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Reviewer: Steelkamp ( talk · contribs) 14:49, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
Hello. I will be reviewing this article. I aim to complete the review within the next few days. If you would like to return the favour, I have several good article nominations active right now (including some railway stations), which you can find at WP:GAN. Good luck. Steelkamp ( talk) 14:49, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
An air lift was used to remove the mud slurry along with a tremie pipe at the bottom of the drilling hole.– Does this mean
An air lift and a tremie pipe at the bottom of the drilling hole were used to remove the mud slurry.? Steelkamp ( talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
with the machine's inability to discharge the drill cuttings (mud slurry).– Should this instead be
due to the machine's inability to discharge the drill cuttings (mud slurry).? Steelkamp ( talk) 15:47, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
newer buildings were constructed– Who constructed the new buildings. Private enterprise or the government? Steelkamp ( talk) 15:47, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
when the line extension to Outram Park station was completed.As it was an extension, was there a previous section already opened? From what station was the extension from? It also says
Phase I MRT segmentearlier in the article. Could you provide some clarity. Was that segment the first segment of the entire system or is it just the extension? Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
Raffles Place station is one of the two paired cross-platform interchanges– This is confusing. Does it mean one of two stations which are paired cross-platform interchanges? Or one of the stations which are two paired cross-platform interchanges. I don't even know what this means. It should be clearer to the reader. Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
Like the adjacent City Hall stations– Should this be
City Hall station? Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
From 28 October 1989, it began to serve the NSL when MRT operations were split.– This kinda implies that the station didn't serve the EWL, but from reading the rest of the article, that is not the case. Footnote doesn't clear it up either. Replace it with something like this:
From 28 October 1989, it began to serve the NSL as well as the EWL when MRT operations were split.Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
The concrete frame was designed to prevent any corrosion and floatation of the tunnels.– How about {[tq|The concrete frame was designed to prevent any corrosion or floatation of the tunnels.}} Steelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
Due to requirements by the Ministry of Environment ensuring that the work site does not occupy more than 40% of the river width– How about
Due to requirements from the Ministry of Environment that the work site does not occupy more than 40% of the river widthSteelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
the work would proceed in three stages.– Why doesn't it just say
the work proceeded in three stages.Steelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
I will put this on hold. I will check all the sources after the prose improvements are done. Steelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Steelkamp ( talk · contribs) 14:49, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
Hello. I will be reviewing this article. I aim to complete the review within the next few days. If you would like to return the favour, I have several good article nominations active right now (including some railway stations), which you can find at WP:GAN. Good luck. Steelkamp ( talk) 14:49, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
An air lift was used to remove the mud slurry along with a tremie pipe at the bottom of the drilling hole.– Does this mean
An air lift and a tremie pipe at the bottom of the drilling hole were used to remove the mud slurry.? Steelkamp ( talk) 15:46, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
with the machine's inability to discharge the drill cuttings (mud slurry).– Should this instead be
due to the machine's inability to discharge the drill cuttings (mud slurry).? Steelkamp ( talk) 15:47, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
newer buildings were constructed– Who constructed the new buildings. Private enterprise or the government? Steelkamp ( talk) 15:47, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
when the line extension to Outram Park station was completed.As it was an extension, was there a previous section already opened? From what station was the extension from? It also says
Phase I MRT segmentearlier in the article. Could you provide some clarity. Was that segment the first segment of the entire system or is it just the extension? Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
Raffles Place station is one of the two paired cross-platform interchanges– This is confusing. Does it mean one of two stations which are paired cross-platform interchanges? Or one of the stations which are two paired cross-platform interchanges. I don't even know what this means. It should be clearer to the reader. Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
Like the adjacent City Hall stations– Should this be
City Hall station? Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
From 28 October 1989, it began to serve the NSL when MRT operations were split.– This kinda implies that the station didn't serve the EWL, but from reading the rest of the article, that is not the case. Footnote doesn't clear it up either. Replace it with something like this:
From 28 October 1989, it began to serve the NSL as well as the EWL when MRT operations were split.Steelkamp ( talk) 04:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
The concrete frame was designed to prevent any corrosion and floatation of the tunnels.– How about {[tq|The concrete frame was designed to prevent any corrosion or floatation of the tunnels.}} Steelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
Due to requirements by the Ministry of Environment ensuring that the work site does not occupy more than 40% of the river width– How about
Due to requirements from the Ministry of Environment that the work site does not occupy more than 40% of the river widthSteelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
the work would proceed in three stages.– Why doesn't it just say
the work proceeded in three stages.Steelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
I will put this on hold. I will check all the sources after the prose improvements are done. Steelkamp ( talk) 04:40, 19 April 2022 (UTC)