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Reviewer: Vami IV ( talk · contribs) 18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠ 18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
As this the first of the reviewee's articles that I have reviewed, they should note that I am a grammar pendant and will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. – ♠Vami _IV†♠ 18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
There seems to be some missing pieces in "History". Specific examples I can think of are "Why were the buses so dirty in the 1970s?" and "Why, and for how long, was the City nationalizing the transport companies?"
(NYCDOT)First and only time this is used.
Due to franchise restrictions with the cityWithin the city?
Following MTA takeover in 2006the MTA takeover
where several bus routes including the B41 terminatePlace commas before "where" and after "B41".
before entering the Marine Parkway–Gil Hodges Memorial Bridge [...] just north of the Rockaway Park–Beach 116th Street [...] in front of Neponsit Beach Hospital.Overlinked
buses turn west then turn northRemove the second "turn".
"Deathmobiles" was a reference to Mayor Koch's use of a blue Chrysler Newport that he described as a "deathmobile".[59][60]Irrelevant, remove.
Following the MTA takeover in 2006, several stops in Brooklyn were eliminated to streamline service. Essentially, the Q35 makes limited-stops in Brooklyn, while operating as a local in Queens.I'd combine this with the last sentence of the lead's first paragraph.
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@ Vami IV: Due to Passover, I won't be able to do any editing from tonight until Thursday evening at the earliest. I am still committed to addressing your concerns with the article. Thanks for your patience and stay safe. @ Epicgenius: Thanks so much for helping out!-- Kew Gardens 613 ( talk) 23:11, 14 April 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Vami IV ( talk · contribs) 18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. — ♠Vami _IV†♠ 18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
As this the first of the reviewee's articles that I have reviewed, they should note that I am a grammar pendant and will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. – ♠Vami _IV†♠ 18:18, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
There seems to be some missing pieces in "History". Specific examples I can think of are "Why were the buses so dirty in the 1970s?" and "Why, and for how long, was the City nationalizing the transport companies?"
(NYCDOT)First and only time this is used.
Due to franchise restrictions with the cityWithin the city?
Following MTA takeover in 2006the MTA takeover
where several bus routes including the B41 terminatePlace commas before "where" and after "B41".
before entering the Marine Parkway–Gil Hodges Memorial Bridge [...] just north of the Rockaway Park–Beach 116th Street [...] in front of Neponsit Beach Hospital.Overlinked
buses turn west then turn northRemove the second "turn".
"Deathmobiles" was a reference to Mayor Koch's use of a blue Chrysler Newport that he described as a "deathmobile".[59][60]Irrelevant, remove.
Following the MTA takeover in 2006, several stops in Brooklyn were eliminated to streamline service. Essentially, the Q35 makes limited-stops in Brooklyn, while operating as a local in Queens.I'd combine this with the last sentence of the lead's first paragraph.
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@ Vami IV: Due to Passover, I won't be able to do any editing from tonight until Thursday evening at the earliest. I am still committed to addressing your concerns with the article. Thanks for your patience and stay safe. @ Epicgenius: Thanks so much for helping out!-- Kew Gardens 613 ( talk) 23:11, 14 April 2020 (UTC)