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Moved to mainspace by RightCowLeftCoast ( talk). Self-nominated at 03:10, 16 October 2021 (UTC).
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Overall: Everything looks good. I have a few comments, all of them minor and none enough to cause me to put the nomination on hold. I'd recommend making the lead section of the article longer. At just one sentence, it is very short, considering Robert Wertheim had quite a few achievements in his life. Additionally, there is a typo in the source quote for ALT2. Finally, I suggest spelling out Rear Admiral in ALT1, as the meaning of the abbreviation may not be clear to those unfamiliar with naval officer ranks. Otherwise, this is good to go! All three hooks are sourced, but personally I find ALT0 and ALT2 more interesting than ALT1. Trainsandotherthings ( talk) 02:57, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Usernameunique ( talk · contribs) 20:42, 24 January 2022 (UTC)
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On the Occupation of Japan, the subject's assignment aboard the Bordelon at Okinawa is considered part of the allied occupation. I have modified the lead to include the missile systems which the subject worked on. I have modified the statement about his graduation from MIT. I am choosing to leave the Byrd quote in the body of the article, rather than the lead, as I don't want the lead to feel to peacocky. diff -- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
On the image, it is originally sourced here, and is a fair use image, as it is "Courtesy of General Electric Company". Although it says that the Naval History and Heritage Command is the copyright owner, out of an abundance of caution I did not upload it to Wikimedia Commons, out of fear that they would delete it within their editing community. I included the subject's nickname in the lead of the article. Occupation of Japan is part of World War II as far as United States Naval History is considered, and as stated above Bordelon, received the occupation medal during the subject's time assigned to the ship. The sons names are not included in the article body, except for within the notes.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
I have scoured the available sources online, and have mined all relative information about the subject I could find, and did not find any information about the subject's life except what is already included in the article; thus if there is information about the subject's life before his attending the New Mexico Military Institute, it is not on the internet or not in a reliable source on the internet. I included information about the subject's parent's within the footnote, as it is not about the subject directly. The source did not include the name of the senator who sponsored the subject's appointment to the Naval Academy.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
Moved engagement and marriage information to the retirement section, and renamed the section; diff. Removed "received orders"; diff. The dates of his assignment to the Norton Sound are not given in sources used in the article; I have not yet found a source which gives those dates. Page 53 of From Polaris to Trident: The Development of US Fleet Ballistic Missile Technology gave the subject's rank at that time. Other sources giving previous events during the subject's military sources did not include his rank at the of those events, except for his commissioning rank; I added it to the article diff. Added information about his 56-61 assignment to the Special Projects Office; diff. Added years for his assignment to China Lake, diff. Modified information about the Osprey/Chaparral development, diff, and diff. Added information, and modified wording regarding the United Kingdom and the Skybolt and Polaris missile systems; diff.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
Regrettably, Usernameunique has been inactive for a while and although they have replied to queries, they have twice failed to resume reviewing on the schedule they themselves proposed. The nomination status has been changed to "2nd opinion" in the hopes of finding a new reviewer to take over the review. Thank you to whoever steps up. BlueMoonset ( talk) 19:44, 8 May 2022 (UTC)
Wouldn't the image from https://www.technologyreview.com/2018/08/22/140804/bob-wertheim-sm-54/ be a better choice than a somewhat mediocre sketch? Adam Cuerden ( talk)Has about 7.7% of all FPs 21:15, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 ( talk · contribs) 21:29, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
Hello, and thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. My name is Hawkeye7, and I will be your reviewer. During this review I may make small edits such as spelling corrections, but I will only suggest substantive content changes in comments here. For responding to my comments, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make.My goal as your reviewer is to assess the quality of your work and offer suggestions for its improvement; I want to help you write a truly good article. To this end, I intend to be collaborative and work with a collegial attitude. If I have demonstrated incompetence or caused offence, please let me know. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:29, 1 March 2024 (UTC)GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
@ Hawkeye7: Thanks for your efforts of re-reviewing the article. I have implemented the changes requested above through multiple edits, which accumulated can be seen here.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 06:51, 3 March 2024 (UTC)
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The result was: promoted by
Theleekycauldron (
talk)
05:24, 1 November 2021 (UTC)
Moved to mainspace by RightCowLeftCoast ( talk). Self-nominated at 03:10, 16 October 2021 (UTC).
