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There are a fair number of copy cleanup items. You need to figure out a better structure with the Ducks L4 header containing nearly 3,000 words of its own. There's also a dead link source to fix.
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05:14, 17 August 2023 (UTC)
Run a script to change smart quotes to dumb quotes, as I see one in this article ( MOS:CQ).
The lead can support an additional paragraph about his NHL career 2013–23. 64 percent of the article is about the Ducks, but our lead barely talks about his time in Anaheim. Done
The Ducks L4 header is very long. It contains, no joke, 64 percent of the words in the entire article (2950/4582). Would having multiple Ducks headers be acceptable? It would certainly help readers!
Roland is his father's name. "In Sweden, a lot of people have a grandparent's name but maybe not all of them," Rakell said, smiling. "I think my mom (Annika) ...
41 Plymouth Whalers OHL Rickard Rakell 05/05/1993 AIK Sweden RW 6.00 185 2011
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The Ducks also recalled center Rickard Rakell from Norfolk and reassigned center Peter Holland. Rakell has six points (four goals, two assists) with six penalty minutes in 11 games for the Admirals, and co-led the team in scoring, goals and appearances. The youngest player to appear in a game for the Ducks (19 years, eight months, 14 days), Rakell was assigned to Norfolk on Oct. 31.He had 5 points before per ref [25], so this checks out.
Ducks rookie center Rickard Rakell is expected to start on the first line alongside star Corey Perry and recent minor league call-up Emerson Etem of Long Beach.
Rakell is the first Ducks player to record his first career goal in the playoffs (courtesy Elias Sports Bureau).
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Palmieri played with Kesler and Matt Beleskey in Games 1 and 2 of the first round before he was moved to the third line with Rakell and Cogliano.
Rakell has gone from 20 goals in 72 games last season to a Ducks-leading 32 in 65 games this season. Rakell leads the League with 10 game-winning goals.
Additionally, Rakell's 0.49 goals per game is sixth among those who have played at least 20 games. His 27 even-strength goals are tied for third with Chicago Blackhawks forward Patrick Kane.
It was Rakell's fourth goal in two games. He has an NHL career-high 53 points, two more than he had in 71 games last season.
Pittsburgh added more firepower for a playoff run when they acquired Rickard Rakell from the Anaheim Ducks prior to the 2022 NHL Trade Deadline on March 21. The speedy playmaking forward had 13 points (four goals, nine assists) in 19 regular-season games for the Penguins.
Through 49 games this season, Rakell has scored 18 goals and 15 assists for 33 points and has brought his steady presence no matter the line he’s on.
Earwig flags a fair number of stat descriptions that are not creative prose: co-led the team in scoring, goals and appearances, and ranked second in power-play goals
and sixth youngest player to appear in a game for the Ducks at 19 years, eight months and 14 days
are the longest, and you can try rewording, but I'm not sure how many other ways there are to say the same thing.
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alt text. Done
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There are a fair number of copy cleanup items. You need to figure out a better structure with the Ducks L4 header containing nearly 3,000 words of its own. There's also a dead link source to fix.
Sammi Brie (she/her •
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05:14, 17 August 2023 (UTC)
Run a script to change smart quotes to dumb quotes, as I see one in this article ( MOS:CQ).
The lead can support an additional paragraph about his NHL career 2013–23. 64 percent of the article is about the Ducks, but our lead barely talks about his time in Anaheim. Done
The Ducks L4 header is very long. It contains, no joke, 64 percent of the words in the entire article (2950/4582). Would having multiple Ducks headers be acceptable? It would certainly help readers!
Roland is his father's name. "In Sweden, a lot of people have a grandparent's name but maybe not all of them," Rakell said, smiling. "I think my mom (Annika) ...
41 Plymouth Whalers OHL Rickard Rakell 05/05/1993 AIK Sweden RW 6.00 185 2011
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The Ducks also recalled center Rickard Rakell from Norfolk and reassigned center Peter Holland. Rakell has six points (four goals, two assists) with six penalty minutes in 11 games for the Admirals, and co-led the team in scoring, goals and appearances. The youngest player to appear in a game for the Ducks (19 years, eight months, 14 days), Rakell was assigned to Norfolk on Oct. 31.He had 5 points before per ref [25], so this checks out.
Ducks rookie center Rickard Rakell is expected to start on the first line alongside star Corey Perry and recent minor league call-up Emerson Etem of Long Beach.
Rakell is the first Ducks player to record his first career goal in the playoffs (courtesy Elias Sports Bureau).
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Palmieri played with Kesler and Matt Beleskey in Games 1 and 2 of the first round before he was moved to the third line with Rakell and Cogliano.
Rakell has gone from 20 goals in 72 games last season to a Ducks-leading 32 in 65 games this season. Rakell leads the League with 10 game-winning goals.
Additionally, Rakell's 0.49 goals per game is sixth among those who have played at least 20 games. His 27 even-strength goals are tied for third with Chicago Blackhawks forward Patrick Kane.
It was Rakell's fourth goal in two games. He has an NHL career-high 53 points, two more than he had in 71 games last season.
Pittsburgh added more firepower for a playoff run when they acquired Rickard Rakell from the Anaheim Ducks prior to the 2022 NHL Trade Deadline on March 21. The speedy playmaking forward had 13 points (four goals, nine assists) in 19 regular-season games for the Penguins.
Through 49 games this season, Rakell has scored 18 goals and 15 assists for 33 points and has brought his steady presence no matter the line he’s on.
Earwig flags a fair number of stat descriptions that are not creative prose: co-led the team in scoring, goals and appearances, and ranked second in power-play goals
and sixth youngest player to appear in a game for the Ducks at 19 years, eight months and 14 days
are the longest, and you can try rewording, but I'm not sure how many other ways there are to say the same thing.
There are three images, all CC-licensed. Encouragement: Add
alt text. Done