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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 ( talk · contribs) 21:45, 25 November 2016 (UTC) reply

• I am picking this one up... but there is a lot of work to be done. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 21:45, 25 November 2016 (UTC) reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   See below

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR): d ( copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a ( major aspects): b ( focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):

   All images have appropriate licences

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• Infobox:
  • We don't need to have references in the infobox, as the facts are covered in the article

    Done, moved inline Kees08 ( talk)

  • The medals are not linked to the articles, so most readers won't know what they are. Use text links like in the MilHist articles. Leave the astronaut wings out

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

• Lead:
  • Link Grand Rapids, Michigan, Eagle Scout, Central High School, Naval ROTC, Illinois Institute of Technology, Phi Kappa Sigma, Purdue University, ensign, Naval Air Station Pensacola, T-28, T-34, and A3D, Heavy Photographic Squadron 62, Cuban Missile Crisis, Air Medal (the first time it is used - and why is it qualified with "Navy" the second time?), Capcom, Gemini 3 and Gemini 4 (Note that the Lead is separate from the article.)

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • "at the then Cape Kennedy Air Force Station" Could be more specific and link to Cape Canaveral Air Force Station Launch Complex 34?

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Per WP:EUPHEMISM, change "perished" to "died"

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

• Early life:
  • Link Greenville, Michigan.

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Don Chaffee (1910–1998) We don't use that form on Wikipedia. Remove.

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Same for Blanche. Do we have a maiden name?

    Done (I don't have a maiden name, I'll look through the beginning of that book and see) (Update: can't find maiden name) Kees08 ( talk)

    I've added it for you. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 21:21, 26 November 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Did he have nay brothers or sisters?

    Yes, included now. Done. Kees08 ( talk)

  • "The family spent the next seven years in Michigan" At Greenville?

    Yes, included now. Done. Kees08 ( talk)

  • Drop the bit about becoming an Eagle Scout, as this already and more logically in the next section

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

• Boy scouts:
  • Link Merit badge (Boy Scouts of America)

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

• Education
  • Need to introduce the abbreviation NROTC

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • "enrolled at the Illinois Institute of Technology. Chaffee performed well at the Illinois Institute of Technology" Remove duplicated term

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Use the USS template for the USS Wisconsin

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • "Fall" -> "fall"

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • "he was hired as a teaching assistant in the Mathematics Department to teach classes to Freshman" Who was Freshman?

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Link Phi Kappa Sigma the first time it appears after the lead

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

• Family
  • I'm a bit iffy about the birth dates for living, non-notable people; but since NASA publishes it, meh
• Navy service
  • Use the USS template for USS Lake Champlain, USS Saratoga

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Link T-28, T-34, F9F cougar, aircraft carrier, A3D, Second VA-44 (U.S. Navy), RVAH-3, Cape Canaveral, Guantanamo Bay, Oklahoma City, Oklahoma, Air Medal

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • "In 1961" Split the paragraph here

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Any idea when he was promoted to Lieutenant (jg) or Lieutenant?

    No, I just looked through the book and the online sources that would probably have it. None had it. Kees08 ( talk)

• NASA career
  • Link Mercury Seven, Grand Canyon, Reno, Nevada, Extravehicular activity, Apollo spacecraft, Gemini spacecraft, North American Aviation, Downey, California

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Where is Fairborn, Michigan? Do you mean Fairborn, Ohio?

    Changed to Ohio. Very impressed you caught that one, it was worded a little weird in the book, but looking back it is definitely Ohio. Kees08 ( talk)

  • "NASA Headquarters in Houston, Texas" NASA Headquarters in in Washington, DC

    That is straight from the book. Did it ever change? Obviously we don't have to use the word headquarters if it is incorrect, but it does say the headquarters in Houston, Texas in the book. Kees08 ( talk)

• Accident
  • Split the paragraph at "Assigned " and "Failed"

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

  • Use the convert template with 16.7 to 29 psi (115 to 200 kPa)

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

• Aftermath
  • Combine the paragraphs so we don't have one-sentence paragraphs.

    Done Kees08 ( talk)

Hawkeye7 ( talk) 23:33, 25 November 2016 (UTC) reply

Working through these. Kees08 ( talk) 01:57, 26 November 2016 (UTC) reply

@ Hawkeye7: I have gone through all of your comments now. Let me know if you have any additional comments, replies to my comments, etc. Thanks! Kees08 ( talk) 19:42, 26 November 2016 (UTC) reply

I've added a bit, and goone over it one more time. Passing now. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 21:21, 26 November 2016 (UTC) reply

One important change: I could find no evidence that Chaffee was a test pilot (ie graduated from Patuxent), so I have removed it from the bio. Hawkeye7 ( talk) 21:38, 26 November 2016 (UTC) reply