GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: Eric Corbett ( talk · contribs) 23:54, 19 August 2013 (UTC)
"The 18 steps leading to the temple is believed to represent the 18 chapters of Bhagawat Gita".
"... the 108 Vishnu temples that are reverred in the Vaishnava canon".
"The sage asked the king to perform an ablution with milk on the hole."How do you put milk on a hole?
"As requested, the king brought 3700 Vaishnavites from the North and built the temple."Why is "North" capitalised?
"While doing so, one of the Vaishnavites died and the king was highly worried."Were the two events synchronous, or did the king become highly worried because of the death of one of the Vaishnavites? How do you become "highly worried" in any case? Something like "very concerned" would be more idiomatic.
"Pundarikakshan temple is believed to be built by the Pallavas ..."Should be "believed to have been built".
The temple
"Narasimha is shown holding the demon with the legs of two in interlocked position. The other panel shows Narsimha tearing the insides of the demon thrown in his legs.I have no idea what that means.
"It is designed such that a person entering through one of the four enclosures cannot be seen from the other three.Why is the temple tank designed like that? What's a temple tank anyway?
Festivals and religious practises
" The worship is held amidst music with nagaswaram (pipe instrument) and tavil (percussion instrument), religious instructions in the Vedas (sacred text) recited by priests and prostration by worshipers in front of the temple mast.Doesn't really make sense. Consider "The worship is held amidst ... prostration by worshipers in front of the temple mast." Need to check the spelling there too. What's a temple mast anyway? Eric Corbett 01:34, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
Lead
"The temple is believed to be of significant antiquity and is believed to be initiated by the Pallavas of the late 8th century AD".Tense is wrong.
"... with later contributions from Medieval Cholas, Later Pandyas, Vijayanagar kings and Madurai Nayaks. What's a "Later Pandya"?
"The temple has three inscriptions in the two rock-cut caves".As we haven't yet been told of any rock-cut caves this ought to be rephrased as "its two rock-cut caves".
"... two of them dating back to the period of Nandivarman".When was that?
"The temple is enshrined within a granite wall and the complex contains all the shrines and six of the seven water bodies associated with it.Associated with what? The temple? What does "associated with" mean in this context? What does "enshrined within" mean? Surrounded by?
"The rajagopuram (the gateway tower) is left unfinished."The tense is wrong.
"Pundarikakshan is believed to have appeared for Garuda (the sacred eagle bird of Vishnu), king Sibi Chakravarthy ...".Why is "king" not capitalised?
"It is counted as the fourth among the 108 divyadesam dedicated to Vishnu".Why "counted as the fourth", rather just the fourth? What's the significance of it being the fourth, as opposed to the third or fifth?
"The Vijayanagar and Nayak kings contributed to the paintings in the walls of the shrine".Are the paintings in the walls or on the walls? What does "contributed to" mean in this context?
"... a village in the outskirts of the Tiruchirapalli in the South Indian state of Tamil Nadu". Should that be Tiruchirappalli? Why the Tiruchirapalli?
"Outside the second precinct ...".There's no context for this. How many precincts are there?
"The temple is believed to have been initiated by the Pallavas of the late 8th century AD".How do you "initiate" a temple"?
"The Vijayanagar and Nayak kings initiated the paintings on the walls of the shrine".Again, "initiated" can't be the right word here. "Commissioned"?
"... a practice followed across different centuries"Not sure what that means. A practice followed over many centuries?
"The temple is surrounded by a granite wall enclosing all the shrines".How many shrines are there?
"The Vijayanagar and Nayak kings commissioned paintings on the walls of the shrine".As there's apparently more than one shrine, which one are we talking about?
Legend
"... when a white boar crossed him".Does that mean when a white boar crossed his path?
"Vishnu appeared for both Shiva and Brahma, adhering to their prayer."Should that "appeared to"? What does "adhering to their prayer mean"? Only one prayer?
"While doing so, one of the Vaishnavites was killed in transit and the king was concerned by the accident."The chronology doesn't work here, as the previous sentence ended "and built the temple". So "while doing so" appears to be referring to the building of the temple, which makes nonsense of "in transit".
"The Hindu god Shiva in Neelivaneswarar Temple is believed to have worshipped Pundarikakshan at the temple to absolve him of his sin in holding Brahma's cut head"I can't really make sense of that sentence. What has Neelivaneswarar Temple got to do with it?
History
"The temple came in full shape presumably during the time of Dantivarman."What does "came in full shape mean"?
Architecture
"Swastik tank, with stepped entrances in all four sides, was built during 800 AD".Should that be swastika?
"The walls around the temple ...".How high are the walls? How thick? What are they made of? Are they rectangular? Square? Circular?
"... in the most notable of which he is depicted as a pot dancer".What's a pot dancer?
Festivals and religious practices
"Subsequently, the festive idols are taken to the launch pad of the chariot."A launch pad is what you launch rockets from.
I've found this to be quite a difficult review, and I don't doubt the nominator has as well, but on reading through the article again this evening I think it's getting close to meeting the GA criteria. I do though have one reservation about the positioning of the Legend section, which I think would fit more naturally between the Architecture and Religious significance sections. Eric Corbett 01:53, 11 September 2013 (UTC)
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: Eric Corbett ( talk · contribs) 23:54, 19 August 2013 (UTC)
"The 18 steps leading to the temple is believed to represent the 18 chapters of Bhagawat Gita".