General: Article is new enough and long enough |
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Policy compliance:
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation |
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QPQ: Done. |
Overall: Everything looks good. I have a few comments, all of them minor and none enough to cause me to put the nomination on hold. I'd recommend making the lead section of the article longer. At just one sentence, it is very short, considering Robert Wertheim had quite a few achievements in his life. Additionally, there is a typo in the source quote for ALT2. Finally, I suggest spelling out Rear Admiral in ALT1, as the meaning of the abbreviation may not be clear to those unfamiliar with naval officer ranks. Otherwise, this is good to go! All three hooks are sourced, but personally I find ALT0 and ALT2 more interesting than ALT1. Trainsandotherthings ( talk) 02:57, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Usernameunique ( talk · contribs) 20:42, 24 January 2022 (UTC)
Lead
Infobox
Early life
Military service
Post-military life
Retirement
On the Occupation of Japan, the subject's assignment aboard the Bordelon at Okinawa is considered part of the allied occupation. I have modified the lead to include the missile systems which the subject worked on. I have modified the statement about his graduation from MIT. I am choosing to leave the Byrd quote in the body of the article, rather than the lead, as I don't want the lead to feel to peacocky. diff -- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
On the image, it is originally sourced here, and is a fair use image, as it is "Courtesy of General Electric Company". Although it says that the Naval History and Heritage Command is the copyright owner, out of an abundance of caution I did not upload it to Wikimedia Commons, out of fear that they would delete it within their editing community. I included the subject's nickname in the lead of the article. Occupation of Japan is part of World War II as far as United States Naval History is considered, and as stated above Bordelon, received the occupation medal during the subject's time assigned to the ship. The sons names are not included in the article body, except for within the notes.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
I have scoured the available sources online, and have mined all relative information about the subject I could find, and did not find any information about the subject's life except what is already included in the article; thus if there is information about the subject's life before his attending the New Mexico Military Institute, it is not on the internet or not in a reliable source on the internet. I included information about the subject's parent's within the footnote, as it is not about the subject directly. The source did not include the name of the senator who sponsored the subject's appointment to the Naval Academy.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
Moved engagement and marriage information to the retirement section, and renamed the section; diff. Removed "received orders"; diff. The dates of his assignment to the Norton Sound are not given in sources used in the article; I have not yet found a source which gives those dates. Page 53 of From Polaris to Trident: The Development of US Fleet Ballistic Missile Technology gave the subject's rank at that time. Other sources giving previous events during the subject's military sources did not include his rank at the of those events, except for his commissioning rank; I added it to the article diff. Added information about his 56-61 assignment to the Special Projects Office; diff. Added years for his assignment to China Lake, diff. Modified information about the Osprey/Chaparral development, diff, and diff. Added information, and modified wording regarding the United Kingdom and the Skybolt and Polaris missile systems; diff.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 02:40, 1 February 2022 (UTC)
Regrettably, Usernameunique has been inactive for a while and although they have replied to queries, they have twice failed to resume reviewing on the schedule they themselves proposed. The nomination status has been changed to "2nd opinion" in the hopes of finding a new reviewer to take over the review. Thank you to whoever steps up. BlueMoonset ( talk) 19:44, 8 May 2022 (UTC)
Wouldn't the image from https://www.technologyreview.com/2018/08/22/140804/bob-wertheim-sm-54/ be a better choice than a somewhat mediocre sketch? Adam Cuerden ( talk)Has about 7.7% of all FPs 21:15, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 ( talk · contribs) 21:29, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
Hello, and thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. My name is Hawkeye7, and I will be your reviewer. During this review I may make small edits such as spelling corrections, but I will only suggest substantive content changes in comments here. For responding to my comments, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make.My goal as your reviewer is to assess the quality of your work and offer suggestions for its improvement; I want to help you write a truly good article. To this end, I intend to be collaborative and work with a collegial attitude. If I have demonstrated incompetence or caused offence, please let me know. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:29, 1 March 2024 (UTC)GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
@ Hawkeye7: Thanks for your efforts of re-reviewing the article. I have implemented the changes requested above through multiple edits, which accumulated can be seen here.-- RightCowLeftCoast ( Moo) 06:51, 3 March 2024 (UTC)