since he read it in 2006 when it was published" needs a reference.
Removed. I couldn't find a ref.
The sentence "In 2014, he was approached by AMC and Scott Free Productions to direct an English-language adaptation of the novel" is mentioned nowhere in
the reference right after it. However, a small mention can be found in the following
citation, so I would replace it.
Added the above mentioned source. The first source does mentions that he was offered the series in 2014.
The
reference after "it had to be a gripping slow-burner" is dead, so it should be marked as dead with "url-status=dead".
Fixed dead URL.
The sentence ending with "the Kurukshetra War" should be referenced.
It is covered in the following reference.
The fact that the poison was "created from the churning of the sea" is not mentioned in the
reference.
Samudra manthan literally means "sea churning".
"Aatapi and Vatapi were two demons who tricked travellers with hospitality and killed them" is pure copy-pasting. Rephrase it, or add quotation marks.
Tweaked.
TYPO! Change the uses of "Kuckoo" to "Kukoo" or "Kukkoo" per
the reference used.
As the only previous mentions are in #Cast and the lead, it should be mentioned who Saif Ali Khan portrays on the show (Inspector Sartaj Singh).
Done
This
reference does not say that Radhika Apte "did not read the novel".
Removed
The sentence needs to be fixed: "...casting popular actors like Khan and Siddiqui "drives a larger audience to watch. He said that it was easier to convince Apte and Neeraj Kabi for the roles after Khan and Siddiqui were cast."
The reference has part of it, but I think there are missing quotation marks that would divide the main text from the article.
Fixed
This section also an incorrect spelling of "Kuckoo". Change it to "Kukoo" or "Kukkoo" per
the reference used and to be consistent with other sections (like #Cast).
Done
The sentence "the lack of references for the role made it "the most challenging experience" of her career" is also copy-pasted.
Tweaked
This
reference does not state that Elnaaz Norouzi "developed a large Instagram following for her Hindi accent".
Removed. I don't know who had added it.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 14:04, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
I notice that you can't link the YouTube video from the first sentence because it's from a random user, so I suggest replacing it with a different source.
It's not a random user, but
E24 and the reason you can't access it because I have used the AV media template.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:58, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
The phrase "without being confined to a three-act structure" should be in quotation marks.
It has been rephrased. He was making this point but not in the above mentioned words.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:58, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
It seems that the second paragraph focuses on the filming aspects of the season, so the fact that "Chandra served as a script consultant in the series" seems out of place.
The
second reference stating that the series was "subtitled in over 20 languages" is not free to use. Add "|url-access=registration" or "|url-access=limited" to the citation.
The Rotten Tomatoes "critics consensus" of the
first season should probably be added to the first paragraph.
Since we are talking about the critical reception of the overall series, writing the RT consensus of just one season feels odd.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:34, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Whatever ": " is, is not good. Please remove the two uses of ": " (not just the colons, but the actually ": ") and merge the sentences in which they appeared.
This cannot happen since I'm taking parts of their direct quotes and using them in the sentence. I can't just remove the "" as its quoting verbatim. It's done in order to avoid long direct quotes.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:34, 8 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Inverted comma's are not the same as "[...]". Please read similar GA's and their reception sections.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:08, 9 January 2021 (UTC)reply
The reference right after the phrase "2019 Best Drama International Emmy Award" should be marked as dead as it no longer "
works"
Replaced
The sentence containing "and Fonseca the Best..." seems wordy. I suggest changing it to "while Fonseca received the Best..."
Done
The names in that sentence should also be in full, so change Dasgupta to
Alokananda Dasgupta and Fonseca to Sylvester Fonseca.
Done
Per consistency, every mention of the word "Award" after an actual award (ex. Best Drama International Emmy Award) should be capitalized.
Done
I
found a bit of other awards missing from this section, such as the
Gold Awards, and another Indian Television Academy Award win.
Added Gold Awards. The ITAA wins are already mentioned. I have intentionally skipped the nominations unless it was notable like the Emmy.
Yashthepunisher (
talk) 13:48, 9 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Per
MOS:TVRECEPTION, "Awards and recognition" should be a subsection under release, and the rest of the info should be under a subsection titled "Critical response".