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Reviewer: Miyagawa ( talk · contribs) 20:24, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
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- Lead: "included three track and field athletes" - needs to be followed with a semicolon
- "The first three athletes qualfiied for the games by meeting qualification standards while the remaining four" Just so that it can't be misconstrued as being some sort of "first come first served" type deal, you might want to change the "first three" part to "track and field". Also a typo on qualified.
- Background: "to a summer games is ten to the 1992 Olympics." - I think "was" is probably better than "is" rather than switching back and forth from past to present tense in the paragraph.
- There's no article specifically for the leisure centre, but you could link Bury St Edmunds.
- Athletics: "one of two of the oldest male athletes" perhaps better as "one of the two oldest male athletes"?
- "at age 27" -> "at the age of 27" or "at 27 years old"?
- Replaced with the third option. MWright96 (talk) 21:16, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
- Swimming: Query about the first line - was he the only person to compete for Rwanda in 2008, or simply the only person in the 2012 team who did?
- He was the sole competitor of the London 2012 team who took part in Beijing 2008. MWright96 (talk) 21:16, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
That's the lot. Ping me back when you've had a look and I'll be happy to promote. Miyagawa ( talk) 20:47, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
- @ Miyagawa: Thank you again for reviewing. Everything should be resolved. MWright96 (talk) 21:16, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
- Great, promoting. Miyagawa ( talk) 22:28, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Miyagawa ( talk · contribs) 20:24, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
Grabbing for a review.
Miyagawa (
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20:24, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
- Lead: "included three track and field athletes" - needs to be followed with a semicolon
- "The first three athletes qualfiied for the games by meeting qualification standards while the remaining four" Just so that it can't be misconstrued as being some sort of "first come first served" type deal, you might want to change the "first three" part to "track and field". Also a typo on qualified.
- Background: "to a summer games is ten to the 1992 Olympics." - I think "was" is probably better than "is" rather than switching back and forth from past to present tense in the paragraph.
- There's no article specifically for the leisure centre, but you could link Bury St Edmunds.
- Athletics: "one of two of the oldest male athletes" perhaps better as "one of the two oldest male athletes"?
- "at age 27" -> "at the age of 27" or "at 27 years old"?
- Replaced with the third option. MWright96 (talk) 21:16, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
- Swimming: Query about the first line - was he the only person to compete for Rwanda in 2008, or simply the only person in the 2012 team who did?
- He was the sole competitor of the London 2012 team who took part in Beijing 2008. MWright96 (talk) 21:16, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
That's the lot. Ping me back when you've had a look and I'll be happy to promote. Miyagawa ( talk) 20:47, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
- @ Miyagawa: Thank you again for reviewing. Everything should be resolved. MWright96 (talk) 21:16, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
- Great, promoting. Miyagawa ( talk) 22:28, 7 November 2016 (UTC)