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Reviewer: Vortex3427 ( talk · contribs) 07:18, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
Taking this up.
@ Sawyer-mcdonell: I haven't even heard of South Ossetia before looking at this, so feel free to disagree, but here are my initial thoughts. I will be back tomorrow with spotchecks and maybe more suggestions.
South Ossetian Orthodox, along with the Abkhazian Orthodox ChurchAdd "Church", or alternatively South Ossentian and Abkhazian Orthodox Churches.
After the establishment of the independent churchWhen was the South Ossentian Orthodox Church established? Also the next sentence starts with
After the ROC denied to incorporate the South Ossetians into the Moscow Patriarchate("denied incorporating"), so maybe the "After the establishment" sentence could be placed before the "In 1992" sentence for chronology?
Styr Nykhas (Great Council)This is what language? It might be a good idea to include translations of the religions in Russian and/or Ossetian if you can find them, although this is optional and I don't see similar articles doing this consistently.
the Alans (ancestors of the Ossetians) nominally converted to ChristianityYou mention in the lede and the next section this is because of Byzantine influences, but not in the section about Christianity
only one Jew, an elderly woman, remained in the TskhinvaliAccording to the NBC source, she's the only Jew in South Ossetia.
@ Vortex3427 I've addressed the suggestions so far, with the exception of the religious freedom stuff, which I aim to get done with today. Thanks for your feedback! :) sawyer * he/they * talk 19:40, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
Tskhinvali, the largest city in South Ossetia, historically had a large Jewish community, which sometimes outnumbered the Georgian population.Expand citation from p. 17 to pp. 17–18 to cover the last bit.
Relations between the Tskhinvali Jews and the other ethnic groups of the city were largely peaceful, although there was tension and some violence in the period following the Bolshevik Revolution.should be cited to p. 18 instead.
led by Alexandr Pukhate, which aimed to separate from the Georgian ChurchHis first name is given as "Aleksandr" on p. 274. (I see Conroy uses this spelling)
In 2005, the Alania Diocese was created, and Pukhate consecrated a bishop by the Synod.Referred to as the "Alan Diocese" in the source, although Conroy clarifies the naming. Maybe append this with a citation of Conroy?
Uatsdinshould be italicized;
Ossetianand
nationalist-orientedto Ossetian nationalism. Also link eparchy
capital of South Ossetia TskhinvaliAdd commas or rearrange.
the ROC denied these requestsinclude motives, e.g. Matsuzato, p. 283 "considering canonical principle and friendly relations with the OCG [GOC] as more important"
some five parishes remained with the Georgian ChurchWorth including that 15 local churches joined the South Ossetian orthodox community? (Matsuzato, p. 274)
denied to incorporatesounds awkward somehow. "Denied incorporating" or "refused to incorporate"
efforts to organize it"It", more specifically, Ossetian "mythology to formal religion".
One major annual ritual in South Ossetia takes place at the Usanet dzuar shrineSince this part is specific to South Ossetia it might be appropriate to give more info on the origins of this tradition as Foltz does (or the info might be better on the currently redlinked article).
Precisely because the lines between Ossetian tradition and imported Abrahamic religions are often so fluid, the Uatsdin movement has triggered strong condemnations and oflcial complaints from Ossetia’s Christian and Muslim leaders.Info might be worth including (Foltz, p. 331).
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Reviewer: Vortex3427 ( talk · contribs) 07:18, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
Taking this up.
@ Sawyer-mcdonell: I haven't even heard of South Ossetia before looking at this, so feel free to disagree, but here are my initial thoughts. I will be back tomorrow with spotchecks and maybe more suggestions.
South Ossetian Orthodox, along with the Abkhazian Orthodox ChurchAdd "Church", or alternatively South Ossentian and Abkhazian Orthodox Churches.
After the establishment of the independent churchWhen was the South Ossentian Orthodox Church established? Also the next sentence starts with
After the ROC denied to incorporate the South Ossetians into the Moscow Patriarchate("denied incorporating"), so maybe the "After the establishment" sentence could be placed before the "In 1992" sentence for chronology?
Styr Nykhas (Great Council)This is what language? It might be a good idea to include translations of the religions in Russian and/or Ossetian if you can find them, although this is optional and I don't see similar articles doing this consistently.
the Alans (ancestors of the Ossetians) nominally converted to ChristianityYou mention in the lede and the next section this is because of Byzantine influences, but not in the section about Christianity
only one Jew, an elderly woman, remained in the TskhinvaliAccording to the NBC source, she's the only Jew in South Ossetia.
@ Vortex3427 I've addressed the suggestions so far, with the exception of the religious freedom stuff, which I aim to get done with today. Thanks for your feedback! :) sawyer * he/they * talk 19:40, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
Tskhinvali, the largest city in South Ossetia, historically had a large Jewish community, which sometimes outnumbered the Georgian population.Expand citation from p. 17 to pp. 17–18 to cover the last bit.
Relations between the Tskhinvali Jews and the other ethnic groups of the city were largely peaceful, although there was tension and some violence in the period following the Bolshevik Revolution.should be cited to p. 18 instead.
led by Alexandr Pukhate, which aimed to separate from the Georgian ChurchHis first name is given as "Aleksandr" on p. 274. (I see Conroy uses this spelling)
In 2005, the Alania Diocese was created, and Pukhate consecrated a bishop by the Synod.Referred to as the "Alan Diocese" in the source, although Conroy clarifies the naming. Maybe append this with a citation of Conroy?
Uatsdinshould be italicized;
Ossetianand
nationalist-orientedto Ossetian nationalism. Also link eparchy
capital of South Ossetia TskhinvaliAdd commas or rearrange.
the ROC denied these requestsinclude motives, e.g. Matsuzato, p. 283 "considering canonical principle and friendly relations with the OCG [GOC] as more important"
some five parishes remained with the Georgian ChurchWorth including that 15 local churches joined the South Ossetian orthodox community? (Matsuzato, p. 274)
denied to incorporatesounds awkward somehow. "Denied incorporating" or "refused to incorporate"
efforts to organize it"It", more specifically, Ossetian "mythology to formal religion".
One major annual ritual in South Ossetia takes place at the Usanet dzuar shrineSince this part is specific to South Ossetia it might be appropriate to give more info on the origins of this tradition as Foltz does (or the info might be better on the currently redlinked article).
Precisely because the lines between Ossetian tradition and imported Abrahamic religions are often so fluid, the Uatsdin movement has triggered strong condemnations and oflcial complaints from Ossetia’s Christian and Muslim leaders.Info might be worth including (Foltz, p. 331).