"... the 108 Vishnu temples that are reverred in the Vaishnava canon".
"The sage asked the king to perform an ablution with milk on the hole."How do you put milk on a hole?
"As requested, the king brought 3700 Vaishnavites from the North and built the temple."Why is "North" capitalised?
"While doing so, one of the Vaishnavites died and the king was highly worried."Were the two events synchronous, or did the king become highly worried because of the death of one of the Vaishnavites? How do you become "highly worried" in any case? Something like "very concerned" would be more idiomatic.
"Pundarikakshan temple is believed to be built by the Pallavas ..."Should be "believed to have been built".
The temple
"Narasimha is shown holding the demon with the legs of two in interlocked position. The other panel shows Narsimha tearing the insides of the demon thrown in his legs.I have no idea what that means.
"It is designed such that a person entering through one of the four enclosures cannot be seen from the other three.Why is the temple tank designed like that? What's a temple tank anyway?
Festivals and religious practises
" The worship is held amidst music with nagaswaram (pipe instrument) and tavil (percussion instrument), religious instructions in the Vedas (sacred text) recited by priests and prostration by worshipers in front of the temple mast.Doesn't really make sense. Consider "The worship is held amidst ... prostration by worshipers in front of the temple mast." Need to check the spelling there too. What's a temple mast anyway? Eric Corbett 01:34, 21 August 2013 (UTC)
Lead
"The temple is believed to be of significant antiquity and is believed to be initiated by the Pallavas of the late 8th century AD".Tense is wrong.
"... with later contributions from Medieval Cholas, Later Pandyas, Vijayanagar kings and Madurai Nayaks. What's a "Later Pandya"?
"The temple has three inscriptions in the two rock-cut caves".As we haven't yet been told of any rock-cut caves this ought to be rephrased as "its two rock-cut caves".
"... two of them dating back to the period of Nandivarman".When was that?
"The temple is enshrined within a granite wall and the complex contains all the shrines and six of the seven water bodies associated with it.Associated with what? The temple? What does "associated with" mean in this context? What does "enshrined within" mean? Surrounded by?
"The rajagopuram (the gateway tower) is left unfinished."The tense is wrong.
"Pundarikakshan is believed to have appeared for Garuda (the sacred eagle bird of Vishnu), king Sibi Chakravarthy ...".Why is "king" not capitalised?
"It is counted as the fourth among the 108 divyadesam dedicated to Vishnu".Why "counted as the fourth", rather just the fourth? What's the significance of it being the fourth, as opposed to the third or fifth?
"The Vijayanagar and Nayak kings contributed to the paintings in the walls of the shrine".Are the paintings in the walls or on the walls? What does "contributed to" mean in this context?
"... a village in the outskirts of the Tiruchirapalli in the South Indian state of Tamil Nadu". Should that be Tiruchirappalli? Why the Tiruchirapalli?
"Outside the second precinct ...".There's no context for this. How many precincts are there?
"The temple is believed to have been initiated by the Pallavas of the late 8th century AD".How do you "initiate" a temple"?
"The Vijayanagar and Nayak kings initiated the paintings on the walls of the shrine".Again, "initiated" can't be the right word here. "Commissioned"?
"... a practice followed across different centuries"Not sure what that means. A practice followed over many centuries?
"The temple is surrounded by a granite wall enclosing all the shrines".How many shrines are there?
"The Vijayanagar and Nayak kings commissioned paintings on the walls of the shrine".As there's apparently more than one shrine, which one are we talking about?
Legend
"... when a white boar crossed him".Does that mean when a white boar crossed his path?
"Vishnu appeared for both Shiva and Brahma, adhering to their prayer."Should that "appeared to"? What does "adhering to their prayer mean"? Only one prayer?
"While doing so, one of the Vaishnavites was killed in transit and the king was concerned by the accident."The chronology doesn't work here, as the previous sentence ended "and built the temple". So "while doing so" appears to be referring to the building of the temple, which makes nonsense of "in transit".
"The Hindu god Shiva in Neelivaneswarar Temple is believed to have worshipped Pundarikakshan at the temple to absolve him of his sin in holding Brahma's cut head"I can't really make sense of that sentence. What has Neelivaneswarar Temple got to do with it?
History
"The temple came in full shape presumably during the time of Dantivarman."What does "came in full shape mean"?
Architecture
"Swastik tank, with stepped entrances in all four sides, was built during 800 AD".Should that be swastika?
"The walls around the temple ...".How high are the walls? How thick? What are they made of? Are they rectangular? Square? Circular?
"... in the most notable of which he is depicted as a pot dancer".What's a pot dancer?
Festivals and religious practices
"Subsequently, the festive idols are taken to the launch pad of the chariot."A launch pad is what you launch rockets from.
I've found this to be quite a difficult review, and I don't doubt the nominator has as well, but on reading through the article again this evening I think it's getting close to meeting the GA criteria. I do though have one reservation about the positioning of the Legend section, which I think would fit more naturally between the Architecture and Religious significance sections. Eric Corbett 01:53, 11 September 2013 (UTC)