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08:56, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
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- It is reasonably well written.
- a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
- b. (
MoS for
lead,
layout,
word choice,
fiction, and
lists):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a. (
reference section):
- b. (citations to
reliable sources):
- c. (
OR):
- d. (
copyvio and
plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a. (
major aspects):
- b. (
focused):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a. (images are tagged and non-free content have
non-free use rationales):
- b. (
appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/fail:
(Criteria marked
are unassessed)
I will get on with this today! --
K. Peake
08:56, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
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Infobox and lead
- Infobox looks good!
- "made available commercially as the album's" → "made available commercially as the"
- ""Runaway" is a" → "it is a"
- "in its composition." → "in the composition."
- "The track received positive reviews" → "The song received positive reviews"
- Only keep the Prince comparisons since no more than one review mentions the Supremes
- "as well as with Jackson's" → "as well as with Janet Jackson's" per
MOS:SAMESURNAME
- "In the United States, it reached" → "In the US, it reached" per
MOS:US
- "An accompanying
music video for the track was" → "An accompanying
music video was", as this is implied
- "most recently on second leg of the" → "most recently on the second leg of her"
Background
- Img looks good!
- Mention that Design of a Decade was released in 1995
- "as well two new tracks," → "as well as two new tracks,"
- "the past 10 years."" → "the past 10 years"." per
MOS:QUOTE
- "duet with Jackson's brother" → "duet with Janet's brother" per MOS:SAMESURNAME, even though everyone knows who the second Jackson is anyway!
- "of her past single" → "of Janet Jackson's past single" per above
- "
Deep Dish and
Farley and Heller," → "
Deep Dish, and
Farley and Heller,"
Recording and composition
- "Jam and Lewis also play" this sentence needs past/present tense throughout to be consistent
- Audio sample looks good!
- "Musically, it is a" → "Musically, "Runaway" is a"
- "sitars" as well as Jackson's" → "sitars", and Jackson's"
- MOS:QUOTE issues throughout this section, i.e when there is punctuation inside speech marks and it is not a full sentence
- "he also said that" → "he also said"
- A misspelling is for cleveriy; check the source for this and if not use [] or [
sic] to edit
- "
Freaky Trigger website observed that "this" → "
Freaky Trigger website observed, "This" per this being a full sentence
- "Australia and Mexico, while" → "Australia, and Mexico, while"
- "she tries to convince him" → "Jackson tries to convince him"
- "with the lyric," → "with the line,"
- "Jam commented that the lyrics" change simply to the line if it is about this one line
Critical reception
- "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
- "classified it as" → "handed the classification of"
- MOS:QUOTE issues again in this section
- "reworking of 'Escapade,'," why is there two commas when this is inside a quote?
- Howard Cohen of
The Miami Herald had" → "Howard Cohen of the
Miami Herald had" with the wikilink
- Remove repeated link to Michael Jackson
- "Tirzah Agassi of
Jerusalem Post wrote" → "Tirzah Agassi of
The Jerusalem Post wrote" with the wikilink
- "was "an innocuous trifle" → "is "an innocuous trifle"
- "Paul Marsh from
The San Francisco Examiner" → "Paul Marsh from the
San Francisco Examiner" with the wikilink
- "complementing that "if they were" → "complementing how "if they were"
- "For Mark Brown from the
Orange County Register," → "For Mark Brown from
The Orange County Register," with the wikilink
- "Andrew Hirst of" → "Andrew Hirst of the"
Commercial performance
- Img looks good!
- "In the United States, "Runaway"" → "In the US, "Runaway""
- "of the chart twice" → "of the Hot 100 twice"
- Mention the certification was in the US
- "of the single" remove this part and instead mention in this sentence the certification was in Australia
- For the other parts of Europe, why is it disordered in terms of positions from highest to lowest or the opposite?
Music video
- Img looks good!
- "The accompanying
music video for "Runaway" was" → "The
music video for "Runaway" was"
- Pipe Van Nuys, California to
Van Nuys
- "on August 29, 1995 through" → "on August 29, 1995, through"
- Pipe Seven Wonders of the World to
Wonders of the World
- "her dress and jewelry" remove in the video because this is implied
- "in New York City." → "in New York City (NYC)." per this city being mentioned twice
- Pipe Pyramids of Egypt to
Egyptian pyramids
- "in Rio de Janeiro, as well as the" → "in Rio de Janeiro, and the"
- "classic Hollywood musicals."" → "classic Hollywood musicals"." per MOS:QUOTE
- "
Los Angeles Times' Lorraine Ali commented" → "The
Los Angeles Times' Lorraine Ali commented"
Live performances
- Img looks good!
- "on the setlist of her" → "on the setlist of Jackson's"
- Start a new sentence at during the performance to avoid a run-on
- "blow-up props", with the singer dressed" → "blow-up props" and the singer dressed"
- Lowercase the Roots per
MOS:THEMUSIC
Track listing
Credits and personnel
- Use
{{
spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between credits and personnel
Charts
Weekly charts
- Are you sure Cash Box shouldn't be in brackets instead?
Year-end charts
Decade-end charts
Certifications
- Change caption to Certifications and sales for "Runaway"
Release history
References
-
Copyvio score looks great at 24.8%!!
- Add via Google Books to any of the refs citing it, only wikilinking on the first instance
- Pipe Billboard to
Billboard (magazine) on ref 4
- Fix
MOS:QWQ issues with ref 6
- The Miami Herald →
Miami Herald on ref 19 with the wikilink
-
WP:OVERLINK of Music Week on ref 31
- WP:OVERLINK of David Browne on ref 32
- The San Francisco Examiner →
San Francisco Examiner on ref 35 with the wikilink
- The La Crosse Tribune →
La Crosse Tribune on ref 36 with the wikilink
- WP:OVERLINK of Music & Media on ref 86
Final comments and verdict
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Kyle Peake I think all of the issues have been addressed, thanks for your time reviewing this!
Alex
reach me!
16:40, 4 August 2023 (UTC)
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