The line about her commissioning and trials should be reversed, i.e., "the ship was commissioned in March 1911 but did not complete sea trials until..."
Let me double-check McLaughlin, but I think that it is correct as written.
Oh, I wasn't saying it was wrong, I was commenting on the chronological order - it sounds odd to say "in November I did xxxxxx but last July I did xxxxxxx." The sentence would flow better if you put it in chronological order.
Parsecboy (
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02:39, 28 November 2011 (UTC)reply
The line about her commissioning and trials should be reversed, i.e., "the ship was commissioned in March 1911 but did not complete sea trials until..."
Let me double-check McLaughlin, but I think that it is correct as written.
Oh, I wasn't saying it was wrong, I was commenting on the chronological order - it sounds odd to say "in November I did xxxxxx but last July I did xxxxxxx." The sentence would flow better if you put it in chronological order.
Parsecboy (
talk)
02:39, 28 November 2011 (UTC)reply