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First readthrough is done; nothing jumps out at me
Due to its size, I'll be doing this in sections starting tomorrow--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 23:55, 19 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Earwig says 47.9%, but I think that that's a result of the extensive use of quotes.
Sturmvogel 66 Quotes have been reduced so everything should be better on earwig now. -- ZooBlazer 03:12, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
You did a really good job properly marking and citing your quotes so that really wasn't anything that I was concerned about. I'll be able to resume reviewing on Monday.
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 00:56, 24 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Marvel simply shortened the first as Avengers: Infinity War and left the second as untitled that July. Awkward. I'd suggest moving the date to the beginning of the sentence
After Starlin, who created Thanos, Gamora, and Drax, expressed dissatisfaction with his pay for the aforementioned characters,[103] Disney renegotiated his agreement for Thanos's appearance in Infinity War and Endgame. This is out of place as it has little to nothing to do with the paragraph in which it's located.
Removed it because I'm not sure it even fit the article. -- ZooBlazer
I have restore this but moved it and gave it a c/e, hopefully it works better now? -
adamstom97 (
talk) 18:16, 26 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Link agent, maquette, production designer, time travel, credits, cross-board
Mostly done. Linked a couple types of agents and I don't think there is a suitable link for cross-board. -- ZooBlazer
Then can you elaborate the explanation a bit?--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 17:49, 26 March 2024 (UTC)reply
It's part of a direct quote referring to not being able to film the movies back to back. I think it is pretty easy to figure out what is being said in that situation. -- ZooBlazer
Champion only had a one-day shoot which he spent with Paul Rudd, whom he felt to be one of the friendly actors he has worked with due to how they spent that whole day together. Awkward, rephrase
Removed the last part starting with "due" -- ZooBlazer
Add a hyphen to time travel suit because it's a compound adjective
Link Edinburgh, Glasgow, Thailand, mise-en-scène, blocking, visual effect plates
All done except blocking, which is already linked, and visual effect plates which doesn't have a good article to link to other than probably just
visual effects. -- ZooBlazer
I was really hoping that there was a link for visual effect plates as that term really doesn't make sense on its own, even when reading the source article. It appears to be a term of art within the industry possibly descended from matte painting and/or compositing, but at least readers are told it relates to visual effects.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 07:59, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Additionally, a rig and feather groom was also used in order to put Howard into the VFX team's pipeline and animation. what does this even mean? There's also a mistake in the quote.
Fixed the wording. A feather groom is just a physical visual on set for the VFX team to use. -- ZooBlazer
Looks good, but I'm still balking on pipeline and animation. The two seem incongruous. One or the other?--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 09:08, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I have done a further c/e, some of the more technical VFX details weren't needed. -
adamstom97 (
talk) 09:26, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I've tweaked the wording a little. Feel free to revert if desired.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 09:54, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
You've done a superb job with this article. I'd recommend that you nominate it for FAC.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 08:14, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Appreciate it. Getting this to FAC would be great. I know some things would need cleaned up further for those standards, including replacing or removing many lower tier refs like Screen Rant, which are fine for GA, but not great for FA. Also, addressed your newest comments
Sturmvogel 66. -- ZooBlazer 08:31, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
First readthrough is done; nothing jumps out at me
Due to its size, I'll be doing this in sections starting tomorrow--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 23:55, 19 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Earwig says 47.9%, but I think that that's a result of the extensive use of quotes.
Sturmvogel 66 Quotes have been reduced so everything should be better on earwig now. -- ZooBlazer 03:12, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
You did a really good job properly marking and citing your quotes so that really wasn't anything that I was concerned about. I'll be able to resume reviewing on Monday.
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 00:56, 24 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Marvel simply shortened the first as Avengers: Infinity War and left the second as untitled that July. Awkward. I'd suggest moving the date to the beginning of the sentence
After Starlin, who created Thanos, Gamora, and Drax, expressed dissatisfaction with his pay for the aforementioned characters,[103] Disney renegotiated his agreement for Thanos's appearance in Infinity War and Endgame. This is out of place as it has little to nothing to do with the paragraph in which it's located.
Removed it because I'm not sure it even fit the article. -- ZooBlazer
I have restore this but moved it and gave it a c/e, hopefully it works better now? -
adamstom97 (
talk) 18:16, 26 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Link agent, maquette, production designer, time travel, credits, cross-board
Mostly done. Linked a couple types of agents and I don't think there is a suitable link for cross-board. -- ZooBlazer
Then can you elaborate the explanation a bit?--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 17:49, 26 March 2024 (UTC)reply
It's part of a direct quote referring to not being able to film the movies back to back. I think it is pretty easy to figure out what is being said in that situation. -- ZooBlazer
Champion only had a one-day shoot which he spent with Paul Rudd, whom he felt to be one of the friendly actors he has worked with due to how they spent that whole day together. Awkward, rephrase
Removed the last part starting with "due" -- ZooBlazer
Add a hyphen to time travel suit because it's a compound adjective
Link Edinburgh, Glasgow, Thailand, mise-en-scène, blocking, visual effect plates
All done except blocking, which is already linked, and visual effect plates which doesn't have a good article to link to other than probably just
visual effects. -- ZooBlazer
I was really hoping that there was a link for visual effect plates as that term really doesn't make sense on its own, even when reading the source article. It appears to be a term of art within the industry possibly descended from matte painting and/or compositing, but at least readers are told it relates to visual effects.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 07:59, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Additionally, a rig and feather groom was also used in order to put Howard into the VFX team's pipeline and animation. what does this even mean? There's also a mistake in the quote.
Fixed the wording. A feather groom is just a physical visual on set for the VFX team to use. -- ZooBlazer
Looks good, but I'm still balking on pipeline and animation. The two seem incongruous. One or the other?--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 09:08, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I have done a further c/e, some of the more technical VFX details weren't needed. -
adamstom97 (
talk) 09:26, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I've tweaked the wording a little. Feel free to revert if desired.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 09:54, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
You've done a superb job with this article. I'd recommend that you nominate it for FAC.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
talk) 08:14, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Appreciate it. Getting this to FAC would be great. I know some things would need cleaned up further for those standards, including replacing or removing many lower tier refs like Screen Rant, which are fine for GA, but not great for FA. Also, addressed your newest comments
Sturmvogel 66. -- ZooBlazer 08:31, 27 March 2024 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.