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Nominator: Kung Fu Man ( talk · contribs) 22:15, 27 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Pokelego999 ( talk · contribs) 00:54, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
Will take this on in the coming days. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 ( talk) 00:54, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
Six GA Criteria
1. Article is well-written. Very minimal mistakes if any at all.
2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.
3. Coverage is broad in depth and focus. Shows multiple aspects of the character.
4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.
5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.
6. Article uses two fair use images with proper rationale, and uses one sound file with proper rationale.
Lead
-"SHODAN has been praised as one of the best villains in video games, for her persistent presence and taunting nature, and how it drove the player to defeat her. with praise given for the character's voice and Brosius' emotionless portrayal of her." Sentence fragment and grammatically incorrect sentence before it.
- Fixed.
Appearances
-"The soldier manages to destroy SHODAN's core, but she transfers her consciousness to escape pod, taking over the body of the female passenger and ending the game on a cliffhanger." Is she transferring it to an entity titled escape pod, or into an someone inside of an escape pod?
- Fixed.
-"and would have instead treated her as highly intelligent as compared to insane" I feel the "as compared to insane" could likely be reworded for flow.
- Fixed.
-How was SHODAN alluded to in these other games?
- Clarified.
Design and development
-I feel when it discusses Eric Brosius, the names should be clarified, as both share the same last name and referring to both as "Brosius" may be confusing to readers.
- Fixed.
Critical reception
-"He also pointed out how her femininity played into this theme, as it's emphasized often throughout the game and how she is presented as an "over-possessive mother demanding perfect loyalty and the lover who only wants a slave", elements often reflected in female characters in pulp fiction also." This sentence is really messy to try and read. I'd split or reword it if possible.
- Rewrote this and the subsequent bits for better flow.
Overall
-Looks good overall. Patch up the above and it should be good to go. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 ( talk) 13:02, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
- All issues addressed, lemme know if there's anything else to fix!--
Kung Fu Man (
talk) 14:09, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
- Looks good. Happy to pass! Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 ( talk) 14:51, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
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Nominator: Kung Fu Man ( talk · contribs) 22:15, 27 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Pokelego999 ( talk · contribs) 00:54, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
Will take this on in the coming days. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 ( talk) 00:54, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
Six GA Criteria
1. Article is well-written. Very minimal mistakes if any at all.
2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.
3. Coverage is broad in depth and focus. Shows multiple aspects of the character.
4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.
5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.
6. Article uses two fair use images with proper rationale, and uses one sound file with proper rationale.
Lead
-"SHODAN has been praised as one of the best villains in video games, for her persistent presence and taunting nature, and how it drove the player to defeat her. with praise given for the character's voice and Brosius' emotionless portrayal of her." Sentence fragment and grammatically incorrect sentence before it.
- Fixed.
Appearances
-"The soldier manages to destroy SHODAN's core, but she transfers her consciousness to escape pod, taking over the body of the female passenger and ending the game on a cliffhanger." Is she transferring it to an entity titled escape pod, or into an someone inside of an escape pod?
- Fixed.
-"and would have instead treated her as highly intelligent as compared to insane" I feel the "as compared to insane" could likely be reworded for flow.
- Fixed.
-How was SHODAN alluded to in these other games?
- Clarified.
Design and development
-I feel when it discusses Eric Brosius, the names should be clarified, as both share the same last name and referring to both as "Brosius" may be confusing to readers.
- Fixed.
Critical reception
-"He also pointed out how her femininity played into this theme, as it's emphasized often throughout the game and how she is presented as an "over-possessive mother demanding perfect loyalty and the lover who only wants a slave", elements often reflected in female characters in pulp fiction also." This sentence is really messy to try and read. I'd split or reword it if possible.
- Rewrote this and the subsequent bits for better flow.
Overall
-Looks good overall. Patch up the above and it should be good to go. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 ( talk) 13:02, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
- All issues addressed, lemme know if there's anything else to fix!--
Kung Fu Man (
talk) 14:09, 3 June 2024 (UTC)
- Looks good. Happy to pass! Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 ( talk) 14:51, 3 June 2024 (UTC)